Breathe
shortness of breath scary5 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
Air is so essential to life. This is an excellent entry for the contest. No one can deny the truth of your words. Very interesting artwork to compliment your message.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Air is so essential to life. This is an excellent entry for the contest. No one can deny the truth of your words. Very interesting artwork to compliment your message.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much. Linda
Comment from l.raven
Hey you, this poem took my breath away...don't try and do so much Linda...the wash can want...your poem is truly scary...well written...and what a picture...smile...Love ya...will call again some...God Bless...Luff Linda xxoo huggies...LOL..
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Hey you, this poem took my breath away...don't try and do so much Linda...the wash can want...your poem is truly scary...well written...and what a picture...smile...Love ya...will call again some...God Bless...Luff Linda xxoo huggies...LOL..
Comment Written 31-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2014
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Thank you, Linda! Linda, too.
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so welcome Linda!!! Linda xxoo
Comment from Smoothiecool
good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words in three lines portrays the scary event of heart failure and the loss of breathe
good visual
good enjambment to allow free flow of sentence
good alliteration in
short, scary
cheers smoothiecool
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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good luck in the contest
your syllable count spot on
your few words in three lines portrays the scary event of heart failure and the loss of breathe
good visual
good enjambment to allow free flow of sentence
good alliteration in
short, scary
cheers smoothiecool
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2014
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Thank you!
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welcome..SC >> Faye
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welcome..SC >> Faye
Comment from adewpearl
stunning presentation of your poem, which is in excellent 3/5/3 syllable count
good consonance in life/failure
you capture well the emotion of not being able to breathe and the health troubles this can mean Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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stunning presentation of your poem, which is in excellent 3/5/3 syllable count
good consonance in life/failure
you capture well the emotion of not being able to breathe and the health troubles this can mean Brooke
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Solara Moonset
It was creative and followed given instructions. It brought to mind what the statue must have been feeling as the tree closed in around it. As far as 3-5-3s go, yours flowed very well.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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It was creative and followed given instructions. It brought to mind what the statue must have been feeling as the tree closed in around it. As far as 3-5-3s go, yours flowed very well.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2014
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Thank you.