The Rape
Dark Sonnet - after reading William Butler Yeats153 total reviews
Comment from Dodey
Amazing work .. And the truth of what sadly does happen all too often..Perfect rhyme and flow and clear imagery of this tragic happening..I couldn't fault this work..I have read your works before and you are an amazing poet..Bravo ...Dodey.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Amazing work .. And the truth of what sadly does happen all too often..Perfect rhyme and flow and clear imagery of this tragic happening..I couldn't fault this work..I have read your works before and you are an amazing poet..Bravo ...Dodey.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you for a wonderful review!!!!
Comment from sasil
And I thought all you wrote were happy poems...interesting to see the approach you made to the topic. Beautiful rhyme scheme and word selection--good mix of simple and complex words to depict the thoughtless brutality and the complexity of pain inflicted. Ran out of six stars, but hope this fiver and all my sincerest praises compensate--Best to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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And I thought all you wrote were happy poems...interesting to see the approach you made to the topic. Beautiful rhyme scheme and word selection--good mix of simple and complex words to depict the thoughtless brutality and the complexity of pain inflicted. Ran out of six stars, but hope this fiver and all my sincerest praises compensate--Best to you in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thanks so much you. Guess looks are deceiving, eh? What an indepth review from you. My appreciation for reading.
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Welcome.
Comment from Aeson
Very graphic stuff, i felt the sadness and the violation, rolled together with a generous dose of reality. it is a shame there are so many depraved and heartless people out there, but it is some comfort to know that there are people, such as yourself, who bring these dark sins to light, and in doing so bring much needed attention, necessary to boost public awareness and aid in prevention, good job!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Very graphic stuff, i felt the sadness and the violation, rolled together with a generous dose of reality. it is a shame there are so many depraved and heartless people out there, but it is some comfort to know that there are people, such as yourself, who bring these dark sins to light, and in doing so bring much needed attention, necessary to boost public awareness and aid in prevention, good job!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thanks Aeson for an awesome review!!!
Comment from Gigi love byrd
I'm crying from the pain... The intensity the horror of the moment yet the still of no one else being around your poem contains all of this my heart is racing, racing as tho'...(scratch that thought) it was hard for me to read this for reasons I dare not say but if you were going for vivid honestly imagery you've claimed it!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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I'm crying from the pain... The intensity the horror of the moment yet the still of no one else being around your poem contains all of this my heart is racing, racing as tho'...(scratch that thought) it was hard for me to read this for reasons I dare not say but if you were going for vivid honestly imagery you've claimed it!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thanks Tusonrisa for a wonderful review!!!
Comment from percival86jack
What a dark descriptive writing of this outrageous despicable act! If there is one thing that makes my blood boil... without a doubt, it's this! I become incoherent in my rage when discussing it! Thanks for writing it... your friend, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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What a dark descriptive writing of this outrageous despicable act! If there is one thing that makes my blood boil... without a doubt, it's this! I become incoherent in my rage when discussing it! Thanks for writing it... your friend, Jack xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you Jack for an awesome review!!!
Comment from Matoshka
This tells of a violent act of rape. How the victim is approached and attached. The vicious act of rape it self as he steals her innocence away. I felt her shame as she tries to hide. This is the most vile act one person can do to another. This is an awesome message. Your picture complemented your words. Good luck
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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This tells of a violent act of rape. How the victim is approached and attached. The vicious act of rape it self as he steals her innocence away. I felt her shame as she tries to hide. This is the most vile act one person can do to another. This is an awesome message. Your picture complemented your words. Good luck
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thanks sweet poet for a great review of this one and knowing it has to be stopped.
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You are so welcome Sweet Friend. This was a great message. Blessings.
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MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
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love you, I am down tonight, still under the weather. Blessings Gentle Spirit.
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Oh kisses and hugs for you to make you feel better sweet girl. Love you.
Comment from Amfunny
Excellent poem and very tragic, but yes, happens way too often. Very well written. Congrats on being picked for poem of the month nomination.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Excellent poem and very tragic, but yes, happens way too often. Very well written. Congrats on being picked for poem of the month nomination.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2010
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Thank you. I'd no idea it was chosen nor even how it got to be there. Wonderful review from you!!!
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well, it got my vote. :)
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Thanks you. I'm a bit surprised here. Had no idea it was. LOL.
Comment from lishareading
Fantastic realistic look at the emotions so many women feel every minute of he day throughout the world. Your words allow the reader to feel the fear, agony, loss of dignity, and shame that these criminals force on others without any regret. You have spoken my language here, my friend.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Fantastic realistic look at the emotions so many women feel every minute of he day throughout the world. Your words allow the reader to feel the fear, agony, loss of dignity, and shame that these criminals force on others without any regret. You have spoken my language here, my friend.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2010
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Thanks you. Sometimes we just HAVE to let it all be said in the same reality it happens in ... for the impact it provides in knowing what is going on.
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Absolutely; you can't paint pretty pictures about everything in life.
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Well ............ we could but it would be a lie!!!
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Yes it would; and that's something I can't do.
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I love ya girl. Sighhhhhhhhhhhhh.
Comment from Joyce Laura Bailey
Beautifully written, so expressive. Impressed as usual
with your writing. Lovely flow, rhythm and rhyme.
I am so proud to have you as a fan Gungalo.
Joyce
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010
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Beautifully written, so expressive. Impressed as usual
with your writing. Lovely flow, rhythm and rhyme.
I am so proud to have you as a fan Gungalo.
Joyce
Comment Written 23-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2010
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Thank YOU Joyce. I'm proud to have you as a fan. You make me smile and it's a wonderful thing!!!
Comment from Pili Pubul
Yesterday was sex at its best, today is sex at its worst, truly horrendous. But the gift of your talent is amazing just the same.
In shame, this virgin now in silence cries,
her innocence upon a dark street lies.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Yesterday was sex at its best, today is sex at its worst, truly horrendous. But the gift of your talent is amazing just the same.
In shame, this virgin now in silence cries,
her innocence upon a dark street lies.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2010
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Opposites. But all exist and need attention and writing about. Thank you so much.
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I was thinking about this poem , in reality is not sex but hate crime... You very welcome...
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Yes it is girl and thank you for knowing that!!!
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You welcome my friend.