Writings From the Heart
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Comment from Jeanie Mercer
October, with its obvious winding down into winter, lends itself to such restrospective thoughts. Very pretty poem. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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October, with its obvious winding down into winter, lends itself to such restrospective thoughts. Very pretty poem. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 26-May-2010
reply by the author on 26-May-2010
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thank you Jeanie
Comment from ulster3
Hi deepwater.
This is sad. It makes me think of songs and poems from other wars. I suppose we do look back when we are dying. You write with great style. This is excellent.
Fondly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Hi deepwater.
This is sad. It makes me think of songs and poems from other wars. I suppose we do look back when we are dying. You write with great style. This is excellent.
Fondly, Rebecca
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you Rebecca for reading
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You have a real gift. :)
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thank you Rebecca your friend Gary
Comment from luisestable
Not bad written in spite of the several lines to go into others.
I feel you could have been a bit more poetic, but this is only my taste. I believe that in free style you have the freedom to really go for it, but some poets prefer the casual approach even when they are free to play with diction in a profound way.
Take care now!
Luis
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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Not bad written in spite of the several lines to go into others.
I feel you could have been a bit more poetic, but this is only my taste. I believe that in free style you have the freedom to really go for it, but some poets prefer the casual approach even when they are free to play with diction in a profound way.
Take care now!
Luis
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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free style is up to the writer and guidelines are first be a writer then a reviewer so thanks for the comments
Comment from fictionwriter
You always hope that you leave something worthwhile behind, and those you love will never forget you. I hope that too. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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You always hope that you leave something worthwhile behind, and those you love will never forget you. I hope that too. Well done.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you fictionwriter
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very well written poem. It was easy to ready and flowed very smoothly. I the subject matter was a little dark, but it was still very well written.
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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This is a very well written poem. It was easy to ready and flowed very smoothly. I the subject matter was a little dark, but it was still very well written.
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you barbara for reading
Comment from fastdigits
A poem of reflection so poetically
framed in stylishly, soft words that
caress the heart as one reads on this
travel through life and the reminicing
of what footsteps in the sands of
time you have left.
Beautifully orchestrated and presented.
Well done
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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A poem of reflection so poetically
framed in stylishly, soft words that
caress the heart as one reads on this
travel through life and the reminicing
of what footsteps in the sands of
time you have left.
Beautifully orchestrated and presented.
Well done
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you for your comments fastdigits
Comment from Jay Squires
A very pungent and disquieting poem, Deepwater. October, being one of the later months of fall or early winter brings thoughts of death -- as does your poem. And it becomes a time to take an inventory.
Memories of live which I have lived [I believe you mean "of LIFE which I have lived"]
All in all, an exceedingly well conceived and written poem.
Blessings,
Jay
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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A very pungent and disquieting poem, Deepwater. October, being one of the later months of fall or early winter brings thoughts of death -- as does your poem. And it becomes a time to take an inventory.
Memories of live which I have lived [I believe you mean "of LIFE which I have lived"]
All in all, an exceedingly well conceived and written poem.
Blessings,
Jay
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you for your comments Jay made the change thanks
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a beautiful, but sad poem. I hope it is not coming from a depressed heart. If it is, don't give up. I have been where you are. God will comfort you. If it's just beautiful words by a poet, there are usually reasons we write what we do. I hope God brings you comfort and peace. Your words are very lovely and yet heartbreaking. Still, it is an excellent read. God bless you!
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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This is a beautiful, but sad poem. I hope it is not coming from a depressed heart. If it is, don't give up. I have been where you are. God will comfort you. If it's just beautiful words by a poet, there are usually reasons we write what we do. I hope God brings you comfort and peace. Your words are very lovely and yet heartbreaking. Still, it is an excellent read. God bless you!
Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you Harley
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You are very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from MikiB
A poem he wrote about his life and did he live it like he should have? The picture looks like October. In the second line I think you put live where you meant life?
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reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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A poem he wrote about his life and did he live it like he should have? The picture looks like October. In the second line I think you put live where you meant life?
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Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thanks MikiB made the change...
Comment from enjoi
I think you did quite well with this one. No errors that I could see, just an interesting short piece about looking on back at life. You get across the nostalgia rather well. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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I think you did quite well with this one. No errors that I could see, just an interesting short piece about looking on back at life. You get across the nostalgia rather well. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 25-May-2010
reply by the author on 25-May-2010
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thank you for reading enjoi