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Comment from
purrfect tale
I must be an evil person, because your last line so surprised me that I laughed. This one makes you think as well as feel. You got the human aspect and 25 syllables of the technical requirements.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from
Gungalo
LOL what a great naani you have written. Water boarding, eh? Whatever the source of your inspiration, keep it up and keep it going.Fantastic!!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2012
Thank you for reading and commenting.
reply by Gungalo on 11-Mar-2012
Comment from
mauial
Your syllabble count is off by three so you need to edit to meet the requirements. However, I love the progression of this and its conclusion caught me off guard.
Glad you edited.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2012
Thanks! I've since revised it. It was actually done in 25 words instead of syllables. Thanks again for the heads up.
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