Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

Love the illustration you've chosen to go with this one gw - the perfect choice to thoughts I'll bet we've all had at some stage in our lives! We don't say 'contemplate on' though ... rather keep it simply "contemplate life's new surprise" - 'on' not necessary or correct.
:)S

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014

Remember I'm a Brit thank you for the review

reply by visionary1234 on 02-Aug-2014

I'm an Aussie - same English most of the time. Now as for those Americans ... :):):)

reply by the author on 02-Aug-2014

Lol

Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

The entirety of this work has no comparison. A unique work from the author. Very thought-provoking.
"My trust is the nightmare, that played us a-part,
Now I contemplate on life's new surprise,
What is to happen, can you surmise?" My perfect areas.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

this is an exquisite piece of poetic art! the imagery is breath-taking! i love the philosophical take on the issue and the curious questioning!
thank you for sharing!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from Raphael Montonaro

Excellent

Very creative format to this poem. Nice indirect rhyme! Very ell written......good job....you should do more of this cause this was good!

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

good use of questions to intensify all the emotions
God use of alliteration
Good use of enjambment
Good rhythm
Good rhyming couplets with some proximate rhymes

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very deep and good poem you have penned. It was a pleasure to read and review for you my friend. hugs, Teri

I love the artwork.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Thanks Teri

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

What is to happen? People will continue to die of old age and the children coming on insist on their own experiences. The lessons of the past are not lessons for this new generation, because they have not lived it. I suspect wars will go on as long as people are born into hatred and greed, but I like that you ask the question in your poem. Giddy

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

My trust is the nightmare, that played us a-part,
Now I contemplate on life's new surprise,
What is to happen, can you surmise?
Beautiful imagery and rhyme
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from Leineco

Excellent

Based on the last two lines - pregnancy seems to be in the offing. But based on the opening nine lines. . .I confess to a level of trepidation. But that is a traditional interpretation.
Another option would entail a new love (perhaps even of same gender assignment!) "Played apart" seems pretty final, so I can't envision successful reconciliation.

Bottom line. . .best I can surmise - - -is radical change :-)

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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Comment from DALLAS01

Excellent

This is rather sad. I always enjoy a poem that is peppered with question marks. I think it allows the reader to apply those doubts to circumstances in his own life. It creates a pause that requires an answer.

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2014

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