Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Your turn with the Soap"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Addy García
As deep water is always an honor to have your poems on the site.
because we delight with each verse.
I am sure that the soap used in the child, cleaned as a special being created, now we have the honor to know him through his works turned into poems.
Greetings from Mexico
ADDY GARCIA
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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As deep water is always an honor to have your poems on the site.
because we delight with each verse.
I am sure that the soap used in the child, cleaned as a special being created, now we have the honor to know him through his works turned into poems.
Greetings from Mexico
ADDY GARCIA
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 09-May-2010
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thank you Addy my friend for reading
Comment from Oatmeal
Orchidea Blu,
Your theme is strong. The flow is smooth. Created impressions through the descriptions are vivid, forceful and making reader think about it.
I did spot some SPAG. Send me a private message when the corrections have been made and I will be back to restore your stars.
From (day to day) you think, then say of things expected.
**day-to-day
Not knowing (were) it's leading, like a duck paddling** from
**where
**delete one space
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Orchidea Blu,
Your theme is strong. The flow is smooth. Created impressions through the descriptions are vivid, forceful and making reader think about it.
I did spot some SPAG. Send me a private message when the corrections have been made and I will be back to restore your stars.
From (day to day) you think, then say of things expected.
**day-to-day
Not knowing (were) it's leading, like a duck paddling** from
**where
**delete one space
Everything else was clean. Comprehensible and very nicely written.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you oatmeal i will be making the changes as requested Gary
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I once saw a bumper sticker that read; "If you were on trial for being a Christain, would there be enough evidence to convict you?" It made me think, so does your short story.
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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I once saw a bumper sticker that read; "If you were on trial for being a Christain, would there be enough evidence to convict you?" It made me think, so does your short story.
Comment Written 08-May-2010
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thank you for reading barbara
Comment from P1
your words work well for me
dont know if it is the truth or
not but i've heard some pretty
horrific stories so there is every
chance that it is. you handled the
subject very well, i enjoyed reading
it
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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your words work well for me
dont know if it is the truth or
not but i've heard some pretty
horrific stories so there is every
chance that it is. you handled the
subject very well, i enjoyed reading
it
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank ou for reading
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
The artwork photo just enhances this well written piece of poetry. The message comes across loud and clear. We teach children one thing and we as adult do something different.
Excellent poem............jim
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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The artwork photo just enhances this well written piece of poetry. The message comes across loud and clear. We teach children one thing and we as adult do something different.
Excellent poem............jim
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you for reading jusstuf
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi deepwater,
You keep your poetic pen busy! I like the theme of this piece and I also remember kids who got their mouths washed out with soap. A profound poem with an excellent message. Well done...chey
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Hi deepwater,
You keep your poetic pen busy! I like the theme of this piece and I also remember kids who got their mouths washed out with soap. A profound poem with an excellent message. Well done...chey
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you chey
Comment from DecrepitOldBag
Oh boy! This is deep and full of questions one hardly dares to answer to oneself. I remember the soap! In our house it was used for cussing too.
Your thoughts are set well in this piece. You have a way of making the reader feel what you have written nreally applies to just them alone.
Warm wishes
Kat
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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Oh boy! This is deep and full of questions one hardly dares to answer to oneself. I remember the soap! In our house it was used for cussing too.
Your thoughts are set well in this piece. You have a way of making the reader feel what you have written nreally applies to just them alone.
Warm wishes
Kat
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you kat for reading
Comment from dportwood
deepwater,
Sometimes brutally honest is too brutal and so there are words unspoken. Human interactions and relationships are complicated. Perhaps we should all just say what we mean.
Question: Do you think I'm too fat?
Answer: Absolutely
Duane
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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deepwater,
Sometimes brutally honest is too brutal and so there are words unspoken. Human interactions and relationships are complicated. Perhaps we should all just say what we mean.
Question: Do you think I'm too fat?
Answer: Absolutely
Duane
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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lol duane but thank you for reading , your not fat...smiling
Comment from closetpoetjester
This was a great poem my friend and it spoke volumes about what we all cover up when you really think about it. We are programmed to give the best response to others I guess and taught that acceptance is not really making waves. But sometimes we have to make waves to see if our theories are true so we all really need to be true to ourselves in every way possible.
Cheers for a well written and thoughtfully crafted piece of poetry.
Closetpoetjester
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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This was a great poem my friend and it spoke volumes about what we all cover up when you really think about it. We are programmed to give the best response to others I guess and taught that acceptance is not really making waves. But sometimes we have to make waves to see if our theories are true so we all really need to be true to ourselves in every way possible.
Cheers for a well written and thoughtfully crafted piece of poetry.
Closetpoetjester
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you jester for reading
Comment from percival86jack
This is a great analogy my friend! Assimilating adulthood little white with those of children... "White lies, Big lies, Small lies, Untrue, where will this all lead? Soap was the punishment for children, to wash away their lies" Kudos my friend... cheers, Jack
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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This is a great analogy my friend! Assimilating adulthood little white with those of children... "White lies, Big lies, Small lies, Untrue, where will this all lead? Soap was the punishment for children, to wash away their lies" Kudos my friend... cheers, Jack
Comment Written 08-May-2010
reply by the author on 08-May-2010
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thank you jack for reading