The Bard of Bel Air
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Lucy Makes the Right Moves"A homeless man sees more than people realize.
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Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, well Lucy got in...a bit scary at first...but she worked it...women have a way of doing that...LOL...now the Chinese...that's different...lets see what comes about...a great story you...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, well Lucy got in...a bit scary at first...but she worked it...women have a way of doing that...LOL...now the Chinese...that's different...lets see what comes about...a great story you...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 17-May-2014
Comment from seaglass
Wow, these guys sound like the thugs that are hanging out at the Bundy Ranch, are you sure that's not where Winston took her. lol.
This was great, and I loved the action part. Love it when a pushy, rude redneck is brought down a notch.
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Wow, these guys sound like the thugs that are hanging out at the Bundy Ranch, are you sure that's not where Winston took her. lol.
This was great, and I loved the action part. Love it when a pushy, rude redneck is brought down a notch.
Comment Written 17-May-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Great chapter, the character of Lucy is so well drawn, she should have some fun with those guys! The story is progressing so nicely and it was as always a great write and most enjoyable read. Faye
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Great chapter, the character of Lucy is so well drawn, she should have some fun with those guys! The story is progressing so nicely and it was as always a great write and most enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 16-May-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Moving along,some interesting developments. She was bold, telling Winston she was a cop. Ain't she a detective, now. He was no fool, knew she learned them martial arts skills somewhere? Good job, good read. I got to try and catch up. Later Lion King.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Moving along,some interesting developments. She was bold, telling Winston she was a cop. Ain't she a detective, now. He was no fool, knew she learned them martial arts skills somewhere? Good job, good read. I got to try and catch up. Later Lion King.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you very much, sir. I finally posted this in the morning today. Chapter 31 is up now too when you get around to it. Posting tonight? Not sure what else to post. I have some strange poems....
Comment from CR Delport
Well, Lucy was quick to make friends with the mercenaries. They would do well not to underestimate her. Seems like she won Winston's trust, and is bound to get further insight into his organization. This is very well done.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Well, Lucy was quick to make friends with the mercenaries. They would do well not to underestimate her. Seems like she won Winston's trust, and is bound to get further insight into his organization. This is very well done.
Comment Written 16-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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She had good instincts. Winston isn't completely sold on her though. So, she has to be careful. She has a sense of that. So pleased you are enjoying. mikey
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I really like how Lucy handled herself in this. Exceptional writing for sure. You misspelled HEAR as HERE somewhere, but I don't recall where. Still rates a six for what it says... needs a bit of work in HOW you said it, but I'm not worried abotu that. You can learn the rules in time.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I really like how Lucy handled herself in this. Exceptional writing for sure. You misspelled HEAR as HERE somewhere, but I don't recall where. Still rates a six for what it says... needs a bit of work in HOW you said it, but I'm not worried abotu that. You can learn the rules in time.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I am so behind. So, I'm going backwards! So delighted with the great review. Working on HOW all the time. I'll look for "Here", I have two or three dumb things like that I do all the time. Duh. Thanks so much, mikey
Comment from nelliesellie
Lucy is in. But she is now in a lot of danger. She will be learning jut how evil he is. This is not just federal any more. It is world wide. The real danger is jut beginning. Great work.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Lucy is in. But she is now in a lot of danger. She will be learning jut how evil he is. This is not just federal any more. It is world wide. The real danger is jut beginning. Great work.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Great perspective! I have to keep that in mind as I move forward. A great point. Way behind. But, I read every word! Thank you, mikey
Comment from Sankey
Another good chapter mate. Hoping you are gonna look at my stuff again soon the Bliss chapter with the dialogue you like now added and more info PLUS the Youtube of the music that I may change for Psalm 27. Also the latest Poem/Song regarding my erstwhile occupation in the potty room.(Look for Contemplation)
Spags...
regule(a)r LAPD
I hope that is what you want to here(hear), psycho.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Another good chapter mate. Hoping you are gonna look at my stuff again soon the Bliss chapter with the dialogue you like now added and more info PLUS the Youtube of the music that I may change for Psalm 27. Also the latest Poem/Song regarding my erstwhile occupation in the potty room.(Look for Contemplation)
Spags...
regule(a)r LAPD
I hope that is what you want to here(hear), psycho.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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I did wander by and left some remarks. Glad you are liking this. It's fun not to have to worry about too many technical things like global warming and all that. Just folks doing stuff!
Comment from ravenblack
Wasn't Lucy undercover, working as a nanny at the Blackwell estate? If I'm remembering correctly, as Winston now knows that she works for the department, wouldn't he be able to figure out that the nanny position was a ruse for her to work undercover on the Blackwell case? How would he not know that she is still investigating , now undercover in his private militia? It is well-written but I don't think Lucy would be able to infiltrate the group this easily.
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Wasn't Lucy undercover, working as a nanny at the Blackwell estate? If I'm remembering correctly, as Winston now knows that she works for the department, wouldn't he be able to figure out that the nanny position was a ruse for her to work undercover on the Blackwell case? How would he not know that she is still investigating , now undercover in his private militia? It is well-written but I don't think Lucy would be able to infiltrate the group this easily.
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Good points. Winston isn't as trusting of her as she might think. I'll work on trying to make it make more sense. mikey
Comment from nordicgirl
Yiu have managed to make so many compelling characters in this story. Lucy is awesome and believable. Very wise to have her as a reguler person that has great skill and intelligence. Would not work if she dropped one liners like the Bard. Great stuff throughout. NG
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Yiu have managed to make so many compelling characters in this story. Lucy is awesome and believable. Very wise to have her as a reguler person that has great skill and intelligence. Would not work if she dropped one liners like the Bard. Great stuff throughout. NG
Comment Written 15-May-2014
reply by the author on 16-May-2014
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Thank you. Lucy has stepped up and become a focal point for sure. I am pleased you noticed that I don't have her wisecracking. Not her style, mikey