Sea Fury
cinquain contest entry/Oceans7 total reviews
Comment from lakeport
Sea Fury, indeed that's a very nice expressed poem, nice in
cinquain form,good luck at the contest,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.lakeport.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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Sea Fury, indeed that's a very nice expressed poem, nice in
cinquain form,good luck at the contest,I enjoyed reading it,God bless you.lakeport.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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Thank you, lakeport, for sharing "Sea Fury" and your kind praise. Rod
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your welcome,lakeport.
Comment from Judy Couch
I like your description of the waves as: "alley cats that leap with outstretched claws and loudly screech at me". This is a vivid description that catches the imagination. You did a really great job with this prompt.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014
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I like your description of the waves as: "alley cats that leap with outstretched claws and loudly screech at me". This is a vivid description that catches the imagination. You did a really great job with this prompt.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Judy. I am delighted you enjoyed the poem and its imagery.
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Poet
I've enjoyed the juxtaposition in your well thought out cinquain. Just a tiny suggestions ... I like to see and am used to seeing the cinquain expressed with no capitals unless Proper nouns. It seems a little odd to see "Frenzied" and no other punctuation. Just my thought, please ignore if you don't agree.
Great presentation. The alliteration in "brewed/breakers" makes a good 'crunch' and arouses the audial.
I think this is one of the best. Well done and the best of luck in the contest.
Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxox
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Hi Mystery Poet
I've enjoyed the juxtaposition in your well thought out cinquain. Just a tiny suggestions ... I like to see and am used to seeing the cinquain expressed with no capitals unless Proper nouns. It seems a little odd to see "Frenzied" and no other punctuation. Just my thought, please ignore if you don't agree.
Great presentation. The alliteration in "brewed/breakers" makes a good 'crunch' and arouses the audial.
I think this is one of the best. Well done and the best of luck in the contest.
Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxox
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much, Lovinia, for sharing, your kind praise, tips, and best wishes. I truly appreciate the time taken to comment.
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My pleasure. I hope you do well. Hugs - Lovinia xoxo
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You meet the contest requirements well. Your word selection certainly inspires the fury of a stormy sea nicely and I especially like your analogy to cat claws - very creative. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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You meet the contest requirements well. Your word selection certainly inspires the fury of a stormy sea nicely and I especially like your analogy to cat claws - very creative. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I am delighted to have shared this with you and welcome your lovely comments and best wishes.
Comment from adewpearl
solid pairing of photo and poem, which is in good syllable count for the cinquain
vivid detail of setting
good alliteration in storm-brewed breakers
I just love the extended imagery of the waves like wild alley cats
good consonance in cat/claw/screech
truly powerful imagery and descriptive detail - sounds like a winner to me
Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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solid pairing of photo and poem, which is in good syllable count for the cinquain
vivid detail of setting
good alliteration in storm-brewed breakers
I just love the extended imagery of the waves like wild alley cats
good consonance in cat/claw/screech
truly powerful imagery and descriptive detail - sounds like a winner to me
Brooke
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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Thank you for sharing and your most encouraging review, Brooke.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words described a scene even without a picture. I like each one the picture and the words. Together they make a good entry into the contest. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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Your words described a scene even without a picture. I like each one the picture and the words. Together they make a good entry into the contest. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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I am very pleased the visual details came through so well. Thank you for sharing and your kind praise.
Comment from onebrit
You can write anything about the sea and Im in....add a picture and its beyond beautiful to me. Something, just something about the ocean. I have never thought of waves as wild ally cats but what an apt description. Lovely!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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You can write anything about the sea and Im in....add a picture and its beyond beautiful to me. Something, just something about the ocean. I have never thought of waves as wild ally cats but what an apt description. Lovely!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014
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So pleased you like the metaphor I used. Thank you for your kind review.