Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Juliet"A collection of poems on these themes
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Comment from theBronxExpress
You've taken up an extraordinary challenge and, in my view, have succeeded, extraordinarily. You do Poe pride in originality of theme and in keeping to the cadence. This line is about as good as it gets - anywhere: "There she lies, a lifeless being, eyes wide open but unseeing." Superlative!
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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You've taken up an extraordinary challenge and, in my view, have succeeded, extraordinarily. You do Poe pride in originality of theme and in keeping to the cadence. This line is about as good as it gets - anywhere: "There she lies, a lifeless being, eyes wide open but unseeing." Superlative!
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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It took a while to get into the 'Poe Flow', but now I have triple rhymes running around in my head!
Thanks so much for the great review and the six stars.
Steve
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Steve,
Yes, Poe was a genius, but you sure make a brilliant apprentice. This is truly superb poetry. The way you hang the anapaestic rhythm and the triple running rhymes can only come from a man possessed (just like Poe), but I pray you meet a better end.
Best wishes
Reg
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Dear Steve,
Yes, Poe was a genius, but you sure make a brilliant apprentice. This is truly superb poetry. The way you hang the anapaestic rhythm and the triple running rhymes can only come from a man possessed (just like Poe), but I pray you meet a better end.
Best wishes
Reg
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thanks, Reg.
Yes, I will forego the brilliance if I can also forego the tragedy of his life.
Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Debra White
Hi Steve, this is a fabulous entry for the contest. I really love how you depicted the artwork - so very different from most of the other entries that I've seen. Great theme. Excellent story telling in a devilishly tricky format (I'm not familiar with The Raven though...!)
Very well written and thoroughly enjoyable. Good luck in the contest...
I noticed a typo in stanza 2;
'Then there comse a whoop of pleasure,' - comes.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Hi Steve, this is a fabulous entry for the contest. I really love how you depicted the artwork - so very different from most of the other entries that I've seen. Great theme. Excellent story telling in a devilishly tricky format (I'm not familiar with The Raven though...!)
Very well written and thoroughly enjoyable. Good luck in the contest...
I noticed a typo in stanza 2;
'Then there comse a whoop of pleasure,' - comes.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Debra, thanks for the praise, the stars and the sharp eyes!
I thought everyone would know The Raven - Once upon a midnight dreary, as I pondered weak and weary....
It even featured in a whole Simpsons episode.
Steve
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There's always an exception to the rule (and it's usually me lol!) I WILL read it! Debra :)
Comment from joneau2
Whoa, this is one intense piece of work, and it sent chills down my spine. Written as if by a demented soul it really grabs at one's grip on reality. Very well done.
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Whoa, this is one intense piece of work, and it sent chills down my spine. Written as if by a demented soul it really grabs at one's grip on reality. Very well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2013
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Thank you!
Steve