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Tribute to the African Woman19 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
It is always rewarding to dip into your portfolio--thank you for teaching me about the Codary and adding the compelling artwork to compliment your theme. I admired your tribute and your vivid "tree," "fruit" and "moons" metaphors. I hope this work was well received in the contest last year. Brava! -Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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It is always rewarding to dip into your portfolio--thank you for teaching me about the Codary and adding the compelling artwork to compliment your theme. I admired your tribute and your vivid "tree," "fruit" and "moons" metaphors. I hope this work was well received in the contest last year. Brava! -Joan
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Wow, thank you, Joan. I had almost forgot about this poem. I'm so glad you liked it well enough to give it a six star rating. Visit my other poems and writings any time. You're welcome.
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I look forward to more of your splendid poetry. Have a productive new week- Joan
Comment from Selina Stambi
You bear the scars that should have broken
a weaker woman's back.... I love the analogy of the tree being used on this woman.
Strong women. Survivors. God bless them.
welcome back, Aunty Harriett!
xxx
Sonali
xxx
Sonali
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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You bear the scars that should have broken
a weaker woman's back.... I love the analogy of the tree being used on this woman.
Strong women. Survivors. God bless them.
welcome back, Aunty Harriett!
xxx
Sonali
xxx
Sonali
Comment Written 10-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2014
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Hey, thank you. Did I review you? Did you post this week? Yeah, glad to be back. Glad you liked the poem.
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I responded to a review you did two weeks back .... summer madness has kept me away from FS!
Comment from Liandra
Wonderfully written with soul, and love for those who fell victim to those tragic times.
The artwork is well chosen and beautiful. Well done, my friend,
hugs,
LIandra
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Wonderfully written with soul, and love for those who fell victim to those tragic times.
The artwork is well chosen and beautiful. Well done, my friend,
hugs,
LIandra
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Liandra.
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You're so welcome,
:) Liandra
Comment from forestport12
Wow, Im blown away by this! So few words you captured the soul of this woman and the degree by which you described with little room was amazing. Im glad you are writing!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Wow, Im blown away by this! So few words you captured the soul of this woman and the degree by which you described with little room was amazing. Im glad you are writing!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014
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Thank you. I had second eye surgery and doing fine. I'm so glad you liked this poem.
Comment from Eric1
This is a well put together Codary, you have a remarkable way with words, the word Tragedienne (from the French tragedie) compliments the whole piece.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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This is a well put together Codary, you have a remarkable way with words, the word Tragedienne (from the French tragedie) compliments the whole piece.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2014
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thank you so much Eric1.
Comment from DanielEkine
The flow of rhyme feels pink and daring. A wispy feel, it carries eloquently. A grandeur contribution. America, definitely knows the heart of the author. An intriguing title. A remarkable concept. Good choice of diction. A brilliant artwork.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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The flow of rhyme feels pink and daring. A wispy feel, it carries eloquently. A grandeur contribution. America, definitely knows the heart of the author. An intriguing title. A remarkable concept. Good choice of diction. A brilliant artwork.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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thank you Daniel.
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
This was immensely though-provoking, considering your explanatory notes. Very, very well written. A true 'ode' to a sad chapter. I'm not American, but the tragedy of the slave trade is well-known to most Aussies. I studied it in school, and the TV series 'Roots' did much to awaken understanding here.
I loved your opening solitary line. I don't 'do' poetry, but you appear to have adhered to the rules of this particular form perfectly.
'You bore the fruit that fell beneath the Middle Passage', Beautiful and evocative. And your punch-line - accusingly perfect.
One thing:
'heaped upon your thicken roots' Do you mean 'thickened'?
Thanks, amahra.
Anthony
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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This was immensely though-provoking, considering your explanatory notes. Very, very well written. A true 'ode' to a sad chapter. I'm not American, but the tragedy of the slave trade is well-known to most Aussies. I studied it in school, and the TV series 'Roots' did much to awaken understanding here.
I loved your opening solitary line. I don't 'do' poetry, but you appear to have adhered to the rules of this particular form perfectly.
'You bore the fruit that fell beneath the Middle Passage', Beautiful and evocative. And your punch-line - accusingly perfect.
One thing:
'heaped upon your thicken roots' Do you mean 'thickened'?
Thanks, amahra.
Anthony
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Anthony for this thorough review. I looked up thicken and thickened and the meanings weren't all that different. So I took some poetic license and left it alone. Of course you're probably right. Again, thank you and I'm really glad you liked my poem.
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You're very welcome, amahra. Poetic license? Why not! Loved it. Ant.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is striking.....tragedienne is such an appropriate word and and the scars and the Middle Passage....what they have borne....what a great tribute....a great poem
God bless
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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This is striking.....tragedienne is such an appropriate word and and the scars and the Middle Passage....what they have borne....what a great tribute....a great poem
God bless
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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thank you so much.
Comment from adewpearl
your thicken roots - thickened?
excellent alliteration in weaker woman
and in seen still sparkling
its oral cavities - not clear what "it" refers back to
that middle tercet has such beautiful imagery
this is quite moving
Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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your thicken roots - thickened?
excellent alliteration in weaker woman
and in seen still sparkling
its oral cavities - not clear what "it" refers back to
that middle tercet has such beautiful imagery
this is quite moving
Brooke
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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Thank you Broke. I'll check the word thicken. The oval cavities are the eyes.
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I realize the oval cavities are the eyes, but "it" is a singular pronoun
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Oh, I see now. Perhaps if you had said: [their oval cavities] I would have gotten it right away. Thanks, Brooke.
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
America what tragedy of the past with black slavery
you portray this well with your chosen words
your format falls into place
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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good luck in the contest
America what tragedy of the past with black slavery
you portray this well with your chosen words
your format falls into place
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 26-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2014
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thank you so much.
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welcome..SC