A Planet in Distress
We all suffer to some degree.14 total reviews
Comment from karenina
It's an interesting question. My grandma used to say if we all stood in a circle whining about the cross we bear, by the end of the "telling" everyone would choose to keep their own cross...and thank God for His mercy!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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It's an interesting question. My grandma used to say if we all stood in a circle whining about the cross we bear, by the end of the "telling" everyone would choose to keep their own cross...and thank God for His mercy!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Writing free verse isn't easy for me so this one might be a little awkward. Your grandmother was right. If really near the pain another goes through we would likely choose to keep our own cross. Thanks for the review.
Beth
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It wasn't awkward at all...
Comment from Spitfire
What stands out in this poem is your brilliant use of alliteration --the d's in stanza one and the "w" in stanza three. The last lines makes one reflect--always a great thing in poetry.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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What stands out in this poem is your brilliant use of alliteration --the d's in stanza one and the "w" in stanza three. The last lines makes one reflect--always a great thing in poetry.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Than you for the review and nice comments. I'm glad you noticed the alliteration.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You use good alliteration and some of it becomes onomatopoetic. This poses a good topic for discussion. It reminds me of Simon & Garfunkel's song Richard Cory. I used to teach this very lesson in my religion class. We never do know what is going on in the silent suffering of another, do we?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fAGKpoVFbmw
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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You use good alliteration and some of it becomes onomatopoetic. This poses a good topic for discussion. It reminds me of Simon & Garfunkel's song Richard Cory. I used to teach this very lesson in my religion class. We never do know what is going on in the silent suffering of another, do we?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fAGKpoVFbmw
Comment Written 14-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and the comments. I enjoyed reading what you had to say.
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
This is a thought provoking entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt. This poem should do well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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This is a thought provoking entry for the Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt. This poem should do well in the contest. Best of luck to you!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and the your comments. :-)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
We all suffer to some degree.
A Planet in Distress
Hello my friend
This is the second poem for The Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest that I read. It's an interesting entry with a good form and topic about Adam's mortal sin.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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We all suffer to some degree.
A Planet in Distress
Hello my friend
This is the second poem for The Free-style poem: human suffering writing prompt contest that I read. It's an interesting entry with a good form and topic about Adam's mortal sin.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thank ;you for reading and for you comments.
Comment from Ogden
Interesting, comparing the suffering we know with the pain complained by others.
But "Dish designed!" Where did you dig up that poem wrecker??
Ogden (Don)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Interesting, comparing the suffering we know with the pain complained by others.
But "Dish designed!" Where did you dig up that poem wrecker??
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and comments. I think you;re right. That line needs to be changed.
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Amen! :)
You're very welcome.
Don
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written free-style poem about humans suffering. There are different levels of suffering but we all suffer from time to time. Some can hide their pain very well an no one could ever guess.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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A very well-written free-style poem about humans suffering. There are different levels of suffering but we all suffer from time to time. Some can hide their pain very well an no one could ever guess.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for your review and comments.
Comment from pome lover
good point.
I doubt very much that we would.
This poem reminded me of a certain time in my life when I used to look at houses as I passed by and wonder if the people in them had happier lives than mine. And then common sense would kick in -- everybody has problems - theirs could be worse.
very well written poem.
pome lover
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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good point.
I doubt very much that we would.
This poem reminded me of a certain time in my life when I used to look at houses as I passed by and wonder if the people in them had happier lives than mine. And then common sense would kick in -- everybody has problems - theirs could be worse.
very well written poem.
pome lover
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for the great comments.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Since the day of creation, human suffering has been inevitable, we all suffer; someone endures silently and someone raises voice, cries at pains, we know only a few of sufferings caused everyday somewhere; well said; thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Since the day of creation, human suffering has been inevitable, we all suffer; someone endures silently and someone raises voice, cries at pains, we know only a few of sufferings caused everyday somewhere; well said; thank you for sharing this. Good luck in the contest. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you so much for the review and for you comments.
Comment from humpwhistle
In the end, someone is always worse off than you. Whining and wimpering serves no purpose. I don't blame Adam for my difficulties, nor do I glory in God when something good happens to me. Life is a struggle for every living thing--some more strenuous than others. All we can do is all we can do.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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In the end, someone is always worse off than you. Whining and wimpering serves no purpose. I don't blame Adam for my difficulties, nor do I glory in God when something good happens to me. Life is a struggle for every living thing--some more strenuous than others. All we can do is all we can do.
Best of luck.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 12-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2020
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Thank you for the review and for you comments. I think the whining and dumping on others does nothing to make us feel better and there is always someone worse off than you.