RESIDUE OF WAR
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "My Mate Ray"And the futility of it all...
16 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your well-deserved prize. This is poignant and humorous both--a rare feat to pull off! I missed the release--so glad I caught up. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Congrats on your well-deserved prize. This is poignant and humorous both--a rare feat to pull off! I missed the release--so glad I caught up. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 14-May-2020
reply by the author on 15-May-2020
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Thanks Liz, for the congrats and for reviewing a one and two center. I haven't graced the podium since 2008/9, albeit third, but hopefully I might do even better next time lol! xoxo
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You've got two up on me--I haven't even got so much as mention for my entries!
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Keep trying. I get so jaded because I haven't won a Site contest for 12 years, but coming third gives me a sliver of hope. Your work is really good, and deserving of a win, so don't give up!
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Thanks for the virtual vote!
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
I so enjoy your beautiful poetry, Princess! Your ability to tell a story in a poem is truly exceptional! Your rhyming flows beautifully--never forced. The rhythm, as well, on point! Well worthy of a six, but as I am out, please accept a virtual one. Hugs, Seraph ~
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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I so enjoy your beautiful poetry, Princess! Your ability to tell a story in a poem is truly exceptional! Your rhyming flows beautifully--never forced. The rhythm, as well, on point! Well worthy of a six, but as I am out, please accept a virtual one. Hugs, Seraph ~
Comment Written 26-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2020
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Oh MWAH! Again, a mere one and two center. But I'm glad you read and commented. I will gladly accept your virtual six any day my dear Seraph xoxoxoxo
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MUAH!!! :*
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
The poem definitely tells a story and the story is heartfelt. Mentoring is so essential and in this story, very welcome. Loyalty is rife in the military, for each one watching each other's backs. It is something very hard to define.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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The poem definitely tells a story and the story is heartfelt. Mentoring is so essential and in this story, very welcome. Loyalty is rife in the military, for each one watching each other's backs. It is something very hard to define.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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It is, that's for sure. It exists in the police force, and among nurses as well.
Thank you, Raffaelina, for a thoughtful review xoxoxo
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very poignant poem with excellent rhyme. I really enjoyed reading it. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Cheers. Jen.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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This is a very poignant poem with excellent rhyme. I really enjoyed reading it. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Cheers. Jen.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thank you Jen xoxoxo
Comment from harmony13
The author's words were descriptive, heartfelt and creative. The reader
pondered on the theme of this poem. I really liked the last stanza.
Such a beautiful tribute to "your mate Ray". The poem flows and connects well.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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The author's words were descriptive, heartfelt and creative. The reader
pondered on the theme of this poem. I really liked the last stanza.
Such a beautiful tribute to "your mate Ray". The poem flows and connects well.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2020
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Thanks very much harmony13 xoxoxoxo
Comment from Michele Harber
I usually enter the Share a Story in a Poem contest (heck, I won the last one) but, after reading this, I'm not sure I will. This is incredible!! The plot, the character development, the dialect, even the picture you chose are all amazing. I've commented before on how well you speak from the male perspective, and this further proves my point. If they fail to acknowledge this as one of the winners, preferably in first place, I will fully agree with you on a certain other point you've made before.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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I usually enter the Share a Story in a Poem contest (heck, I won the last one) but, after reading this, I'm not sure I will. This is incredible!! The plot, the character development, the dialect, even the picture you chose are all amazing. I've commented before on how well you speak from the male perspective, and this further proves my point. If they fail to acknowledge this as one of the winners, preferably in first place, I will fully agree with you on a certain other point you've made before.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Oh gee...this really makes my day! I know you're not an habitual six-giver, so to get one from you is an achievement on its own. Then to add the comments you've made; you don't know what an extreme thrill it is to hear you say what you've said about this.
I'm not holding out much hope for it though, due to reasons alluded to in your review. But I don't care, because this is a poem that when first written, I hated it. Then tweaked and added a bit more and here it is. Again, thank you so much for what you said my friend; it means a lot to me xoxoxoxoxox
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You're welcome, Chris. You so deserve the six (which, you're right, I do give out sparingly) and the comments. If I like something but don't love it, I'll give nice comments, but I don't rave, as I did about this, unless something is so good that nothing less would do. That's definitely the case here. Also, I never ever give sixes or raves based on friendship, only on talent.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest.
This verse is well written and nicely rhymed. The story is clear and very well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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I think this is a good entry for the Share a Story in a Poem contest.
This verse is well written and nicely rhymed. The story is clear and very well told.
Well done and I wish you good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thanks Sharon xoxoxo
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful though sad, heart breaking read this is, you made a friend but there are so many more down sides in this story, an excellent journey you have taken us on, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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What a wonderful though sad, heart breaking read this is, you made a friend but there are so many more down sides in this story, an excellent journey you have taken us on, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you kahpot xoxoxox
Comment from lyenochka
So sad. And you told this story beautifully. You told it very much like a man would of his best military mate.
I really liked "cocooned by some divine
protection, and I almost dared to hope we'd both survive."
Question:
"Or crawling through the blood and guts, your spirit fairly spent," (who is the "your" referring to? hypothetical? Ray? or perhaps, "my" in this case?)
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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So sad. And you told this story beautifully. You told it very much like a man would of his best military mate.
I really liked "cocooned by some divine
protection, and I almost dared to hope we'd both survive."
Question:
"Or crawling through the blood and guts, your spirit fairly spent," (who is the "your" referring to? hypothetical? Ray? or perhaps, "my" in this case?)
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you lyenochka xoxoxox
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Congratulations on your third place finish!!
Comment from Gail Denham
Well done poem of what so many did go through in the wars - heartbreak, grief, sad situations - every day something scary at times. A good look through this story poem of what it's like.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Well done poem of what so many did go through in the wars - heartbreak, grief, sad situations - every day something scary at times. A good look through this story poem of what it's like.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2020
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Thank you Gail xoxoxoxo