Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "You Complete Me"Assorted poetry
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Comment from Joan E.
I don't know how I missed this one--but you nailed the form and the content is clever. I do know how difficult these short pieces are to create. You found the perfect picture to illustrate your point also. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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I don't know how I missed this one--but you nailed the form and the content is clever. I do know how difficult these short pieces are to create. You found the perfect picture to illustrate your point also. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 16-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Eleanor Buron
Well I had a good laugh. The poem is great and fills the criteria. The photo goes so well with this two-liner! I think you did a great job.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2012
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Well I had a good laugh. The poem is great and fills the criteria. The photo goes so well with this two-liner! I think you did a great job.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from DIS-illusioned
Please, take off the extra note in your Author Notes, as the contest rule doesn't allow for this.
Good contrasting feel from your line 1 to 2.
Good equal syllable count for both lines, and good end line rhymes. But I don't see/read the internal rhymes...?? Please, revise this and I'll re-rate.
Best of luck in the contest.
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UPDATED REVIEW:
Perfect internal rhymes now.
However, that second line, though contrasting with the first in feeling, still doesn't have a biting negativity. Still a good entry, though. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Please, take off the extra note in your Author Notes, as the contest rule doesn't allow for this.
Good contrasting feel from your line 1 to 2.
Good equal syllable count for both lines, and good end line rhymes. But I don't see/read the internal rhymes...?? Please, revise this and I'll re-rate.
Best of luck in the contest.
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UPDATED REVIEW:
Perfect internal rhymes now.
However, that second line, though contrasting with the first in feeling, still doesn't have a biting negativity. Still a good entry, though. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-May-2012
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Done and done.
Comment from Gloria ....
Author, this is very humorous and sadly too often true. I really like the Zsa Zsa Gabor quote. She has some good ones.
Only nit I noticed was:
Two lines of equal syllables and rhymng. (rhyming)
Best of luck in the contest. It's a good one!
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Author, this is very humorous and sadly too often true. I really like the Zsa Zsa Gabor quote. She has some good ones.
Only nit I noticed was:
Two lines of equal syllables and rhymng. (rhyming)
Best of luck in the contest. It's a good one!
Comment Written 18-May-2012
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from Barlock
I loved this prompt and even more so - its being complimented by a very appropriate artwork.
Well done!
Good luck in winning this contest!
I think you have a good chance.
Cheers,
JB
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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I loved this prompt and even more so - its being complimented by a very appropriate artwork.
Well done!
Good luck in winning this contest!
I think you have a good chance.
Cheers,
JB
Comment Written 18-May-2012
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Completed is funny because at first it sounds good and then you realize it means something negative. Great starter and finished wonderfully. Perfect short.
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Completed is funny because at first it sounds good and then you realize it means something negative. Great starter and finished wonderfully. Perfect short.
Comment Written 18-May-2012
reply by the author on 18-May-2012
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging review.