Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "Part three, Chapter 14"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
I love this segment of home and hearth. It feels so real. From the self recriminations to the joy of Michael's first steps. This is a scene that could play out in any home. But the box thing really tugged at the momma bear in me. I remember a particular Christmas when my daughter spent the day playing with the tissue paper and box her gift came in. I could have saved myself a few dollars. lol
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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I love this segment of home and hearth. It feels so real. From the self recriminations to the joy of Michael's first steps. This is a scene that could play out in any home. But the box thing really tugged at the momma bear in me. I remember a particular Christmas when my daughter spent the day playing with the tissue paper and box her gift came in. I could have saved myself a few dollars. lol
Comment Written 03-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
How lovely! I enjoyed this chapter very much, Barbara. The dialogue is warm and very natural. Love the image of the wee one playing with the box, and those two steps at the end are just precious! Brought back sweet memories of my own wee lad, who isn't so 'wee' anymore. Very enjoyable read. :o)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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How lovely! I enjoyed this chapter very much, Barbara. The dialogue is warm and very natural. Love the image of the wee one playing with the box, and those two steps at the end are just precious! Brought back sweet memories of my own wee lad, who isn't so 'wee' anymore. Very enjoyable read. :o)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janice65
This is sounding like a good story and since I have just read a portion of it, I thought I would offer five stars. It will probably turn into a six stars novel.
At first, I was a little confused as to who each person was and what their relationship was with the main character. However, I soon figured who Anna was and Micheal the little one, etc. Troy was a stranger who Anna had just meant.
(Am I right?) Well written and easy to comprehend after reading more.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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This is sounding like a good story and since I have just read a portion of it, I thought I would offer five stars. It will probably turn into a six stars novel.
At first, I was a little confused as to who each person was and what their relationship was with the main character. However, I soon figured who Anna was and Micheal the little one, etc. Troy was a stranger who Anna had just meant.
(Am I right?) Well written and easy to comprehend after reading more.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Troy is the hero, who she met on the first page. He has helped her get out of an abusive relationship.
Comment from Jonesy
Hello,
It's been a while since I reviewed one of these chapters and we've already talked about how little narrative there is to support the dialogue, so no reason to continue that.
So, this is well written. I expected nothing less given the expertise I saw in the previous chapters. The dialogue has an intimate feel that I'm sure readers can appreciate.
***He's been teaching grandpa***
I'm sure the author knows this and an oversight, but just in case the rule is if words like "Dad" and "Grandpa" can be substituted with a real name it should be capped, so "grandpa" should here
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Hello,
It's been a while since I reviewed one of these chapters and we've already talked about how little narrative there is to support the dialogue, so no reason to continue that.
So, this is well written. I expected nothing less given the expertise I saw in the previous chapters. The dialogue has an intimate feel that I'm sure readers can appreciate.
***He's been teaching grandpa***
I'm sure the author knows this and an oversight, but just in case the rule is if words like "Dad" and "Grandpa" can be substituted with a real name it should be capped, so "grandpa" should here
Comment Written 05-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. Nobody mentioned it, but you are so right. I am happy you are back. I hope you are writing and posting.
Comment from stanzasandstuff
I left a violent and abusive husband years ago so this story resonates with me. There are so many victims, children included. Good on you for trying to end this destructive way of living!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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I left a violent and abusive husband years ago so this story resonates with me. There are so many victims, children included. Good on you for trying to end this destructive way of living!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Wonderful chapter addition to your book. this piece had a ton of good believeable dialogue, which I love. Thanks so much for sharing and keep it up!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Wonderful chapter addition to your book. this piece had a ton of good believeable dialogue, which I love. Thanks so much for sharing and keep it up!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Thank you or the kind review.
Comment from HPicasso
Another interesting exciting chapter. You have well defined your character's and the dialogue flows well. Anna is so lucky that she found such a supportive and caring family to help her and Michael. I look forwar to seeing how Anna and Troy go along in life.. Well done!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Another interesting exciting chapter. You have well defined your character's and the dialogue flows well. Anna is so lucky that she found such a supportive and caring family to help her and Michael. I look forwar to seeing how Anna and Troy go along in life.. Well done!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Great chapter, Barbara. Those first baby steps are one of the most precious thing a mother can see. I enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Great chapter, Barbara. Those first baby steps are one of the most precious thing a mother can see. I enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from writerwish
I have a lot to catch up on now. I've had some med problems. This continues to be my favorite story here. I like the way the conversation was interrupted by Troy. It makes it seem more realistic. A first step is such a big deal, but Troy states 'another interruption.' This seemed out of character for this perfect man.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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I have a lot to catch up on now. I've had some med problems. This continues to be my favorite story here. I like the way the conversation was interrupted by Troy. It makes it seem more realistic. A first step is such a big deal, but Troy states 'another interruption.' This seemed out of character for this perfect man.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much barbara. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It held my attention throughout.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much barbara. It is cleverly written and very well thought out. It held my attention throughout.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.