A Classless Legacy
a blank verse contest entry16 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a well written, heart-felt poem with good word choices
and flow. Congratulations on winning the contest with this
wonderful entry. Marilyn
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This is a well written, heart-felt poem with good word choices
and flow. Congratulations on winning the contest with this
wonderful entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
Comment from MissMerri
Dawn, I love this music, and the beauty of your poem as well. How amazingly you've contrasted the cardboard house and the mansion, and made it clear where your own heart is. I loved what you said and how you said it, in this flawless blank verse poem, and I'm so delighted to see your lovely work was honored by the committee with a second place ribbon. Congratulations. I would so like to give this six stars, but ran out too soon. Next time... I'll be more frugal. ;p MM
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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Dawn, I love this music, and the beauty of your poem as well. How amazingly you've contrasted the cardboard house and the mansion, and made it clear where your own heart is. I loved what you said and how you said it, in this flawless blank verse poem, and I'm so delighted to see your lovely work was honored by the committee with a second place ribbon. Congratulations. I would so like to give this six stars, but ran out too soon. Next time... I'll be more frugal. ;p MM
Comment Written 09-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2016
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What a lovely review, and so wonderfully complimentary coming from one of my favorite poets. Thank you very much!
Comment from sandy montgomery
Still learning blank verse and iambic pentimeter. This is a hard form but I don't see any mistakes. I liked your poem. I thought it flowed well. It seemed to march the way it's supposed to. Thank you for sharing your work.
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Still learning blank verse and iambic pentimeter. This is a hard form but I don't see any mistakes. I liked your poem. I thought it flowed well. It seemed to march the way it's supposed to. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2016
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your salute in blank verse to a "legacy" brimming with humanity. Here's to "long days...with pen" and "humility". Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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I admired your salute in blank verse to a "legacy" brimming with humanity. Here's to "long days...with pen" and "humility". Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 02-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2016
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Thank you, my friend - I'm so pleased you liked this one - I rather like it too. :)) Best wishes for a wonderful weekend, Joan!
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem seems to say the speaker want to be humble about his writing talent and have his writing help the world be a better place. He/she wants not to judge types of poetry and types of people and help lessen his or thier greed and other deadly sins.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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This poem seems to say the speaker want to be humble about his writing talent and have his writing help the world be a better place. He/she wants not to judge types of poetry and types of people and help lessen his or thier greed and other deadly sins.
Good luck and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Thanks very much.
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My pleasure.
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Comment from krys123
Happy holidays, Dawn;
-I really liked your self synopsis and mindfulness of your writing of your indulgence in your writing and your understanding where you are going with your writing in about your writing. Also, of yourself I see you are very humbled in the eyes of the Lord and asking just 1 billionth of His love and His worth is what any human being may ask and would be more than enough.
-Structurally your blank verse poetry is very sound in its iambic pentameter in the non-rhyming structure of your verse.
-The enjambment is very conceivable he understandable throughout the writing and fluidly poetic without a syntactical break or a hiccup in its writing and reading of this poem.
-May I wish you all the best and take care and have a good one where and when you can find it during these hectic holidays.
Alex
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Happy holidays, Dawn;
-I really liked your self synopsis and mindfulness of your writing of your indulgence in your writing and your understanding where you are going with your writing in about your writing. Also, of yourself I see you are very humbled in the eyes of the Lord and asking just 1 billionth of His love and His worth is what any human being may ask and would be more than enough.
-Structurally your blank verse poetry is very sound in its iambic pentameter in the non-rhyming structure of your verse.
-The enjambment is very conceivable he understandable throughout the writing and fluidly poetic without a syntactical break or a hiccup in its writing and reading of this poem.
-May I wish you all the best and take care and have a good one where and when you can find it during these hectic holidays.
Alex
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Thanks very much, Alex. Much appreciated.
Comment from William Ross
Well done on the blank verse, If what I write can just touch the heart of a few is great and my writing was worth it. Nicely done, good meter, flows well, good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Well done on the blank verse, If what I write can just touch the heart of a few is great and my writing was worth it. Nicely done, good meter, flows well, good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much, William - yes, agreed!
Comment from Ulla
Hi Dawn. A wonderful free verse poem. Well, it's spiritual and that's fine. I can say no more as I'm a non believer. I liked it a lot though. All the best. Ulla:)))
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Hi Dawn. A wonderful free verse poem. Well, it's spiritual and that's fine. I can say no more as I'm a non believer. I liked it a lot though. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
yes this is well written my friend we all try to leave a legacy with our writings this has a good feel to it wonderful presentation regards Jill
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yes this is well written my friend we all try to leave a legacy with our writings this has a good feel to it wonderful presentation regards Jill
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016
Comment from Realist101
As someone who has endured existing, surviving and making home the cab of a pickup this resonates and makes me grateful just to have a roof. Wonderful weaving of words, Dawn....x
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As someone who has endured existing, surviving and making home the cab of a pickup this resonates and makes me grateful just to have a roof. Wonderful weaving of words, Dawn....x
Comment Written 01-Dec-2016