A Little Viking's Tale
A rhyming short story for children122 total reviews
Comment from Crystal Carey
Great job, I do think you need to edit through it a bit more,
This one for instance ; I sailed the blue seas and I do as I please
And for a sign you sure have some gall: sailed should be sail or do should be did. Little things like otherwise I think it's great (hence the six :))
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
Great job, I do think you need to edit through it a bit more,
This one for instance ; I sailed the blue seas and I do as I please
And for a sign you sure have some gall: sailed should be sail or do should be did. Little things like otherwise I think it's great (hence the six :))
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks again
Comment from Gungalo
I like the moral to your story Eric and find it to be very helpful to a child. Amazing details are a part of this tale and a very good write of quatrains.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
I like the moral to your story Eric and find it to be very helpful to a child. Amazing details are a part of this tale and a very good write of quatrains.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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thanks Gungalo
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Smile.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Adorable! I loved it. So might Disney. Could be the beginning of a lovely poem with a lot future. Good rhyme and easy flow between stanzas. Robin Gilmor
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
Adorable! I loved it. So might Disney. Could be the beginning of a lovely poem with a lot future. Good rhyme and easy flow between stanzas. Robin Gilmor
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks much Robin
Comment from fictionwriter
This is a cute little poem. I think stopping at the stop sign is a good idea, at least until you see the way is clear, and maybe that's what the viking should do. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
This is a cute little poem. I think stopping at the stop sign is a good idea, at least until you see the way is clear, and maybe that's what the viking should do. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Alright thanks
Comment from c_lucas
"Stop Teasing Our Policemen.", "Stop, Take Off Pants." "Skip The Onions, Please." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
"Stop Teasing Our Policemen.", "Stop, Take Off Pants." "Skip The Onions, Please." This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks much Lucas
Comment from Janet Foor
This was a great little poem for children of all ages. Your carefully chosen words just flowed down the page and kept my interest to the end. Nice conclusion. Very nicely done.
Best wishes,
Janet
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
This was a great little poem for children of all ages. Your carefully chosen words just flowed down the page and kept my interest to the end. Nice conclusion. Very nicely done.
Best wishes,
Janet
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks much Janet
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Love it!! Dont let anything get in your way,know matter how big or scary it is you can handle it come what may,,,, The flow is good I like the colors. Nicely done...
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
Love it!! Dont let anything get in your way,know matter how big or scary it is you can handle it come what may,,,, The flow is good I like the colors. Nicely done...
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks Much Deorre
Comment from squid152
I used to fish in the day and sing at night when I lived at Catalina Island. You are very consistent on these children's poems.-Gary
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
I used to fish in the day and sing at night when I lived at Catalina Island. You are very consistent on these children's poems.-Gary
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Are you a Viking?..Thanks for the good review..
Comment from donaldww
After examining your text with a microscope, I was able to ascertain that it is a poem about a Viking named Eric.
There once was a little Viking named Eric
One night the viking he was a-singing [ capitalize Viking for consistency ]
The kids should enjoy this poem immensely.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
After examining your text with a microscope, I was able to ascertain that it is a poem about a Viking named Eric.
There once was a little Viking named Eric
One night the viking he was a-singing [ capitalize Viking for consistency ]
The kids should enjoy this poem immensely.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Thanks for the edit Donald..
Comment from Norbanus
A nicely built set of verses, eric. It reminds me of the commercials being used lately to relay the 'What's in your wallet' campaign.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
A nicely built set of verses, eric. It reminds me of the commercials being used lately to relay the 'What's in your wallet' campaign.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2012
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Capita One..I still owe them about 4 Grand..LOL