Echoes of Artistry
Viewing comments for Chapter 24 "Gravestones and Epitaphs"NaPoWriMo 2017
21 total reviews
Comment from Rlegel99
Poem about famous people who have died left their work but nothing else. The poem has nice flow. Enjoyed the different font describing the masters. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Poem about famous people who have died left their work but nothing else. The poem has nice flow. Enjoyed the different font describing the masters. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Rlegel,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad that you mentioned the italics on the epitaph section, I just wanted them to stand apart from the rest. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from frogbook
A complicated and well versed poem with many interesting points and a true tribute to these artists in death. Great alliteration. I loved the verse about Michaelangelo in particular.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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A complicated and well versed poem with many interesting points and a true tribute to these artists in death. Great alliteration. I loved the verse about Michaelangelo in particular.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi frogbook,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review this selection. Since my NaPo book is Echoes of Artistry, Pantygynt challenged me to write an epitaph and it grew into an epic. I appreciate the lovely comments and the exceptional rating.
Kim
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting art work
for these words
If we draw or paint
or write or write creative
words is a wonderful
gift to have to share.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Very interesting art work
for these words
If we draw or paint
or write or write creative
words is a wonderful
gift to have to share.
Honeytree
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Annie,
I'm happy that you enjoyed this selection. Thank you for the lovely comments.
Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Kim,
I just had my amazing review disappear. So . . .
This is awesome. Your attention to detail is fantastic. I love the rhymes--internal & end. The art is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly with an awesome story.
Your research is evident. I commend you for doing that & then turning it into this super work.
I enjoyed reading all of the verses & the epitaphs, too. My favorite line is the one with the fingertips of God reference.
Thanks for the links & the great masterpiece video, too. This poem has it all--mystery, intrigue, eulogies, stories, what ifs, everything. This could be a tv series.
What more can I say except EXCELENT! Jan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Kim,
I just had my amazing review disappear. So . . .
This is awesome. Your attention to detail is fantastic. I love the rhymes--internal & end. The art is perfect. Your lines flow smoothly with an awesome story.
Your research is evident. I commend you for doing that & then turning it into this super work.
I enjoyed reading all of the verses & the epitaphs, too. My favorite line is the one with the fingertips of God reference.
Thanks for the links & the great masterpiece video, too. This poem has it all--mystery, intrigue, eulogies, stories, what ifs, everything. This could be a tv series.
What more can I say except EXCELENT! Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Jan,
I am thrilled that you enjoyed what began as an epitaph assignment and grew into more of a eulogy for the Masters. I really wanted to do justice to the challenge that Jim had given me to write an epitaph for George Stubbs, but then I decided I had to explore more of the greats and include them, too. I do love to read and research.
Did I ever tell you what my favorite exhibit in Las Vegas is? We've been to Vegas several times, but the most fun attraction for me was the Da Vinci exhibit at the Venetian. http://www.imagineexhibitions.com/tabid/557/Default.aspx
I really enjoyed working on this selection. Your review means that it was worth the extra time I spent composing this one. :)
I appreciate all of the wonderful comments, Jan!
Kim
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Wow! That exhibit would be awesome to see. Your time was well worth it. Many would not even try to do a work such as this. I know I enjoyed it. Jan
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My family indulged me in this exhibit. (James and I went with my mom and stepdad.) I easily spent at least two hours looking at everything and I'm pretty sure they were fairly done after the first hour, but they didn't rush me. I think my mom really enjoyed it, too. They reproduced all of his notebooks, it was all interactive. Absolutely amazing. I think they do that exhibit in several cities across the US, so if you ever get a chance, I know you won't be disappointed.
Comment from alf collier
I seldom try to take lines as highlights of a poetry, for I believe they are part of a whole, but there are always exceptions to the rules!! Your couplets are great!! They demand attention!! Thank you heaps for sharing this one, and best luck in the contest, m friend!!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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I seldom try to take lines as highlights of a poetry, for I believe they are part of a whole, but there are always exceptions to the rules!! Your couplets are great!! They demand attention!! Thank you heaps for sharing this one, and best luck in the contest, m friend!!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Alf,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I'm really glad to hear that you enjoyed my bit of fun. :) I appreciate the enthusiastic response.
Kim
Comment from Dean Kuch
This was an excellent poem, Kim, very well composed.
I enjoyed the rhyming and the old inscriptions you've included from some of the tombstones of the "Old Masters".
