Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This free verse with a touch of rhyme, describes first love within marriage. This poem describes the perfect memory though not one that everyone is fortunate enough to have soch a tender first time experience.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Beautiful reveries of a first night after a white wedding.

You captured my heart with this one.

Best wishes for the contest, dw!

Sonali


lust(')s first love

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you Sonali

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This is beautiful in both your loving, gentle words and gorgeous presentation. An excellent entry. Good luck in the contest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

Thank you Debbie

Comment from DR DIP

Exceptional

shit deepie.. if I were a chick I would have to change my undies by now!! lol
that is the best suck up romance popem I have read on here
well done and thanks for sharing

wet dip lol

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thanks Dr

Gary

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

You have the sweet knack of picking subjects that we can all identify with gw! :)S

This silent night as moonlight sheds, its last rays for the dawn,
A ring of gold lay on your hand, with passion, your virtue, so pure,
Your fragrance lingers upon my lips, from kisses all so true,
Our bodies charged from endless tease, this first night love with you,
How sublime your body yearned for endless love, the awe of all submission,
Whisper of love so entangled the night, reflect our soul's condition,
This intimacy of night's first love, so pure with no ambition,
What more to want, but lusts(lust's) first love or memories of first night.

gw

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you Visionary

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

This is a beautifully written free verse poem of first love.
Sensual, romantic and full of emotion and passion.
A lovely picture and presentation.
Good use of alliteration.
Well done.

Janet

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you janet

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

This is beautiful .....I love
Your fragrance lingers upon my lips, from kisses all so true....
Well written...and beautiful artwork
God bless

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you Kiwijenny

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

ah yes the first night of wedded bliss....twas then her kiss set to flame passions play...a Shakespearean experience...indeed. Great read....love Michael

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you michael

Comment from dennis0530

Excellent

Written with feelings of sensuality and sensuousness.

On this first night which is supposed to be filled with memories to last a lifetime, lucky are the ones who experience it as the character does.

This is undoubtedly written in a mood of breathless expectation. That it is written in the present is the character's way of experiencing all the ongoing emotions. Truly all the emotions come into play as the lovers savor each moment.

As the author describes it, this is a closely intimate union and a soul-to-soul communion.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you dennis

Comment from s.m.kirby

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem on first love , some thing are just special and you wrote this so we can remember that feeling,very well done.

 Comment Written 03-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Aug-2014

thank you SM