Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Wait, what??? Well I am certainly confused now. I don't think that I was ever a princess, my mom used to call me her little prince, but that was only because I was a royal pain in the you know what. As confused as I am I still find merit in this work. It is poetic and capable of sparking thought and further conversation.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thank you, nomi, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hi, Bill...

I read through your poem, today. It has a story in a poem feel... fit my mood, as it goes into a surreal twist, I came away thinking of a girl of importance, finding herself something pretty to look upon, and losing any sense of self, just melting into obscurity. ; D Probably more dark than intended... the second image I sense is a science fiction type image ... where captured princesses become flowers...

The only thing I paused to consider... (I'm not very strong with poetic forms... did you mean to have 8 syllables for the second row? I don't even know why it's floating in my head that tanka's are 5-7-5-7-7, and I think I saw 8 in the second row, but that might be intentional?

A nice poem to read through... coming from a girl who feels like she's shifted dimensions, but instead of finding herself a pretty flower, just a dandelion...

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Man! I did have 8 syllables. Fixed now. Thanks for the heads up.

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Now, the princess is shifting dimensions again. What will she be this time?

What an idea. I thought it was funny.

You know, this could go on for a long time. LOL. 8-)

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thank you, da, for the nice review. Bill

Comment from Ginger Banks

Excellent

:) I am pleased to see the poem matched the picture quite well, for I was sure I saw a face in the flower(s) before I scrolled down to read the words. Truly a delicate beautiful and sad poem. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thank you, Ginger, for the nice review. Bill

reply by Ginger Banks on 29-Jun-2016

You're most welcome.

Comment from GoodHearted Woman

Excellent

You clever guy, you! One second you're a princess, and the next, you are being re-born into a crying baby. (Well, no wonder! someone just slapped you hard on your little bottom and then every body smiled while your bottom was still red and hurting. Welcome to the world! Ah, but what WE want to know is: what was it like where you came from????? GoodHearted Woman

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2016

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2016

Thank you, Marcia, for the nice review. Bill