Comment from smileycloud

Excellent

aaawww that is so sweet
love the middle line
that poem would win anyone's heart at Valentines or anytime
you will get some points there with the wife and the little ones
have a smiley day
Lorraine

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2018

Thanks, Lorraine

Comment from Marge Setzer

Excellent

I love this. The Little Drummer Boy keeps drumming away despite the change of holidays. This makes me want to sing. Clever! Creative! I'd love to get a card like this. Marge

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2018

Thanks, Marge, for the encouraging review. Bill

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written 5-7-5 Valentine's poem. Describing what a Valentine's effect have on our hearts when we see them especially on Valentine's day.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Thanks, Sandra

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Oh you romantic devil you. Bill, I never expected to see this side of you. Cut it out. Now I ask you, is this any way for an old tough as nails Marine to act? I think not. Especially an irreverent, I could not care less one. Come one, man up dude! LOL. I'm just kidding old buddy, you go be you, whoever the heck that is.

 Comment Written 03-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2018

Today I write a Valentine, tomorrow I will pick up my rifle again.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is off-beat but charming. So scientific with your use of "chambers" of the heart. Bringing in the sound effect of the heart beating is effective. Nice lead-in for your last line, "For my valentine." Your syllable count is perfect for the 5-7-5, A clever approach to the subject. judi

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Judi, for the thorough review. Bill

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Awe. Bill, isn't that just too sweet. I loved it and a very original 5-7-5 poem as well. Not an easy one to write, but you've said it all and with a great sense of humour. I love it. Good luck in the contest. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Ulla

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

VEery clever. You old romantic you. A couple of years ago I was diagnosed with congestive heart failure. Now my heart only rump-Pa-Pa pumps at 15% efficiency.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Sorry to hear about your heart. Do what the docs say and press on. Thanks for giving this a look.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Oh yes my friend a very good way to express your feelings I love the middle line and the presentation is great good luck .... Jill

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks again, Mrs P

Comment from Sharon Haiste

Excellent

I think this is a cute entry for the '5-7-5 Valentine' writing prompt.
This is well said, in so few words.
Good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thank you, Sharon

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Truly excellent artwork you chose, that complements your tiny poem perfectly. I laughed and enjoyed how you added papa to get the required syllable count. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2018

Thanks, Ine