Comment from brenda faye curtis

Exceptional

You've created some powerful images with your poetry. I had to read it a few times to fully absorb all the imagery. Thank you for sharing this great poem, and I hope you win!

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018

Thank you, Brenda, for the terrific review.

reply by brenda faye curtis on 05-Nov-2018

You're welcome, Bill. :)

Comment from frogbook

Excellent

Strong and powerful poetry here my friend. Liked the central words and rhyme scheme. Great presentation. Should be a great contender in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018

Thanks, FB.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Ya big show off. Okay I get it, you are capable of being deep when you want to be. I must admit that I was shocked to be reading this post coming from you. I had to go back and reread the name. Where have you been hiding this material?

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2018

Can?t fence me in, nomi.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admired your reflections about "dawn" and your analogies. Your use of abundant alliteration and echoing sounds intensifies your message. Best wishes in the competition- Joan

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2018

Thanks, Joan

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Hi

What an excellent free verse that you have composed for the free verse poetry contest. Presentation superb. You can see the early morning and a baby fawn being born the heading out to new adventures.

Grreat job and Good luck in the contest.

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thanks, Galactia. Welcome back

reply by Galactia on 27-Oct-2018

Hi

Thank you :)

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

You have captured the spirit of renewal of a new day in poetry. Your poem made me think about the new day ridding you of the poisons of the night. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thanks, Earl

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This reads beautifully. I like those "ing" words in the first stanza. Excellent simile--dawn, an unannounced inspector. Second stanza gives a good model for starting the day--make the new day oxygenated. Nice alliteration in the third stanza. I fell that you need a verb in there somewhere. Great free verse, and best of luck in the contest. judi

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thanks, Judi, for your interest and suggestions. Bill

reply by judiverse on 27-Oct-2018

You're welcome. Excellent entry for the free verse contest. judi

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Bill, and what a beautiful day to wake up to....your free verse poem is very well written my friend...your description amazing...******...good luck in the contest...picture perfect...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thanks, Linda

reply by l.raven on 27-Oct-2018

your so welcome Bill...love xxoo

Comment from BOO ghost

Excellent

Poem colorful and well orchestrated.

The vivid colored of a peacock and a rainbow combined.

I have heard through the grapevine that the sky turns purple, first, when the sun shows its face.

Lot of words to devour in this poem.

You got a bundle of alterations too!

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BOO ghost

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thanks, BOO, for giving this a look.

Comment from Cindy McIntyre

Exceptional

Bill, this is really a stunning poem. I loved each stanza. The free verse is used but it still has a sense of order and poetic rhyme too-dawn, yawn, fawn. And the line, "detoxifying the poisoned psyche" stood out for me. Well done throughout!

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018

Thank you, Cindy. I like to get away from cutesy animals and see if there's something to say. I appreciate your terrific review.