The Animal Doctor
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 " Broken Hearts "Love Among the Thorns
25 total reviews
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
My this was a pleasant surprise. Had a suspicion that there was more to the Wainwright's than meets the eye. Never thought it was the fact that Margaret wasn't Tom's daughter.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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My this was a pleasant surprise. Had a suspicion that there was more to the Wainwright's than meets the eye. Never thought it was the fact that Margaret wasn't Tom's daughter.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Yep, this heated things up a bit. Thank you, Schalk.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Wow, this is a delightfully intense, chapter, Amahra. Capitulating to a blackmailer's demands never seems to work. I think they are the worst kind of criminals. Well done! :) Bev
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Wow, this is a delightfully intense, chapter, Amahra. Capitulating to a blackmailer's demands never seems to work. I think they are the worst kind of criminals. Well done! :) Bev
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you Bev. Always a joy to hear from you, my dear.
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You're very welcome! :) Bev
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 19 of the book The Animal Doctor Like three coins in an ocean "Broken Hearts" This is an excellent chapter you have created here. The structure carries well, and the formulation is strong. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Chapter 19 of the book The Animal Doctor Like three coins in an ocean "Broken Hearts" This is an excellent chapter you have created here. The structure carries well, and the formulation is strong. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, chasennov.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from James Dooney
Ah yes the broken heart is something we all do experience at some point in our lives huh. You convey this quite well here. Good work.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Ah yes the broken heart is something we all do experience at some point in our lives huh. You convey this quite well here. Good work.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you, James
Comment from Charlieboy123
Do not trust a man unless his hand is raised to God and his knees bend. Vary well writing with the pen and expressed with a matching photo! It's nice to see fellow poets work of art, work of heart. Pulls on my heart strings.
Its kind of sad but understanding its meant to be so in a sense 5 stars
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Do not trust a man unless his hand is raised to God and his knees bend. Vary well writing with the pen and expressed with a matching photo! It's nice to see fellow poets work of art, work of heart. Pulls on my heart strings.
Its kind of sad but understanding its meant to be so in a sense 5 stars
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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You are new to Fanstory. Four stars means you found something wrong with the writing and you have tell the writer what is wrong with it. Your review does not reflect the four stars.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Another secret has popped out of every new chapter since I started reading your story. At this rate, I'm wondering if even you'll be able to keep up with them. Thanks for another great chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Another secret has popped out of every new chapter since I started reading your story. At this rate, I'm wondering if even you'll be able to keep up with them. Thanks for another great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I'm up for the challenge. LOL Thank you so much, Ric for keeping up when you started reading. Hope you hang in there. I'm hopping you'll like the ending. It won't be long coming.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is technically sound throughout and an engaging read. The ending for this section was very touching and leaves the reader longing for the next installment. One thing that could improve the dialog would be a little bit of descriptive information inserted here and there to tell the reader what the character is feeling and to keep them straight in the lengthier discussions. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This is technically sound throughout and an engaging read. The ending for this section was very touching and leaves the reader longing for the next installment. One thing that could improve the dialog would be a little bit of descriptive information inserted here and there to tell the reader what the character is feeling and to keep them straight in the lengthier discussions. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you, Mystic Angel for your comments. I'll consider your suggestion.
Comment from lynglyng
This story line is so captivating. I am enjoying watching the plot unfold. You are a great storyteller and strong writer.I can't wait to read more. Keep it coming.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This story line is so captivating. I am enjoying watching the plot unfold. You are a great storyteller and strong writer.I can't wait to read more. Keep it coming.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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thank you very much.
Comment from CHIGYSISKI
Nice 'developing story' as the news media would say. I am definitely enjoying reading. Few corrections below.
(add apostrophe after Daniels)
The Daniels marriage had hit the rocks, and divorce was imminent.
"So, (to) what do I owe this visit? It's been a long time."
"Oh don't play Miss rich and refinement (Rich and Refinement) with me, Rose Wainwright. Like Mother like daughter."
Well done.Keep writing!
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Nice 'developing story' as the news media would say. I am definitely enjoying reading. Few corrections below.
(add apostrophe after Daniels)
The Daniels marriage had hit the rocks, and divorce was imminent.
"So, (to) what do I owe this visit? It's been a long time."
"Oh don't play Miss rich and refinement (Rich and Refinement) with me, Rose Wainwright. Like Mother like daughter."
Well done.Keep writing!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much. I'll make corrections.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, amahra, you did an excellent job with this chapter and let a lot of secrets out of the bag with that conversation with Margaret's mother. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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this is an excellent write, amahra, you did an excellent job with this chapter and let a lot of secrets out of the bag with that conversation with Margaret's mother. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2014
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Thank you so much sweetwoodjax. I'm so glad you enjoyed and for keeping up with the story.