Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 117 "Arriving"Assorted poetry
16 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Wow - what did you do? Swallow an artist's dictionary of unusual color words? If only, I paged down to see your glossary, I wouldn't have looked up each word. Lol.
Beautiful picture tanka of the effect and impact of colors in the world due to the arrival of the sun.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
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Wow - what did you do? Swallow an artist's dictionary of unusual color words? If only, I paged down to see your glossary, I wouldn't have looked up each word. Lol.
Beautiful picture tanka of the effect and impact of colors in the world due to the arrival of the sun.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
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Thanks for the nice review .
Comment from nomi338
Yo dude, what the heck are you talking about? You have managed to totally confuse me. It sounds good and very poetic, but I do not understand what you are talking about. At the same time, my knowledge and understanding is rather limited so the fault is not yours. What is obvious is my learning needs to be increased.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Yo dude, what the heck are you talking about? You have managed to totally confuse me. It sounds good and very poetic, but I do not understand what you are talking about. At the same time, my knowledge and understanding is rather limited so the fault is not yours. What is obvious is my learning needs to be increased.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Translation:
Brown to brownish yellow skin
upon blue waves arrives
ivory clouds
witness beauty from the sea
join the copper green shore
Comment from Earl Corp
Thank you for the notes at the bottom, they really cleared up the vocabulary for me.. I didn't realize xanadu meant green.. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the notes at the bottom, they really cleared up the vocabulary for me.. I didn't realize xanadu meant green.. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Earl
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
wow, I'm glad you had the definitions for the words you used! I enjoyed your poetry style and the photo is quite captivating! Seeing that you are a retired marine, it holds even more depth and meaning. Thanks for sharing . . .
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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wow, I'm glad you had the definitions for the words you used! I enjoyed your poetry style and the photo is quite captivating! Seeing that you are a retired marine, it holds even more depth and meaning. Thanks for sharing . . .
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Kathleen
Comment from judiverse
With all the fancy words, the line that speaks to me is "witness beauty from the sea." I suppose it's just me, but I'd prefer to see a limit to the use of unfamiliar words. You do a great job with the tanka format. The count is precise and you have a consistent flow. Nice sounds with the sounds, such as fulvous and glaucous and falu Xanadu. judi
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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With all the fancy words, the line that speaks to me is "witness beauty from the sea." I suppose it's just me, but I'd prefer to see a limit to the use of unfamiliar words. You do a great job with the tanka format. The count is precise and you have a consistent flow. Nice sounds with the sounds, such as fulvous and glaucous and falu Xanadu. judi
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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This was a test for me use these fancy schmancy words and make them work.
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You certainly made it work. judi
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well...you certainly did your Thesaurus proud on this one -- I always enjoy the use of little known words in place of the drab everyday, and you have certainly gone all out on this one. You know, it almost seems like a language all its own...giving it a unique aura of mystery which is just what a sunset needs!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;) Yvette :)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Well...you certainly did your Thesaurus proud on this one -- I always enjoy the use of little known words in place of the drab everyday, and you have certainly gone all out on this one. You know, it almost seems like a language all its own...giving it a unique aura of mystery which is just what a sunset needs!! :) ;) Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! ;) Yvette :)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the kind review, Yvette.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Tanka about the very beautiful sunrise that turn the sky in magical colors and patterns unthinkable when we don't see it with our own eyes.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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A very well-written Tanka about the very beautiful sunrise that turn the sky in magical colors and patterns unthinkable when we don't see it with our own eyes.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Wenge is a relatively unknown type of wood finish for furniture, but it's made a breakthrough as an accent color as of late.
From the Millettia laurentii tree found in Central Africa, this is a tropical timber that is very dark brown in color.
Fulvous is also a color, sometimes described as dull orange, brownish-yellow or tawny, it can also be likened to a variation of buff, beige or butterscotch. As an adjective it is used in the names of many species of birds, and occasionally other animals, to describe their appearance. It is also used as in mycology to describe fungi with greater color specificity, specifically the pigmentation of the surface cuticle, the broken flesh and the spores en masse.
"Glacous" refers to a dull grayish-green or blue color.
"Eburnean" simply means resembling ivory in color.
In Finland, falu red is known as punamulta ("red earth"), after the pigment, which consists of finely divided hematite. Since the binder is starch, the paint is permeable to water. In Estonia, falu red is known as Rootsi punane, or "Swedish red"...
A dream version of Xanadu is an allusion to a real historical place, built as a summer palace in what is now called Inner Mongolia. Marco Polo visited it, starting a legend that filtered all the way down to Samuel Coleridge in England. The dome is his way of referring to the legendary palace of Xanadu.
It's also an eighties film starring Australian blonde bombshell, Olivia Newton John.
Good tanka construction.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Wenge is a relatively unknown type of wood finish for furniture, but it's made a breakthrough as an accent color as of late.
From the Millettia laurentii tree found in Central Africa, this is a tropical timber that is very dark brown in color.
Fulvous is also a color, sometimes described as dull orange, brownish-yellow or tawny, it can also be likened to a variation of buff, beige or butterscotch. As an adjective it is used in the names of many species of birds, and occasionally other animals, to describe their appearance. It is also used as in mycology to describe fungi with greater color specificity, specifically the pigmentation of the surface cuticle, the broken flesh and the spores en masse.
"Glacous" refers to a dull grayish-green or blue color.
"Eburnean" simply means resembling ivory in color.
In Finland, falu red is known as punamulta ("red earth"), after the pigment, which consists of finely divided hematite. Since the binder is starch, the paint is permeable to water. In Estonia, falu red is known as Rootsi punane, or "Swedish red"...
A dream version of Xanadu is an allusion to a real historical place, built as a summer palace in what is now called Inner Mongolia. Marco Polo visited it, starting a legend that filtered all the way down to Samuel Coleridge in England. The dome is his way of referring to the legendary palace of Xanadu.
It's also an eighties film starring Australian blonde bombshell, Olivia Newton John.
Good tanka construction.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Well --eh-- I would have included all of that related data in my notes, Dean, but I was busy just pronouncing the names. Thanks, for the additional research and for the excellent review. Bill
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Well, that's what minions like me are for, Bill.
We'll do your dirty work for you.
Anybody you want offed you just let me know.
Heh-heh-heh...
~Dean
Comment from June Sargent
Well, I'm certainly glad you added the notes - or I would still be wondering what these lovely words meant! But you've succeeded in painting a lovely image that matched the artwork beautifully. I would love to be on those falu shores now! THanks for being so creative!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Well, I'm certainly glad you added the notes - or I would still be wondering what these lovely words meant! But you've succeeded in painting a lovely image that matched the artwork beautifully. I would love to be on those falu shores now! THanks for being so creative!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thanks, June, for giving this a look.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love the picture, Bill, and to appreciate your tanka I am really glad you put in the meaning of your words at the bottom. I was all set to grad a dictionary, lol. Your description is perfect. Another well written poem. Good luck in the contest.:) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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I love the picture, Bill, and to appreciate your tanka I am really glad you put in the meaning of your words at the bottom. I was all set to grad a dictionary, lol. Your description is perfect. Another well written poem. Good luck in the contest.:) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you, Sandra