The Rape
Dark Sonnet - after reading William Butler Yeats153 total reviews
Comment from P. G. Simpkins
I am so glad I came across you on this site, you are one of the very best on here! to write about this kind of ordeal is brave and challenging, you have done an absolutely marvellous job of the terrible attack that people have faced. The feelings I had through reading this were mixed, I felt disgusted/angry/sympathetic/worried, and for that reason, I give you a six. This poem pulled so many feelings, also the imagery of that dark alley where an innocence lies is very fitting for your dark true and horrifying writing. SUPERB : )
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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I am so glad I came across you on this site, you are one of the very best on here! to write about this kind of ordeal is brave and challenging, you have done an absolutely marvellous job of the terrible attack that people have faced. The feelings I had through reading this were mixed, I felt disgusted/angry/sympathetic/worried, and for that reason, I give you a six. This poem pulled so many feelings, also the imagery of that dark alley where an innocence lies is very fitting for your dark true and horrifying writing. SUPERB : )
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks so much Paul. We can't forget the dark for it does exist. Your review is remarkable and made me smile ... because you appreciated me.
Comment from katz meow
Oh My Goodness Pam! I felt horrified and was is tears be the time I reached the end of this short poem. What a wonderful poem; this Sonnet has perfect rhyme and rhythm. And it has a flow that is smooth. Even though it was dreadful, I liked this poem...Katz
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Oh My Goodness Pam! I felt horrified and was is tears be the time I reached the end of this short poem. What a wonderful poem; this Sonnet has perfect rhyme and rhythm. And it has a flow that is smooth. Even though it was dreadful, I liked this poem...Katz
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks girl. All is not pretty and some things need to be said and written about as a reminder. Great review you!!!
Comment from Sharon Lee
A very poignant theme, it does happen to often. The last line is a strong image that I took with me after reading. Nice work!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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A very poignant theme, it does happen to often. The last line is a strong image that I took with me after reading. Nice work!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks girl and hopefully this will be some kind of a reminder that this sort of thing has to stop!!!!
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That it does.
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MUAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH missed ya while i was working girl. LOL. I really did.
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Your so sweetâ?¦
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LOL you ARE awake. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHH. Just checking.
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Kind of in and outâ?¦ trying to get this house in order
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Well take a break why don'tcha? LOL.
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Can't I have been out for a couple of days and this place is falling apart. lol
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Oops! Can't have that now can we? LOL.
Comment from Judian James
Such an upsetting piece of writing to read; rhymed and metered flawlessly to deliver the horrifying message about rape and its victims. Conveyed in such a way, that the reader actually squirms ... excellent job
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Such an upsetting piece of writing to read; rhymed and metered flawlessly to deliver the horrifying message about rape and its victims. Conveyed in such a way, that the reader actually squirms ... excellent job
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks you. Just showing all are not pretty writes but can be of such a nature you have to read them or ... write them. MUAHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Comment from AnnaLinda
Gungalo,
Your sonnet that was inspired by Yeat's Leda and the
Swan is well written. This does happen all too much.
Your ending is very impacting:
"In shame, this virgin now in silence cries,
her innocence upon a dark street lies."
Linda
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Gungalo,
Your sonnet that was inspired by Yeat's Leda and the
Swan is well written. This does happen all too much.
Your ending is very impacting:
"In shame, this virgin now in silence cries,
her innocence upon a dark street lies."
Linda
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks sweet girl!!! If you haven't read that Yeat's write ... do. Whew!!!
Comment from writer_of_life84
this poem touched something deep inside of me. i was molested as a child, and so i can relate. i LOVE this poem. very, very good.
"her innocence upon a dark street lies"....gave me chills. great job!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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this poem touched something deep inside of me. i was molested as a child, and so i can relate. i LOVE this poem. very, very good.
"her innocence upon a dark street lies"....gave me chills. great job!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thanks you. Sorry to hear that and know you know full well how it forever impacts.
Comment from annettebda
You have presented a brutish rape with stark reality and the violence of the act infects the words and form used to describe it as it does the lives of those who have experienced it.
Annette
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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You have presented a brutish rape with stark reality and the violence of the act infects the words and form used to describe it as it does the lives of those who have experienced it.
Annette
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Yes and sometimes we need to be reminded so we can fight it.
Comment from closetpoetjester
Well, despite this being such a dark piece I am yet to read such a vivid and rivetting Sonnet...beautifully written but very graphic and you put the reader in the empathy shoes straight up.
This was a most perfect write and I think the best one I have read this week...well done, vivid, confronting, poignant, graphic, rivetting, tragic, saddest of all...true.
Sooooooooooooooooooooooooo good...infact kudos to you my new and very clever friend.
xxxxxx
Closet
ps. Enjoy my last six for the week Gungalo...thoroughly deserved...the last one means the most cos I hang on until I see brilliance and this reeks of a six...can't say well done enough times.
Think I will book mark it too.
Many thanks for sharing such a harrowing and believable write.
xxxx
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Well, despite this being such a dark piece I am yet to read such a vivid and rivetting Sonnet...beautifully written but very graphic and you put the reader in the empathy shoes straight up.
This was a most perfect write and I think the best one I have read this week...well done, vivid, confronting, poignant, graphic, rivetting, tragic, saddest of all...true.
Sooooooooooooooooooooooooo good...infact kudos to you my new and very clever friend.
xxxxxx
Closet
ps. Enjoy my last six for the week Gungalo...thoroughly deserved...the last one means the most cos I hang on until I see brilliance and this reeks of a six...can't say well done enough times.
Think I will book mark it too.
Many thanks for sharing such a harrowing and believable write.
xxxx
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Sigh, now you really make me feel special, girl. A write that needed writing. Love your review and you!!!!
Comment from Jawster007
What a truly gripping poem. I am amazed that you could make such a horrific devastating crime into a well flowing piece of poetry. You do this without losing the seriousness and horrid brutality of this "taking." As an attorney who has both prosecuted and defended, I can say you have put into graphic yet gripping words that of which most cannot speak. This is so very, very well done. I wish I could say more, but I am in awe of your talent here.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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What a truly gripping poem. I am amazed that you could make such a horrific devastating crime into a well flowing piece of poetry. You do this without losing the seriousness and horrid brutality of this "taking." As an attorney who has both prosecuted and defended, I can say you have put into graphic yet gripping words that of which most cannot speak. This is so very, very well done. I wish I could say more, but I am in awe of your talent here.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Thank you very much for this review. Some times, just some times, we have to go past the norm and out into reality ... for the sake of all.
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So true! If we want to change or confront something happening witin society we have to be willing to talk and write about these issues. Great job!
Comment from richard7
Yes, unfortunately everyday, often, somewhere, beasts lurk.
Shoot the pricks i say.
I know someone close who i have not seen for some time she had this innocence taken from her by a family member, he died in jail.
Good eh!
Risky use of Sate.
It sits in well tho.
Good rhyme in this dark poem.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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Yes, unfortunately everyday, often, somewhere, beasts lurk.
Shoot the pricks i say.
I know someone close who i have not seen for some time she had this innocence taken from her by a family member, he died in jail.
Good eh!
Risky use of Sate.
It sits in well tho.
Good rhyme in this dark poem.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2010
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LOL but thanks for a great review. If it brought about a reaction in you ... that is awesome.