Haiku (beneath smoky skies)
Observed and heard when temperatures reached 106 degrees.91 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Snap crackle pop!
well done, dear Sis Cat. Superb word economy, imagery and phonetics. True to form. I particularly applaud the consonance of K-C, and L-- and alliteration of S and P. Good flow too. Good subtle personification as well. Enjoyed this--especially read aloud.
The tight an polished delivery, phonetics and uniqueness nudge this to a six.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Snap crackle pop!
well done, dear Sis Cat. Superb word economy, imagery and phonetics. True to form. I particularly applaud the consonance of K-C, and L-- and alliteration of S and P. Good flow too. Good subtle personification as well. Enjoyed this--especially read aloud.
The tight an polished delivery, phonetics and uniqueness nudge this to a six.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 03-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rama, for giving my Haiku not only its first review, but a six star review, too. The crackling sound of pine cones popping open in 106 degree heat astounded me two days ago. I wrote a page of drafts to find the right words to describe this phenomenon. Thanks again.
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:-)))) Wow!