A Few Screws Loose
A child's perspective.20 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
I liked this story very much. It reads really easy and works well towards the ending. Very funny. Puts a smile to your face.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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I liked this story very much. It reads really easy and works well towards the ending. Very funny. Puts a smile to your face.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Sarah Butterfly, wow, thank you ever so much for stopping by to read my work again. I am humbled, truly... jlsavell
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Jimi, Kids say the darndest things! I used to love listening to Art Linkletter, and sometimes even Bill Cosby.
I like the way you told this story, from a little girl's point of view... sincere, honest, to the point. Very cute!
I especially liked Daddy's way of giving his special toys a name...like Bessie and Myrtle. And "little people/letter people"... "alphabet people". Good way to teach kids their letters!
This was well-written, Jimi. I found no mistakes. I like the artwork you chose, looks like a messy bedroom... toys everywhere.
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob ((hugs))
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Hi Jimi, Kids say the darndest things! I used to love listening to Art Linkletter, and sometimes even Bill Cosby.
I like the way you told this story, from a little girl's point of view... sincere, honest, to the point. Very cute!
I especially liked Daddy's way of giving his special toys a name...like Bessie and Myrtle. And "little people/letter people"... "alphabet people". Good way to teach kids their letters!
This was well-written, Jimi. I found no mistakes. I like the artwork you chose, looks like a messy bedroom... toys everywhere.
Nicely penned!
your fan,
Kimbob ((hugs))
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Kimbob, I have a million of these stories. Five kids and one has a plethora of experiences. thank you sweet friend, thank you... jimi
Comment from adewpearl
rolls his eyes and says, - add the comma
I love Buffy and all that she observes from listening to adults :-)
I also love Mommy's answer about Bessie. LOL
there is Mr. C, who - add the comma
I love her story of the alphabet people :-)
Oh, I am falling off my chair over the screw loose story!! LOL Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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rolls his eyes and says, - add the comma
I love Buffy and all that she observes from listening to adults :-)
I also love Mommy's answer about Bessie. LOL
there is Mr. C, who - add the comma
I love her story of the alphabet people :-)
Oh, I am falling off my chair over the screw loose story!! LOL Brooke
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Brooke, you are so very sweet , thank you.. I have dozens of these stories and who would not after raising five children and watching ten grandchildren ride through life.. it is hysterical as you well know and as you will soon be reminded.. thank you sweet friend... jimi
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Jimi,
I loved reading this story. Kids do indeed say the funniest things. I remember a lot of those my own kids did.:)
Thanks for sharing this is a great work and penned well.
Hope you are well.
Maureen
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Hi Jimi,
I loved reading this story. Kids do indeed say the funniest things. I remember a lot of those my own kids did.:)
Thanks for sharing this is a great work and penned well.
Hope you are well.
Maureen
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Muareen, how are you sweet friend, thank you ever so much for stopping by. It means a great deal to me, for I know that you have been through a lot and to pick me out to review just humbles me greatly.. thank you so very very much... jimi
Comment from Aussie
Ah, ha, Buffy the Vampire? Lawnmowers can be cantankerous things at the best of times; most amusing and sweet story which I enjoyed reading. Children have an entirely different logic to us - loads of fun my friend. Blessings, K.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Ah, ha, Buffy the Vampire? Lawnmowers can be cantankerous things at the best of times; most amusing and sweet story which I enjoyed reading. Children have an entirely different logic to us - loads of fun my friend. Blessings, K.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Kace, once again sweet friend a big hug and a big thank you. Yes children are loads of fun and I have a plethora of stories to tell.. jimi
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Yhis is really cute and a fun read from Buffy's innocent viewpoint, Jimi.
Lots packed into the fun with the background of the lawnmpwer and Chevy creating Dad's personality. The fun mix-up the 'screw loose' saying, and my fave part - Mr B and Mr Z at school. I wonder if they have messrs Q, Z and X. :-)
Lots of fun and very well written.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Yhis is really cute and a fun read from Buffy's innocent viewpoint, Jimi.
Lots packed into the fun with the background of the lawnmpwer and Chevy creating Dad's personality. The fun mix-up the 'screw loose' saying, and my fave part - Mr B and Mr Z at school. I wonder if they have messrs Q, Z and X. :-)
Lots of fun and very well written.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Earl, thank you so much dear sweet friend.. I have many many stories to tell after all I have five children and101/2 granchildren. There is never ever a dull moment, not ever.. jimi
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello jlsavell
Precious story about Buffy
What else can I say other that you know how to tell us a great way about a child's perspective of things she sees.
Smiles
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Hello jlsavell
Precious story about Buffy
What else can I say other that you know how to tell us a great way about a child's perspective of things she sees.
Smiles
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Gert, another big thank you. I love to tell from a child's perspective. I have so many of them to tell. again thank you.. jimi
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smiles to you.
Gert
Comment from Spiritual Echo
What a truly funny story. So very real and perfectly told from a child's point of view.
It has charm and a wonderful assignment of characters, every one, right down to the mooching neighbour.
What a terrific learning method frof children!
Well told, an enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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What a truly funny story. So very real and perfectly told from a child's point of view.
It has charm and a wonderful assignment of characters, every one, right down to the mooching neighbour.
What a terrific learning method frof children!
Well told, an enjoyable read.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Spiritual Echo, thank you ever ever so much for this exceptional review. Your support of my work is so very appreciated. Children are adorable and I have many more stories to tell.. again thank you.. jimi
Comment from Amandastory
I enjoyed reading this story it made me laugh. I like the way it is written from a child's perspective. It is amazing how children process information and think about things and you have captured this well in this true story.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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I enjoyed reading this story it made me laugh. I like the way it is written from a child's perspective. It is amazing how children process information and think about things and you have captured this well in this true story.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Amandastory, thank you ever ever so much. Oh and by the way, thank you for entering the contest. I will be by this week.. cannot wait to read your work.. jlsavell
Comment from Keeper Tony
Children are indeed extremely and outrageously funny at times. Some of the things they say and do are just so naturally spontaneous that you couldn't write it or make it up. This story has been a lovely welcoming read to me as i settle myself into the early part of my morning. Thankyou for posting this up. A fantastic little read.(By the way, i hope mummy didn't get into too much trouble with the teacher!)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Children are indeed extremely and outrageously funny at times. Some of the things they say and do are just so naturally spontaneous that you couldn't write it or make it up. This story has been a lovely welcoming read to me as i settle myself into the early part of my morning. Thankyou for posting this up. A fantastic little read.(By the way, i hope mummy didn't get into too much trouble with the teacher!)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Keeper Tony, thank you ever so much for this review. I have many stories to tell. jlsavell