One of my favorites was the following:
A mistress in question stole his last breath --
for Raphael, love was the kiss of death. ...Hah, I can relate...
Unique rhyming scheme throughout. You noticeably change meter and order of rhymes throughout the entirety of this. But it's well written enough to get away with it.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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This was an excellent poem, Kim, very well composed.
I enjoyed the rhyming and the old inscriptions you've included from some of the tombstones of the "Old Masters".
One of my favorites was the following:
A mistress in question stole his last breath --
for Raphael, love was the kiss of death. ...Hah, I can relate...
Unique rhyming scheme throughout. You noticeably change meter and order of rhymes throughout the entirety of this. But it's well written enough to get away with it.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Hi Dean,
Thank you for giving me the credit on doing the meter changes, etc, intentionally. So far everyone has been really good about that, but it isn't always the case. All of the epitaphs are pure fiction (based on my reading of their lives.) Raphael, who was one of the most well off of the Masters I explored actually has his death attributed to a fifteen day illness, purportedly contracted after an encounter with a mistress. He, of course, neglected to disclose this to his doctor, was misdiagnosed, and died as a result. (Or so the story goes.) In those fifteen days he had time to put his affairs in order and bequeath his funds to the mistress. I'm thinking Raphael was seriously shortchanged in this deal lol
Emerson was known to change up the rhyme scheme in the final stanza of his work, I borrowed that from him. (Gives it a unique feel, and in this case, I think it adds to the diversity of techniques that the Old Masters themselves used in their art.)
Thank you so much for this exceptional rating and review. I truly appreciate all of your comments. I was hoping you'd enjoy this piece, after all, you are the resident expert in the area of tombstones ;)
Kim
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Haha, well, you're more than welcome, Kim.
I do love to go to old cemeteries and do charcoal rubbings of the graves on paper.
I've had a few of the more interesting ones framed.
Good job with this one!
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Cool picture! Thanks for sharing :)
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That's the profile picture from my Facebook author's page.
You're more than welcome. :}
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Kim, A great story in a poem! I attend a program called Renaissance, where I do volunteer work, and it means "rebirth." The stanzas of your poem rhymed so well, and there was excellent descriptions of the various artists in your work. have you traveled in Europe? It sounds like you have, from your poem. Donna
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Dear Kim, A great story in a poem! I attend a program called Renaissance, where I do volunteer work, and it means "rebirth." The stanzas of your poem rhymed so well, and there was excellent descriptions of the various artists in your work. have you traveled in Europe? It sounds like you have, from your poem. Donna
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Hi Donna,
All of my European travels have been online :) The internet is a wonderful thing for getting a feel for places now, without even leaving your own home. It is the same reason I developed a love of books when I was young. Thank you for this most exceptional rating and review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
And I thought I was in for a nice little piece about the gee gees. My word but you cover some ground with this. Monorhyming quatgrains are employed to give an overview followed by a variety of stanza form, line length and rhyme scheme dealing with the individual artists and their work.
I see my man is in there with a complete quatrain to himself, an honour you only give in addition to Rembrandt and Leonardo. where others have to be content with couplets and tercets.
I think you have more than met my challenge here. Well done.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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And I thought I was in for a nice little piece about the gee gees. My word but you cover some ground with this. Monorhyming quatgrains are employed to give an overview followed by a variety of stanza form, line length and rhyme scheme dealing with the individual artists and their work.
I see my man is in there with a complete quatrain to himself, an honour you only give in addition to Rembrandt and Leonardo. where others have to be content with couplets and tercets.
I think you have more than met my challenge here. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Hi Pantygynt:
Thank you for the wonderful comments. I am happy that you enjoyed this selection. The more I read, the more it grew lol. Thank you for the challenge.
Kim
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows how important art is and how often we forget about the lives of these artists. You wrote fitting rhyming epitaphs for these Master artists and sculptors.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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This shows how important art is and how often we forget about the lives of these artists. You wrote fitting rhyming epitaphs for these Master artists and sculptors.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Hi dragonpoet,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
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No problem, Kim.
Joan
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the old masters, their accomplishments and their graves. We all will end up in the grave, and we can just hope someone will remember us and not leave our last resting place forgotten and overgrown.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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A very well-written poem about the old masters, their accomplishments and their graves. We all will end up in the grave, and we can just hope someone will remember us and not leave our last resting place forgotten and overgrown.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2017
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I'm glad you enjoyed this selection :) This particular write got bigger than I ever expected it would lol I appreciate your comments.
Kim