A Murder Most Fowl
It's best to be happy with who--or what--we are...138 total reviews
Comment from Kimberly216
As always an interesting story to say the least. The author notes did help me with this one. It seems to be a little different from what I have read from you but I must say that I am impressed. Great selection of a picture to accompany your story. Kim
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As always an interesting story to say the least. The author notes did help me with this one. It seems to be a little different from what I have read from you but I must say that I am impressed. Great selection of a picture to accompany your story. Kim
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
Comment from Gungalo
Wow and it's certainly interesting to say the least, Dean. A murder of crows and then some. Very ingenious story and one to remember.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Wow and it's certainly interesting to say the least, Dean. A murder of crows and then some. Very ingenious story and one to remember.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for taking the time to read it and give me your thoughts about it, Gungalo. Much appreciated!
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Smile.
Comment from Ben Colder
I find the crow an interesting bird. They gather behind my place here in the hills showing much wisdom. Split their tongues and they can learn to mimic your words. Excellent poem. Well done Dean. Shalom.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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I find the crow an interesting bird. They gather behind my place here in the hills showing much wisdom. Split their tongues and they can learn to mimic your words. Excellent poem. Well done Dean. Shalom.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, Ben. Glad you liked it, my friend.
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I notice on FS there is a need for cold case mystery writes. Much fiction and some other but not a good cold case mystery writers. Need I say any more. Ecc: Everything done in darkness comes to light either good or bad.. Think about it. Shalom.
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I will, Ben, and thank you.
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You can do it. if anyone can. Blessings
Comment from padumachitta
Hi This is a super story poem, a msth and a good one.
In my area the raven of the Firsst People is a trickster, much like the coyote figure in other tribes. Raven is not a harbringer of death, but a hrabriger of change...
Any way I enjoyed this peom. Thanks
(I wonder why i did not get a notice in my mailbox...i am a fan...oh well iste stuff i guess)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Hi This is a super story poem, a msth and a good one.
In my area the raven of the Firsst People is a trickster, much like the coyote figure in other tribes. Raven is not a harbringer of death, but a hrabriger of change...
Any way I enjoyed this peom. Thanks
(I wonder why i did not get a notice in my mailbox...i am a fan...oh well iste stuff i guess)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks, padu, I am really pleased that you liked this one. It's quite a bit different from my usual work. As far as a notice in your inbox, I wouldn't know, but I've had many others tell me the same thing. Site glitches, I suppose?
Thanks again...
Comment from judiverse
This rates a splendid 6 stars! The rhyme is excellent, and it flows as admirably as one of Poe's creations. Great use of internal rhyme. Great description of the precipice. "A chasm vast where souls at last relinquished all free will." Wonderful storytelling with the raven's words of warning to the woman bent on suicide. Despite the words, she jumps. She apparently is reborn to have a new life among the crows. What a wonderful story with excellent format! judi
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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This rates a splendid 6 stars! The rhyme is excellent, and it flows as admirably as one of Poe's creations. Great use of internal rhyme. Great description of the precipice. "A chasm vast where souls at last relinquished all free will." Wonderful storytelling with the raven's words of warning to the woman bent on suicide. Despite the words, she jumps. She apparently is reborn to have a new life among the crows. What a wonderful story with excellent format! judi
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Judi, and you've aptly grasp my humble attempts at bringing to life some old, American Indians myths and legends. I'm really glad you liked this one!
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You're welcome, Dean. This was a great one. judi
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Comment from Darkhorse555
really loved how these words drew me dearest friend A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.With graceful dive you felt alive very beautifully penned excellent piece
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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really loved how these words drew me dearest friend A downy bed to rest your head, now feathers in your nest.With graceful dive you felt alive very beautifully penned excellent piece
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks you so much, Darkhorse. I am sincerely grateful for such a generous review.
Comment from Mike Battaglia
Mr. Kuch sir...
As much as I adore your writing, and marvel at the rhythm of your words whenever I read one of your poems (for they surly have a signature cadence of their own, as much as your stories do), it is your mind that fascinates me most. Your inspiration is legion, but it's not just that. You dwell in places and muse upon things that most of the world isn't even aware exists; not in the variety that you do.
This was brilliant, sir. Thoughtful, contemplative; a sheer, epic fable of a poem. It contained both sadness and strength. You never say specifically why the woman is there to leap off the cliff, and yet you make her sorrow known. You make us feel it through our own sorrow. You put us there on that cliff and make us think about the things that would drive us to such cliff's edge instead of just telling a mournful story. And still, that's not enough...
