Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Come, Woodsman"A collection of poems on these themes
95 total reviews
Comment from Iria
The message you are sending the reading is very significant. I really liked the way you have written it. Very thought-out, I really loved it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
  |
The message you are sending the reading is very significant. I really liked the way you have written it. Very thought-out, I really loved it.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
-
Thank you.
Steve
Comment from Gungalo
This is a very well written sonnet with everything in it you could possibly want. The form is right on and the syllables are perfectly executed.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
|
This is a very well written sonnet with everything in it you could possibly want. The form is right on and the syllables are perfectly executed.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
-
Thank you.
Steve
-
My pleasure Steve.
Comment from visionary1234
Well done kiwi ... this reads like a classic sonnet, with a beautiful concluding couplet which really has something to say. Not at all "contrived" as so many modern sonnets are. Lovely!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
|
Well done kiwi ... this reads like a classic sonnet, with a beautiful concluding couplet which really has something to say. Not at all "contrived" as so many modern sonnets are. Lovely!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
-
Thank you.
Have I been too subtle, do you think? No one seems to get that I'm not really talking about tree...
Steve
-
No - It's perfect, just the way it is!!! Don't change a THING!
Comment from Carrie Carson
I get a big fat DUH for me, even after I read the title then the poem, I was still surprised by the ending. Great job with this.
No spag issues, good form, count is correct, too.
Good luck in the contest...lots of entries, I think. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
|
I get a big fat DUH for me, even after I read the title then the poem, I was still surprised by the ending. Great job with this.
No spag issues, good form, count is correct, too.
Good luck in the contest...lots of entries, I think. :) Carrie
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
-
Thanks, Carrie.
Steve
-
Sure, you're welcome. :)
Comment from Fleedleflump
Excellent sonnet form - structure is great, meter is spot on, and the volta works naturally into the flow. Some interesting rhymes that keep it unusual, and I love the theme of calling for mercy on the ancient tree, that it might serve a new purpose. Excellent piece.
Mike
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
|
Excellent sonnet form - structure is great, meter is spot on, and the volta works naturally into the flow. Some interesting rhymes that keep it unusual, and I love the theme of calling for mercy on the ancient tree, that it might serve a new purpose. Excellent piece.
Mike
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
-
Thanks, Mike, but I may have been too subtle - no one seems to get that I wasn't really writing about a tree.
Steve
-
There's nothing wrong with subtlety, although I understand exactly the frustration you're talking about. Way too many poets on here painstakingly over-explain themselves and ruin the reading experience. Stick to what feels right, I say.
Mike