The French Letter
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Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Hi tfawcus, though I have not commented on them, I have been reading the previous chapters. The novel continues to be a griping story, full of suspense, twists and turns and I have enjoyed it immensely.
Keep up the brilliant work.
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Hi tfawcus, though I have not commented on them, I have been reading the previous chapters. The novel continues to be a griping story, full of suspense, twists and turns and I have enjoyed it immensely.
Keep up the brilliant work.
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Very many thanks for your encouragement, Sandra, and for the sixth star. I missed 'griping' until you pointed it out. Wonderful what the odd missing letter can do. A few years ago, I joined the local spinners and weavers club. My brother was delighted to get a letter from me saying that I'd joined the sinners and weavers! All the best, Tony
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You're welcome, Tony, it was a pleasure.
Oh dear re your 'sinners and weavers' club! LoL!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Kayla's flirting and bravado is just an act, it seems. Plenty of information in this conversation between Kayla and Charles, and then as the drugs ease off the real person shows her concern for her sister. Great chapter Tony,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Kayla's flirting and bravado is just an act, it seems. Plenty of information in this conversation between Kayla and Charles, and then as the drugs ease off the real person shows her concern for her sister. Great chapter Tony,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 05-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Very many thanks for awarding this chapter a sixth star, Valda, and for your positive comments. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter, Tony, that has
Kayla filling in a few blank spots.
-She and Charles have a good discussion,
after they are settled at Kayla's place.
-She admits to being supplied with drugs
from Andre when needed.
-The biggest news is that of Alain Gaudin,
and Kayla knowing of his whereabouts.
-You keep the reader aware of the
importance of the beginning of the
story and the mysterious letter.
-Now, we will see what Helen has to
add to things, why she disappeared,
and what she might know.
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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-A good chapter, Tony, that has
Kayla filling in a few blank spots.
-She and Charles have a good discussion,
after they are settled at Kayla's place.
-She admits to being supplied with drugs
from Andre when needed.
-The biggest news is that of Alain Gaudin,
and Kayla knowing of his whereabouts.
-You keep the reader aware of the
importance of the beginning of the
story and the mysterious letter.
-Now, we will see what Helen has to
add to things, why she disappeared,
and what she might know.
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thanks for your review, Pam. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome, Tony.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
Stumblebum, that explains it, now I know why I was born with two left feet,
I'm a stumblebum!
But you didn't stumble one bit in this fine addition to the book.
The dialogue reads smoothly and true to character.
And now we see another side of Alain Gaudin, too.
It seems many in The French Letter are not what they first appear to be,
except the book itself, which is holding onto its intriguing mystery.
I wonder if there is another clue in that forgotten diary?
Excellent chapter.
No sixes left to bestow.
Robert
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Hello Tony,
Stumblebum, that explains it, now I know why I was born with two left feet,
I'm a stumblebum!
But you didn't stumble one bit in this fine addition to the book.
The dialogue reads smoothly and true to character.
And now we see another side of Alain Gaudin, too.
It seems many in The French Letter are not what they first appear to be,
except the book itself, which is holding onto its intriguing mystery.
I wonder if there is another clue in that forgotten diary?
Excellent chapter.
No sixes left to bestow.
Robert
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 05-May-2019
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Thanks for your review Robert. Appreciated. As far as I remember, Charles put the diary in the safe deposit. Maybe he should take another look at it. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
There's some pretty high contrast between the amorous interest and the sinister side of the drug dealing and terrorism lurking in the shadows of the conversation. Sometimes Charles seems a bit too nonchalant to me. Why would he ignore some of the things that were told to him about Kayla and Helen, especially when she seems to own up to it herself? I'd be booking it out of there. No matter how good looking she is. I think you need to weave in more of the danger, to make this more credible and exciting, and have Charles a lot more wary of what's going on around him. estory
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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There's some pretty high contrast between the amorous interest and the sinister side of the drug dealing and terrorism lurking in the shadows of the conversation. Sometimes Charles seems a bit too nonchalant to me. Why would he ignore some of the things that were told to him about Kayla and Helen, especially when she seems to own up to it herself? I'd be booking it out of there. No matter how good looking she is. I think you need to weave in more of the danger, to make this more credible and exciting, and have Charles a lot more wary of what's going on around him. estory
Comment Written 04-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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I appreciate your advice here. Charles is unduly naive at times and I may have to make some adjustments to his character. Thank you for the comments.
