Anywhere West of No Where
500 wrod first page novel6 total reviews
Comment from amada
This is a meticulously well written first page. The action scenes are exciting, the details, faultless. It set my mind to wondering in how it will go.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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This is a meticulously well written first page. The action scenes are exciting, the details, faultless. It set my mind to wondering in how it will go.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2014
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Thanks, do you want it? I can gift my copyright if you promise to finish it and bless me with 10% royalties for the ride and free editorial services.
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was very good, avoiding letting us in on the fact that Jared was a priest. I initially thought he was a schizophrenic, having killed someone after hearing voices in his head, or seeing visions of demons. Of course, that's not to say that priests can't be psychos, too. I'm sure they can be.
Anyhow, this story -- or rather its beginning -- had sort of a Constantine feel to it, although Keneau Reeves was anything but a priest in that movie.
Well done, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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This was very good, avoiding letting us in on the fact that Jared was a priest. I initially thought he was a schizophrenic, having killed someone after hearing voices in his head, or seeing visions of demons. Of course, that's not to say that priests can't be psychos, too. I'm sure they can be.
Anyhow, this story -- or rather its beginning -- had sort of a Constantine feel to it, although Keneau Reeves was anything but a priest in that movie.
Well done, and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Seriously, how do you know that this guy wasn't schitzo and Keaneu wasn't contracted to play the role?
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Hah ha, I really don't.
Comment from RodG
You definitely capture my interest in this opening scene. I am curious about Jared and his broken leg and the man he might have killed. You have set the scene vividly and the tone with the emphasis on the eternal battle between good and evil. It will be interesting to see what happens now that the police are involved.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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You definitely capture my interest in this opening scene. I am curious about Jared and his broken leg and the man he might have killed. You have set the scene vividly and the tone with the emphasis on the eternal battle between good and evil. It will be interesting to see what happens now that the police are involved.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Psst...I can tell you the ending. No one lives happily ever after. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Chrisfiore
Greetings author,
Hmm.. a well crafted first page. It has an equal balance of action and intrigue, which would definitely prompt the reader to want to turn the page. Interesting choice of antagonist. Wonder what happens next. Best to you with this contest entry. ;) Chrisfiore
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Greetings author,
Hmm.. a well crafted first page. It has an equal balance of action and intrigue, which would definitely prompt the reader to want to turn the page. Interesting choice of antagonist. Wonder what happens next. Best to you with this contest entry. ;) Chrisfiore
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Raging against life purpose and human choices is a fundamental, an unarguable protagonist.
Comment from mfowler
I recognise that location from my only day spent in New York. It's ideal for this drama which is very much set up to go on as the beginning of a much longer book. You've given us a glimpse, and there's plenty of intrigue in the form of the new priest who's just killed someone to save his own sorry hide. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I recognise that location from my only day spent in New York. It's ideal for this drama which is very much set up to go on as the beginning of a much longer book. You've given us a glimpse, and there's plenty of intrigue in the form of the new priest who's just killed someone to save his own sorry hide. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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I find God, as a protagonist, always a great subject with whom to argue with. Thanks.
Comment from Cajungirl
Wow, this is a fantastic first page of your novel. I could tell you I would be very interested in reading more of this. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Wow, this is a fantastic first page of your novel. I could tell you I would be very interested in reading more of this. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2014
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Alas, if we could only collect royalties for good intentions without having to serve up the product.