Writings From the Heart
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Comment from DR DIP
deepwater, it's so obvious you write from the heart, Your poems are real life written with an emotion because you have experienced this part of your life
you are definitely one of my favourite poets on FanStory.
dip
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2014
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deepwater, it's so obvious you write from the heart, Your poems are real life written with an emotion because you have experienced this part of your life
you are definitely one of my favourite poets on FanStory.
dip
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you for this
Comment from Trybuck
His deployment completed
He took his final stand
and now forever more
He's at rest in the land
Well done with this one, Buck
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His deployment completed
He took his final stand
and now forever more
He's at rest in the land
Well done with this one, Buck
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you
Comment from livelylinda
deepwater: a tender, gracious, loving poem about those soldiers who don't make it home. Their lives end way too soon, usually in a foreign place by faces never seen. God bless them, each and every one and please have a special place in Heaven for them to face eternity. livelylinda
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deepwater: a tender, gracious, loving poem about those soldiers who don't make it home. Their lives end way too soon, usually in a foreign place by faces never seen. God bless them, each and every one and please have a special place in Heaven for them to face eternity. livelylinda
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from mjac777
This an excellent, emotional piece of our fallen soldiers and remembering the ultimate sacrifices they made.
This appeals to me as I am from a military family and know first hand the tragedy
of losing loved ones in battle.
The use of too many reverse syntax phrases is forgiven as (I think) it sets a sombre tone and formalizes this work quite well.
Very moving piece - eloquently written.
Thank you for sharing.
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This an excellent, emotional piece of our fallen soldiers and remembering the ultimate sacrifices they made.
This appeals to me as I am from a military family and know first hand the tragedy
of losing loved ones in battle.
The use of too many reverse syntax phrases is forgiven as (I think) it sets a sombre tone and formalizes this work quite well.
Very moving piece - eloquently written.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Thank you
Comment from angelface2
What a glorious poem for a beloved fallen soldier. It was a smooth read and very heartfelt. Taps, to me, is always sad and I get teary eyed. Good job. Miss Sally
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What a glorious poem for a beloved fallen soldier. It was a smooth read and very heartfelt. Taps, to me, is always sad and I get teary eyed. Good job. Miss Sally
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from chasennov
"The Dark Of the Moon" What an excellent poem this is that you have created here. Commemorations to our fallen are always deeply appreciated. Were it not for them, we could now be living under severe conditions. Well done.
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"The Dark Of the Moon" What an excellent poem this is that you have created here. Commemorations to our fallen are always deeply appreciated. Were it not for them, we could now be living under severe conditions. Well done.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Welcome.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A vary well written and emotional poem. At first, I thought it was going to be related to 'Pink Floyd') due to the title. A beautifully penned poem with use of rhyme/proximate rhyme about a fallen soldier. Thank you for sharing this, my friend~Debbie
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A vary well written and emotional poem. At first, I thought it was going to be related to 'Pink Floyd') due to the title. A beautifully penned poem with use of rhyme/proximate rhyme about a fallen soldier. Thank you for sharing this, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Love, love, love your poem. Perfect illustration. You have written such a special poem that so many can identify with. How sad for our soldiers, but what a glorious way of sending our soldiers to Heaven. My tiny suggestion is: the word "pierces". Does it need to be "pierce" ? I am not sure. I can see it both ways. As I said, your poem is beautiful as is the illustration. Thanks for sharing.
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Love, love, love your poem. Perfect illustration. You have written such a special poem that so many can identify with. How sad for our soldiers, but what a glorious way of sending our soldiers to Heaven. My tiny suggestion is: the word "pierces". Does it need to be "pierce" ? I am not sure. I can see it both ways. As I said, your poem is beautiful as is the illustration. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from closetpoetjester
A thoughtful tribute and I like the way this is told directly from the soldiers pov. The honour and bravery is evident but too real here, is the consequence of war. Well written and I noticed you used "deploy" twice but it didn't affect the read.
Cheers P
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A thoughtful tribute and I like the way this is told directly from the soldiers pov. The honour and bravery is evident but too real here, is the consequence of war. Well written and I noticed you used "deploy" twice but it didn't affect the read.
Cheers P
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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Comment from c_lucas
War is a good way to thin out the youth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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War is a good way to thin out the youth. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2014
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You're welcome, DW. Charlie