Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Bill Schott
This free verse, Light from Many Sources, transitions the viewers perception of the cosmos' light show to the mechanical replacements which bring the light to us.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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This free verse, Light from Many Sources, transitions the viewers perception of the cosmos' light show to the mechanical replacements which bring the light to us.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you Bill, have a fine weekend!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello JLR, this is well written and you met the club challenge well. You have included the various sources of light that guide our paths. How often do we enjoy those in the sky, when bright city lights dim the view. I enjoyed your thoughtful poem. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Hello JLR, this is well written and you met the club challenge well. You have included the various sources of light that guide our paths. How often do we enjoy those in the sky, when bright city lights dim the view. I enjoyed your thoughtful poem. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Dorothy, thank you you and that special guy have a perfect weekend!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
It sounds as if the speaker in this poem has spent many a night watching light come and go. Favorite lines: backdrop of starlight
while the new day's rays of daylight
cover over the last of near phosphorescence
of the moonlight glow.
I think I might add a hyphen between 'near' and 'phosphorescence' to show that the phosphorescence is nearly complete and not just close by.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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It sounds as if the speaker in this poem has spent many a night watching light come and go. Favorite lines: backdrop of starlight
while the new day's rays of daylight
cover over the last of near phosphorescence
of the moonlight glow.
I think I might add a hyphen between 'near' and 'phosphorescence' to show that the phosphorescence is nearly complete and not just close by.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you a good point!
Comment from Monica Chaddick
Congratulations on your well - written work being recognized and also being named one of the all time best. This is a beautiful piece depicting the dawning of the day. I have been writing chapters for a book and have also been describing the coming of the day.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Congratulations on your well - written work being recognized and also being named one of the all time best. This is a beautiful piece depicting the dawning of the day. I have been writing chapters for a book and have also been describing the coming of the day.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Monica, I do thank you for this nice comment on this free verse poem.
Comment from TPAC
An interesting stir of ingredients used in this write, finding its views compelling to my interests, enjoying this journey through imagination well expressed in my given opinion.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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An interesting stir of ingredients used in this write, finding its views compelling to my interests, enjoying this journey through imagination well expressed in my given opinion.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
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Thank you TPAC, enjoy your weekend to its fullest!
Comment from RGstar
I really liked the middle and ending. Great imagery and not over done with adjectives, as first thought it might be. Good alliteration in parts.
This is on borders of a six, only we have too few, but know this is worth.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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I really liked the middle and ending. Great imagery and not over done with adjectives, as first thought it might be. Good alliteration in parts.
This is on borders of a six, only we have too few, but know this is worth.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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RSstar, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my additional poem in Muses of the Heart.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your nature poem. It is well received and it remains me of several times watching the sun rise. Your artwork choice is wonderful. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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I enjoyed reading your nature poem. It is well received and it remains me of several times watching the sun rise. Your artwork choice is wonderful. Best wishes.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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angel, thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem, Light from many sources, in Muses of the Heart.
Comment from Ben Colder
Makes me wonder how street lights react in Alaska with six months of daylight. I bet the Norther Lights gives a problem. I enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Makes me wonder how street lights react in Alaska with six months of daylight. I bet the Norther Lights gives a problem. I enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Ben I am certain you are so correct, I have been in Alaska in the never ending twilight and it is eerie,
Comment from DeboraDyess
What an excellent addition to the club posts, JLR! I could see the image you were verbally painting. And then...one source of light traded for another in the blink of an eye. I love that part of the morning. :)
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed.
Blessings,
Deb
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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What an excellent addition to the club posts, JLR! I could see the image you were verbally painting. And then...one source of light traded for another in the blink of an eye. I love that part of the morning. :)
Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Deb,, thanl you~
Comment from nomi338
Until you experience of the brilliance of day breaking, slowly revealing the wonders of the natural world. The dimming if artificial light, replaced by the light of day. The chirping of the birds as they awaken and seek the insects that they capture to feed either themselves or their offspring. That is a perfect time to give thanks for the breath of life and all the blessings that come with it.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Until you experience of the brilliance of day breaking, slowly revealing the wonders of the natural world. The dimming if artificial light, replaced by the light of day. The chirping of the birds as they awaken and seek the insects that they capture to feed either themselves or their offspring. That is a perfect time to give thanks for the breath of life and all the blessings that come with it.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2020
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Nomi, Yes, nature is the embodiment of God seen in all things and is the truest essence of Light in our lives and our world.