Writings From the Heart
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Comment from missy98writer
Wow deepwater,
I love your ode to the cowgirl. Beautiful photo you've used. Excellent free verse. Great imagery and very descriptive writing. I especially liked the lines:
Loneliness is a hard time some cowgirl's must endure
Her man's away for weeks on end and leaves her to the chores
Her life has change from days of old when there was just the two
How sweet it was to think of thing's he promised they would do
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the wall-mark store
Her fancy ways long gone with age,
I feel the cowgirl doesn't care about the mundane with the love of a good cowboy. There's nothing wrong with the things a woman or man endures for their beloved. Another wonderful poem - keep on writing. . .Melissa.
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reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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Wow deepwater,
I love your ode to the cowgirl. Beautiful photo you've used. Excellent free verse. Great imagery and very descriptive writing. I especially liked the lines:
Loneliness is a hard time some cowgirl's must endure
Her man's away for weeks on end and leaves her to the chores
Her life has change from days of old when there was just the two
How sweet it was to think of thing's he promised they would do
Her cowgirl ways of pearls and lace replaced with the wall-mark store
Her fancy ways long gone with age,
I feel the cowgirl doesn't care about the mundane with the love of a good cowboy. There's nothing wrong with the things a woman or man endures for their beloved. Another wonderful poem - keep on writing. . .Melissa.
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Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Melissa for reading
Comment from JimLee
I think you did a nice job of expressing a lady's thoughts after years of routine. The major change I would make is in the third to last sentence.
I had to read it three times to finally guess what you were talking about. It is Wal-Mart, not wall-mark.
Overall you have captured a real feeling.
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I think you did a nice job of expressing a lady's thoughts after years of routine. The major change I would make is in the third to last sentence.
I had to read it three times to finally guess what you were talking about. It is Wal-Mart, not wall-mark.
Overall you have captured a real feeling.
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Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thanks
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thank you