Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Terra Sanctum, A Shadow on the Grey"An extended story in poem form
106 total reviews
Comment from Betinka
For as long as there is mystery, man will always wonder why,So this time round he found that eating the forbidden fruit lead humanity quite awry... do not dispair -he'll yet be there and next time maybe he will stop and think and care before tasting the forbidden fruit thats always waiting there.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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For as long as there is mystery, man will always wonder why,So this time round he found that eating the forbidden fruit lead humanity quite awry... do not dispair -he'll yet be there and next time maybe he will stop and think and care before tasting the forbidden fruit thats always waiting there.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Betinka. Man is a chronically curious beast, for sure!
Mike
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curious yes, but unlike the rest of creation,with a trembling conscience, quite wonderful
Comment from katz meow
Hey Mike,
I realize this is the last Chapter, but it could easily be a stand-alone poem, too. This is the 1st I've read, and I was so enthralled it was amazing. It's gonna take me awhile, but I want to read it all. This write is fantastic.
katz meow
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Hey Mike,
I realize this is the last Chapter, but it could easily be a stand-alone poem, too. This is the 1st I've read, and I was so enthralled it was amazing. It's gonna take me awhile, but I want to read it all. This write is fantastic.
katz meow
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Katz. It's taken me a long while to write all ten chapters, but I'm really happy with the end result :-)
Mike
Comment from BlackVelvet
wow..you blew me away with this one! very deep and meaningful.. the imagery provides an impact on the reader which I found profound. excellent work!
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wow..you blew me away with this one! very deep and meaningful.. the imagery provides an impact on the reader which I found profound. excellent work!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, BV :-). I'm so happy with the feedback I'm getting on this poem, and especially with the sprinkling of sixes. Thanks so much for the great rating and review!
Mike
Comment from FredCollingwood
Just remember ... things always look the darkes and greyest just before they turn completely BLACK. Great rhyme and read.
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Just remember ... things always look the darkes and greyest just before they turn completely BLACK. Great rhyme and read.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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lol, thanks Fred, and I think you're right. Got to love writing the really bleak stuff!
Mike
Comment from adewpearl
I love you allusion to the haunting Billy Holliday song in your final chapter - I have always found that song brilliant in its imagery of the lynched man as strange fruit hanging in the tree. Your repetition of the phrase is compelling.
This has been a compelling epic poem to follow, Mike, and your ending does it justice. As with all the installments, the cadence and rhymes are spot on, the story is compelling, the descriptions and images compelling. Brooke
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I love you allusion to the haunting Billy Holliday song in your final chapter - I have always found that song brilliant in its imagery of the lynched man as strange fruit hanging in the tree. Your repetition of the phrase is compelling.
This has been a compelling epic poem to follow, Mike, and your ending does it justice. As with all the installments, the cadence and rhymes are spot on, the story is compelling, the descriptions and images compelling. Brooke
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Brooke :-). I'm so glad you've been compelled to keep reading, and your encouragement and support has been magnificent. I wouldn't have finished this without you and Hitch and Smurphgirl. I hearty thank you, my friend.
Mike
Comment from juliaSjames
Apocalyptic poetry at its best! I do not agree with or accept the message of your writing, but I am in awe of your work. This chapter (I will have to read the others) rocks! I hardly know where to begin a review so I won't try. Whatever you did, it works.
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Apocalyptic poetry at its best! I do not agree with or accept the message of your writing, but I am in awe of your work. This chapter (I will have to read the others) rocks! I hardly know where to begin a review so I won't try. Whatever you did, it works.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Julia. My poetry stems from ideas, very rarely from opinions or life philosophies, so don't waorry about the message, it was more the bleak style I wished to tell the story in. Thank you for the awesome review :-)
Mike
Comment from chells36
This is nice well written work , with a quintessentially good usage of words
it is good to see that the picture you have chosen only adds a small focus
in reviewing i find people tend to lean on the artwork alot
It is the writing that speaks out for its self alone
Rich and textured
well done
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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This is nice well written work , with a quintessentially good usage of words
it is good to see that the picture you have chosen only adds a small focus
in reviewing i find people tend to lean on the artwork alot
It is the writing that speaks out for its self alone
Rich and textured
well done
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you. I'm a great believer in the words over the image, and you;re right about some people relying way too much on them. I use them to aid presentation and enhance theme, but they are the garnish on the stew, nothing more :-)
Mike
Comment from Kingsland
This was a bit different, but well written. I found this to be a good piece written in separate parts. You have a good portion of imagery in this piece of poetic art. This was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
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This was a bit different, but well written. I found this to be a good piece written in separate parts. You have a good portion of imagery in this piece of poetic art. This was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you, John. I really appreciated. This work has been a long time in the making, but I'm pleased with it now it's finished.
Mike
Comment from dportwood
Fleedleflump,
Wow! Applause to you for taking on a missile of such strength and magnitude. Great flow and rhyming throughout this series of quatrains. Well done.
Duane
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Fleedleflump,
Wow! Applause to you for taking on a missile of such strength and magnitude. Great flow and rhyming throughout this series of quatrains. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thank you, Duane. It's been a big job, but extraordinarily rewarding, especially as I managed to finish! :-)
Mike
Comment from bhogg
I was glad to see the wandering man again, but sad to see his journey end. I'll just have to circle back and re-read some of the previous chapters. So what's next? Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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I was glad to see the wandering man again, but sad to see his journey end. I'll just have to circle back and re-read some of the previous chapters. So what's next? Regards, Bill
Comment Written 07-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2010
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Thanks, Bill. I have a new novel to start soon, and also a thousand ideas for a script. Not to mention the many incidental poems that will do doubt write themselves! I will miss writing this series, but this felt like an appropriate way and time to end.
Mike