Short Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "My Mad Dash"A Collection Of Short Form Poetry
13 total reviews
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is highly original with a form presentation that complements the visual of one running close and then further and further away. Perfect line and word count for a nonet. Contests don't always sort out the best writes. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
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Mikey, this is highly original with a form presentation that complements the visual of one running close and then further and further away. Perfect line and word count for a nonet. Contests don't always sort out the best writes. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 03-May-2014
Comment from healfromwithin
good, 987654321 meter is okay
font and centering visual is nice
seems somewhat like a list
Nice work. Good luck with your writing.
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good, 987654321 meter is okay
font and centering visual is nice
seems somewhat like a list
Nice work. Good luck with your writing.
Comment Written 03-May-2014
Comment from chicken scratch love
I thought this was definitely entry-worthy! I'm not sure why you DIDN'T...but I'm not here to pry ; ) The layout and the way you manipulated the type to become smaller was perfectly attacked!
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I thought this was definitely entry-worthy! I'm not sure why you DIDN'T...but I'm not here to pry ; ) The layout and the way you manipulated the type to become smaller was perfectly attacked!
Comment Written 03-May-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
This is awesome. I love that you leave wiggle room for the reader to assign their own meaning. I take this as our surprisingly short journey. One day you take a breath and OMG!!! It's you last. NG
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This is awesome. I love that you leave wiggle room for the reader to assign their own meaning. I take this as our surprisingly short journey. One day you take a breath and OMG!!! It's you last. NG
Comment Written 03-May-2014
Comment from l.raven
Hi Michael, well, you can't say you didn't try....I'm out of breath...LOL...this is great you...and did you win ??? so very well said...love it....now take half those words and I'm off to your next Chapter...Luff Linda xxoo
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Hi Michael, well, you can't say you didn't try....I'm out of breath...LOL...this is great you...and did you win ??? so very well said...love it....now take half those words and I'm off to your next Chapter...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from Tatarka2
This was a very unusual and affecting poem. I admire the way you've formatted the poem so that it looks and reads like a "mad dash." There's a journal called "Shonuf" that is looking for "experimental poetry." They just rejected some of mine. I think you ought to try submitting to them.
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This was a very unusual and affecting poem. I admire the way you've formatted the poem so that it looks and reads like a "mad dash." There's a journal called "Shonuf" that is looking for "experimental poetry." They just rejected some of mine. I think you ought to try submitting to them.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from SLHarper
Hey Mikey! This is very cool! I like how the message captures this whole urgency to post and respond and come up with a better contest entry than everyone else (which doesn't help you, I've discovered if you have 20 fans, versus someone else's 134 fans...). What the hell is wrong with us? I think we have to stop entering contests... I don't care if my writing is "recognized" because it receives more than 15 reviews, most of which are hollow, ill-informed, or petty attempts to look like "good sports," whereas the four or five of my friends who actually read and try to make a connection with my writing don't care about the "mad dash" or about making virtual money off of me... Thank you, once again, for being my moral compass, and for helping me to remember what my own motivations are and what really matters.
On a side note, "everything" has four syllables. You can write "ev'rything," or put in your author notes that everything is pronounced with 3 syllables (which it actually kind of is, if you're not a perfectionist...).
Yours, Steph
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Hey Mikey! This is very cool! I like how the message captures this whole urgency to post and respond and come up with a better contest entry than everyone else (which doesn't help you, I've discovered if you have 20 fans, versus someone else's 134 fans...). What the hell is wrong with us? I think we have to stop entering contests... I don't care if my writing is "recognized" because it receives more than 15 reviews, most of which are hollow, ill-informed, or petty attempts to look like "good sports," whereas the four or five of my friends who actually read and try to make a connection with my writing don't care about the "mad dash" or about making virtual money off of me... Thank you, once again, for being my moral compass, and for helping me to remember what my own motivations are and what really matters.
On a side note, "everything" has four syllables. You can write "ev'rything," or put in your author notes that everything is pronounced with 3 syllables (which it actually kind of is, if you're not a perfectionist...).
Yours, Steph
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from Sasha
Nice work with this one. I am still in kindergarten when it comes to poetry and need to branch out and try some variety. I like the nonet and this one is very well written and artistically presented too. You are both a poet AND an artist.
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Nice work with this one. I am still in kindergarten when it comes to poetry and need to branch out and try some variety. I like the nonet and this one is very well written and artistically presented too. You are both a poet AND an artist.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the font change. I could feel the energy draining out of the runner. Humans are like horses. We have only one spurt in a race. That spurt tires us out quickly. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. I like the font change. I could feel the energy draining out of the runner. Humans are like horses. We have only one spurt in a race. That spurt tires us out quickly. Great work.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
Comment from Marillion
Take a breather, my friend, while I tell you that the form, the presentation, and the wording left me feeling a bit knackered, too, which says a lot about how you've brought the mad dash to life.
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Take a breather, my friend, while I tell you that the form, the presentation, and the wording left me feeling a bit knackered, too, which says a lot about how you've brought the mad dash to life.
Comment Written 02-May-2014