Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Fragrance of First Night"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Zinnia48
This is quite a beautiful description of a new love. It is dense with vivid descriptions of touch, sight, and sound. I was confused about that gold ring though. It doesn't seem to quite fit the story. However, the description of the story itself is quite lovely.. good luck with the contest! Caroline
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This is quite a beautiful description of a new love. It is dense with vivid descriptions of touch, sight, and sound. I was confused about that gold ring though. It doesn't seem to quite fit the story. However, the description of the story itself is quite lovely.. good luck with the contest! Caroline
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Comment from w.j.debi
Steamy and sweet. How did you pull that off? Excellent descriptions to create the imagery and the mood for that special night. My favorite line
This intimacy of night's first love, so pure with no ambition,
Good luck in the contest.
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Steamy and sweet. How did you pull that off? Excellent descriptions to create the imagery and the mood for that special night. My favorite line
This intimacy of night's first love, so pure with no ambition,
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Eloquent wording to convey a poetic proclamation of pure love and devotion. A night to remember, one would surmise.
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Eloquent wording to convey a poetic proclamation of pure love and devotion. A night to remember, one would surmise.
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thank you Dean
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem, written in wonderfully expressed and descriptively fine language! This would rank with most poems, written in the best tradition of love poems! I guess the wedding night would the most written about love poetry of all! Well done, blessings, Roy.
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A beautifully written poem, written in wonderfully expressed and descriptively fine language! This would rank with most poems, written in the best tradition of love poems! I guess the wedding night would the most written about love poetry of all! Well done, blessings, Roy.
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Thanks Roy for this
Comment from adewpearl
good alliteration in lingers upon my lips
good use of occasional rhyme
lust's first love - add apostrophe for possessive
good sensory and sensual appeal
Brooke
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good alliteration in lingers upon my lips
good use of occasional rhyme
lust's first love - add apostrophe for possessive
good sensory and sensual appeal
Brooke
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thank you Brook
Comment from rrabinow
Great entry for the free verse prompt. Great job with your use of description, it conveyes so much passion and love. Great job. Best of luck.
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Great entry for the free verse prompt. Great job with your use of description, it conveyes so much passion and love. Great job. Best of luck.
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Comment from costellsgirl33
This is a very detailed and descriptive poem
It is also very sensual, I think that's the word I am looking for.
It's a great entry for the free verse poetry contest. Good luck and great job.
And the image is perfect
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This is a very detailed and descriptive poem
It is also very sensual, I think that's the word I am looking for.
It's a great entry for the free verse poetry contest. Good luck and great job.
And the image is perfect
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
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You are welcome