Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written Tanka poem. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thank you, Teri. Bill

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Failure to follow forecasts result in soggy picnic lunches, disappointed picnickers, dashed hopes of having fun and a postponement of festivities for a future time.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thanks, nomi.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

This poem describes the crazy weather we are having here in the Pacific Northwest. Late March should see us sneaking in some spring activities, but the rain will NOT stop falling. Your words create great images,
~patty~

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thank you, Patty, for the terrific review. Bill

Comment from Poetic Friend

Excellent

Wow, Bill, how did you managed to incorporate alliteration in each line given the challenges of the tanka poetic form? I am impressed.

Also, this well-written poem comes bearing great imagery. Those poor picnickers caught in the cloud cascades. Also, I love the personification in the opening line.

Best wishes in the contest, my friend,

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017

Thank you, PF, for the excellent review. Bill