Jerry Jing-Jang on the Trail
JJJ is back29 total reviews
Comment from frogbook
Great rhyming. Flows well. Loved the story and the humor. So original and creative. Painted a great picture and took us right out there on the old trail.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
Great rhyming. Flows well. Loved the story and the humor. So original and creative. Painted a great picture and took us right out there on the old trail.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2015
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Thanks. I'm so glad you liked it. If you're interested, Jerry Jing-Jang has several more adventures, all available in my portfolio.
Comment from Autumn Splendour
What an amusing story written in rhythm and rhyme, rich in imagery and action. The poem flows well. An enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
What an amusing story written in rhythm and rhyme, rich in imagery and action. The poem flows well. An enjoyable read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang. Thanks for the wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This was a good trick to play on Rusty the Rustler. It reminds me of when I was in German and a friend's house got burgled. My friend (Army) found him and beat him till the police arrived. He was glad to see the police take him away too. LOL.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This was a good trick to play on Rusty the Rustler. It reminds me of when I was in German and a friend's house got burgled. My friend (Army) found him and beat him till the police arrived. He was glad to see the police take him away too. LOL.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thanks. Glad you liked my poem. And good for your friend! I have no sympathy for burglars who get beaten by the homeowner or chewed up by the dog.
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Well said
Comment from alexisleech
What a great story in a poem! With excellent rhyme, you made your poem very 'visual, so I was able to go along for the ride.
Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
What a great story in a poem! With excellent rhyme, you made your poem very 'visual, so I was able to go along for the ride.
Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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So glad you liked it. JJJ and Rusty are such fun characters to write. Thanks for this wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from rspoet
Well done. This is a fine story in a poem.
Great alliterating names with Jerry Jing-Jang, spurs a jangling, and Old Rusty the Rustler, I guess he was getting a little rusty at the end.
Excellent meter, the poem flow well
And spot on rhyming in the aabb pattern
I was a little confused with line 7, seemed like he caught himself, instead of JJJ catching him.
Excellent picture to poem match, nicely framed in green pasture color
Well done, good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
Well done. This is a fine story in a poem.
Great alliterating names with Jerry Jing-Jang, spurs a jangling, and Old Rusty the Rustler, I guess he was getting a little rusty at the end.
Excellent meter, the poem flow well
And spot on rhyming in the aabb pattern
I was a little confused with line 7, seemed like he caught himself, instead of JJJ catching him.
Excellent picture to poem match, nicely framed in green pasture color
Well done, good luck.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thanks. I'll have to take another look at that line. Good to know it may not be clear to the reader. Thanks for the great review and good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is an excellent story within the poem and the rhyming is absolutely great without being forced.
Well done with this excellent entry in the contest and good luck with it.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
This is an excellent story within the poem and the rhyming is absolutely great without being forced.
Well done with this excellent entry in the contest and good luck with it.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Cindy, this is a wonderful entry for this story in a poem, This is the first I have read of Jerry Jing Jang but what a man!
Wonderful rhyming, rhythm and flow with equally good meter, a really good story and I wish you the best in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
Hi Cindy, this is a wonderful entry for this story in a poem, This is the first I have read of Jerry Jing Jang but what a man!
Wonderful rhyming, rhythm and flow with equally good meter, a really good story and I wish you the best in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed Jerry Jing-Jang. Feel free to check out his other adventures. Thanks for this wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.
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You are welcome my friend.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Great episode, Cindy. Good rhyme and rhythm. I love this part:
So he roped a heifer to use as a sheild << typo on SHIELD
And quietly crept across the field.
Verrrry clever of him. Too bad he didn't think about the bedroll trick sooner. The ending is really cute, too... he was happy to see jail!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
Great episode, Cindy. Good rhyme and rhythm. I love this part:
So he roped a heifer to use as a sheild << typo on SHIELD
And quietly crept across the field.
Verrrry clever of him. Too bad he didn't think about the bedroll trick sooner. The ending is really cute, too... he was happy to see jail!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thanks, and thanks for catching that typo. Oops! I really do know it's i before e. But you know, JJJ can never hang on to Rusty for long. What would he do without him?
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Good point... he'd have no purpose. :)
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Nothing like a real good Western story. Always enjoy reading them. Some times the outlaws are not real hard to outwit. Well done and means I will be checking out your portfolio for more.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
Nothing like a real good Western story. Always enjoy reading them. Some times the outlaws are not real hard to outwit. Well done and means I will be checking out your portfolio for more.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Thanks. Jerry Jing-Jang is a lot of fun. I hope you will enjoy all of his adventures.
Comment from Nosha17
I liked the combination of man and animals and the Wild West. Great story line of how our hero captured that rustler. Excellent rhyming and most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
I liked the combination of man and animals and the Wild West. Great story line of how our hero captured that rustler. Excellent rhyming and most enjoyable. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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So glad you enjoyed. Thanks for the wonderful review and the good wishes for the contest.