Comment from called2rite
Interesting read. There was a lot of undercurrent things going on. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. It was well done. I do wonder what the mystery French letter was about. Called2rite on 5-3-19
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Interesting read. There was a lot of undercurrent things going on. I couldn't find anything wrong with it. It was well done. I do wonder what the mystery French letter was about. Called2rite on 5-3-19
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Many thanks for your review and encouraging comments. It?s not easy to pick up the threads at this late stage.
Comment from Pantygynt
This was a most enjoyable chapter. I particularly liked the little snapshot of the lads playing table football.
Little cameos like that help to place the main protagonists in the real world. A sound device, especially when the plot is adventurous.
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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This was a most enjoyable chapter. I particularly liked the little snapshot of the lads playing table football.
Little cameos like that help to place the main protagonists in the real world. A sound device, especially when the plot is adventurous.
Comment Written 03-May-2019
reply by the author on 08-May-2019
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Thanks for these supportive comments, Jim. Appreciated. Tony.
Comment from LisaMay
I don't trust that Kayla. Anyone involved with white powder and absinthe and a bad pun!
Your characters are fresh, and relate to each other well with natural dialogue. Quite a bit of psychological stuff going on here, also due to the fact I am having to think more because I am not familiar with the characters.
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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I don't trust that Kayla. Anyone involved with white powder and absinthe and a bad pun!
Your characters are fresh, and relate to each other well with natural dialogue. Quite a bit of psychological stuff going on here, also due to the fact I am having to think more because I am not familiar with the characters.
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Ha! Ha! It doesn't look as if Kayla has a lot going for her at the moment, does it? Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony;
> Whoops, Charles forgot to call Helen! He's going to have to ask for tonight, really ask for it, on his knees. Chuckle!
> So Kayla is moonlighting and tooting-up the white snow queen, while Charles is watching her take the inevitable high slide to normalcy.
> What else has Kayla criminally got herself involved in?
>This chapter is a little bit this smaller but more about Kayla's and Charles's attitudes. Charles attitude toward Kayla's snow snuffing and trying to find out more about Kayla's involvement in Pakistan or Phuket.
> In Kayla's susceptibility over loyalty to Andre, as a reaction to any romantic pass from Charles was hesitantly thwarted.
>Thanks for a very developing chapter Of more intrigued and take care and have a good one Tony.
Alx
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Cheers, Tony;
> Whoops, Charles forgot to call Helen! He's going to have to ask for tonight, really ask for it, on his knees. Chuckle!
> So Kayla is moonlighting and tooting-up the white snow queen, while Charles is watching her take the inevitable high slide to normalcy.
> What else has Kayla criminally got herself involved in?
>This chapter is a little bit this smaller but more about Kayla's and Charles's attitudes. Charles attitude toward Kayla's snow snuffing and trying to find out more about Kayla's involvement in Pakistan or Phuket.
> In Kayla's susceptibility over loyalty to Andre, as a reaction to any romantic pass from Charles was hesitantly thwarted.
>Thanks for a very developing chapter Of more intrigued and take care and have a good one Tony.
Alx
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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You've taught me a whole new vocabulary with the white snow queen and snow snuffing! I think you're right that Charles might have a bit of grovelling to do when he next sees Helen! Thanks for the review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Tony,
A nice circular aspect to this one, bringing us back to the original quest before all of the 'inconvenient nonsense' of espionage and misadventures.
to tidy the place since Andre had been dragged away by the police.- no accent over the 'e' for Andre here.
That's why he moonlights at the Moulin Rouge. - need closing speech marks here.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Hi Tony,
A nice circular aspect to this one, bringing us back to the original quest before all of the 'inconvenient nonsense' of espionage and misadventures.
to tidy the place since Andre had been dragged away by the police.- no accent over the 'e' for Andre here.
That's why he moonlights at the Moulin Rouge. - need closing speech marks here.
All the best
G
Comment Written 02-May-2019
reply by the author on 02-May-2019
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Thanks, G., both for the review and for the edits. Appreciated. Best wishes, Tony