A dear friend of mind coined a phrase that I just love. It came about from a writing challenge we fought against each other in: Dead Henry. A dead Henry is a twist that slaps you beautifully in the face; a twist you didn't see coming, but that highlights the profundity of a story where you thought you knew what was going on. You, sir, have hit me with a Dead Henry here-a gloriously majestic one--by turning the whole poem upside down and making it about the raven. It was profound even before you revealed your Dead Henry, but you turned on the marque lights and made it glow even more by injecting this with something more than just simple, musing wisdom.
You, sir, represent everything it is I love about reading, and writing. A standing ovation for you, Mr. Kuch sir!
With all due admiration,
--Mike
P.S. You truly are greedy, sir. The beautiful poem you crafted wasn't enough to highlight the brilliance of your wonderful imagination, you had to go an find a title for your poem that borders genius. Well, sir, I hope you're happy, because you have sufficiently and successfully rubbed my face in the sheer beauty of every single damn word that you put to paper (and I loved every bit of it).
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Mr. Kuch sir...
As much as I adore your writing, and marvel at the rhythm of your words whenever I read one of your poems (for they surly have a signature cadence of their own, as much as your stories do), it is your mind that fascinates me most. Your inspiration is legion, but it's not just that. You dwell in places and muse upon things that most of the world isn't even aware exists; not in the variety that you do.
This was brilliant, sir. Thoughtful, contemplative; a sheer, epic fable of a poem. It contained both sadness and strength. You never say specifically why the woman is there to leap off the cliff, and yet you make her sorrow known. You make us feel it through our own sorrow. You put us there on that cliff and make us think about the things that would drive us to such cliff's edge instead of just telling a mournful story. And still, that's not enough...
A dear friend of mind coined a phrase that I just love. It came about from a writing challenge we fought against each other in: Dead Henry. A dead Henry is a twist that slaps you beautifully in the face; a twist you didn't see coming, but that highlights the profundity of a story where you thought you knew what was going on. You, sir, have hit me with a Dead Henry here-a gloriously majestic one--by turning the whole poem upside down and making it about the raven. It was profound even before you revealed your Dead Henry, but you turned on the marque lights and made it glow even more by injecting this with something more than just simple, musing wisdom.
You, sir, represent everything it is I love about reading, and writing. A standing ovation for you, Mr. Kuch sir!
With all due admiration,
--Mike
P.S. You truly are greedy, sir. The beautiful poem you crafted wasn't enough to highlight the brilliance of your wonderful imagination, you had to go an find a title for your poem that borders genius. Well, sir, I hope you're happy, because you have sufficiently and successfully rubbed my face in the sheer beauty of every single damn word that you put to paper (and I loved every bit of it).
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Ha ha, thank you Mike. Your entertaining (and very well conveyed) reviews and comments never fail to spread a smile across my face. This one is no exception. You have grasped perfectly the whole, complete perception I've tried to create,from the "Dead-Henry (love that phrase!)at the conclusion, to the title of the piece itself. That can only be attributed to your keen insight, sensibility to the feelings of others, and your mastery of vocabulary. I had feared some rebukes similar to; "The word for a heinous murder should be foul Dean, not "fowl", although such a reprimand has yet to come, thankfully. You, sir Mike, rank right up their with professional reviewers, my friend. I applaud you as a talented writer in your own right, as well.
Thanks for the wonderful, indepth review, Mike. As always, I am deeply humbled by it...
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hill/will...test/nest. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling. Strong emotion. Good eye catching photo followed by a thought provoking message.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with hill/will...test/nest. Good description and alliteration. Good story telling. Strong emotion. Good eye catching photo followed by a thought provoking message.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much, RR. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from ennahanid
This really was a most wonderful read, so wonderful in fact that I have read it twice...so far...
Seems to me that is not artwork you would find after a write such as this but more likely an inspiration to write like this.It is inspired and what a fantastic legend it would make.
A most satisfying and inspirational read this morning and I thank you for it - Dinah
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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This really was a most wonderful read, so wonderful in fact that I have read it twice...so far...
Seems to me that is not artwork you would find after a write such as this but more likely an inspiration to write like this.It is inspired and what a fantastic legend it would make.
A most satisfying and inspirational read this morning and I thank you for it - Dinah
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you very much for taking time out to read and review it for me, Dinah. I sincerely appreciate it!
Comment from Deorre Leonard
Wow!! Great information. You told me things that I didn't know this is a very interesting piece. Great structure great presentation. In the very beginning you said its best to be happy with who or what we are. So true. Well done. Deorre
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Wow!! Great information. You told me things that I didn't know this is a very interesting piece. Great structure great presentation. In the very beginning you said its best to be happy with who or what we are. So true. Well done. Deorre
Comment Written 30-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2014
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Thank you, Deorre, and I'm very happy that the message came across that way to you. That was my primary intent, and to tell as entertaining story as I possibly good to highlight it. Thanks so much again.
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Thank you!!