Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
In any other story this Anna's jealousy might seem cliched. But it really works here. First it shows that Anna maybe emotionally starting a new chapter of her life. Second it shows that Bobby didn't damage her esteem so much that the idea of being loved by a good man is alien to her. Now we just need her to believe that this man is worthy of her, and not that she doesn't deserve a good man.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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In any other story this Anna's jealousy might seem cliched. But it really works here. First it shows that Anna maybe emotionally starting a new chapter of her life. Second it shows that Bobby didn't damage her esteem so much that the idea of being loved by a good man is alien to her. Now we just need her to believe that this man is worthy of her, and not that she doesn't deserve a good man.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from rzubey
I saw a romance novel obstacle in this installment. I'm glad you explained right away that the woman with Troy was his secretary. But why were they buying grocries together? I just hope that it doesn't get Anna in trouble. I'm really scared for her now because Troy seems to be her protector if nothing else.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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I saw a romance novel obstacle in this installment. I'm glad you explained right away that the woman with Troy was his secretary. But why were they buying grocries together? I just hope that it doesn't get Anna in trouble. I'm really scared for her now because Troy seems to be her protector if nothing else.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
"I'll change you, [and] then we'll rock for a while --- If you don't want "and," make two sentences out of it.
Now[] I know why he always tells his dad staying away from me won't be a problem. He's involved with someone[ else].
Troy took out his cell, [and] then replaced it. She won't answer[] right now.
She'll have to let me in, [and] then we can talk.
When Troy returned with the rest of the groceries[,] the two he'd left were gone and 'thank you' was written on a note taped to the door with a promise to repay him once her new checks came in.
He shook his head. "Here's the last of the groceries. You can't avoid me forever. There's no need to repay me. 'Bye." He started to leave, then returned and knocked. "The gate was open when I drove in, so you need to watch that. This complex isn't completely secure." He scratched his head. "Um, see you around." He went to his car and left. -- Since he's doing so much talking through the door, why doesn't he just call out that nancy's his secretary. Some guys are sure stupid.
She studied the chicken [and] then placed it in the refrigerator.
Roberta
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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"I'll change you, [and] then we'll rock for a while --- If you don't want "and," make two sentences out of it.
Now[] I know why he always tells his dad staying away from me won't be a problem. He's involved with someone[ else].
Troy took out his cell, [and] then replaced it. She won't answer[] right now.
She'll have to let me in, [and] then we can talk.
When Troy returned with the rest of the groceries[,] the two he'd left were gone and 'thank you' was written on a note taped to the door with a promise to repay him once her new checks came in.
He shook his head. "Here's the last of the groceries. You can't avoid me forever. There's no need to repay me. 'Bye." He started to leave, then returned and knocked. "The gate was open when I drove in, so you need to watch that. This complex isn't completely secure." He scratched his head. "Um, see you around." He went to his car and left. -- Since he's doing so much talking through the door, why doesn't he just call out that nancy's his secretary. Some guys are sure stupid.
She studied the chicken [and] then placed it in the refrigerator.
Roberta
Comment Written 17-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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thank you
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Nicely written. Seems normal for this to be an emotional time for Anna-so much has happened, and though good, is also stressful. She is seing jealousy from the other side now~Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Nicely written. Seems normal for this to be an emotional time for Anna-so much has happened, and though good, is also stressful. She is seing jealousy from the other side now~Debbie
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, I've been away for awhile, so just spent some time catching up on your writing. Am so happy that Anna has trusted in these people and gotten help. It would be so humbling to accept all that Paul, his wife and Troy are doing for her. And, yeah, the secretary thing, to put a fly in the ointment. LOL.... but, hope all will end well, which I'm looking forward to. Great story that I'm enjoying, as always. Jerri
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Barbara, I've been away for awhile, so just spent some time catching up on your writing. Am so happy that Anna has trusted in these people and gotten help. It would be so humbling to accept all that Paul, his wife and Troy are doing for her. And, yeah, the secretary thing, to put a fly in the ointment. LOL.... but, hope all will end well, which I'm looking forward to. Great story that I'm enjoying, as always. Jerri
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara, this is an interesting break from the norm and adds a lot of zing to this part of the story that I think was ingenious and captivating. Made me want to read the next part right away. I love this and think others will also. How we do jump to conclusions. Blessings and hope you are doing well and that school is not too taxing. Queenise
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Barbara, this is an interesting break from the norm and adds a lot of zing to this part of the story that I think was ingenious and captivating. Made me want to read the next part right away. I love this and think others will also. How we do jump to conclusions. Blessings and hope you are doing well and that school is not too taxing. Queenise
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome,Barbara. Queenise
Comment from rchitwood
Good job writing this story and I am keeping up with Troy and Anna.Your story has good dialogue and characters,Very believable and It keeps the reader interested.Blessings Rita
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Good job writing this story and I am keeping up with Troy and Anna.Your story has good dialogue and characters,Very believable and It keeps the reader interested.Blessings Rita
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
Anna really got the wrong idea about the relationship between Troy and the woman. She probably thought the relationship between Troy and her were too good to be true. When she thinks he is involved with another woman, it made sense to her. She was expecting the worse and got it.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Anna really got the wrong idea about the relationship between Troy and the woman. She probably thought the relationship between Troy and her were too good to be true. When she thinks he is involved with another woman, it made sense to her. She was expecting the worse and got it.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sunnilicious
Murder and it's not Anna?!!! I see irony in that somewhere. This storyline just gets better and better. Apples and oranges lost to grapes and pineapple... that may be a first. I know, it could be in the cart already. I never heard of such a spat before. Love spats. What to do?
Good work. Keep it up.
All the best,
Alicia
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Murder and it's not Anna?!!! I see irony in that somewhere. This storyline just gets better and better. Apples and oranges lost to grapes and pineapple... that may be a first. I know, it could be in the cart already. I never heard of such a spat before. Love spats. What to do?
Good work. Keep it up.
All the best,
Alicia
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Mara del Mar
A great chapter, we wait that Troy can convince at Ana of that only is a misunderstanding of the what he heard and saw. Surely if. I like this chapter, congrats Barbara, as always, excellent..
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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A great chapter, we wait that Troy can convince at Ana of that only is a misunderstanding of the what he heard and saw. Surely if. I like this chapter, congrats Barbara, as always, excellent..
Comment Written 31-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.