Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
A brave man who can face a ghost and send her back into the darkness, after seeing her those past years. This is a really lovely poem, JLR, you set the scene perfectly. The mist, turning to fog. The two bells at the exact time, the smell of seaweed over the graveyard stones. All excellent reading. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
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A brave man who can face a ghost and send her back into the darkness, after seeing her those past years. This is a really lovely poem, JLR, you set the scene perfectly. The mist, turning to fog. The two bells at the exact time, the smell of seaweed over the graveyard stones. All excellent reading. Well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Sandra, I so value the time you take to read and comment on my poems. Have a wonderful day! Thank you for the good wishes.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem well written poem. It is very entertaining descriptive and written in good taste. I also like your ending and artwork choice. Best wishes
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I enjoyed reading your poem well written poem. It is very entertaining descriptive and written in good taste. I also like your ending and artwork choice. Best wishes
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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angel, thank you. I am quite pleased you enjoyed this free verse Halloween entry.
Comment from lyenochka
A very cool sea ghost story poem! I like the bravery and calm of the night watchman. Hope you do well in the contest!
Suggestions:
nightwatchman's bones on this All Hallows' Eve. (night watchman's)
'til next Allhalloween." (All Hallow's Eve)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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A very cool sea ghost story poem! I like the bravery and calm of the night watchman. Hope you do well in the contest!
Suggestions:
nightwatchman's bones on this All Hallows' Eve. (night watchman's)
'til next Allhalloween." (All Hallow's Eve)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, this is indeed an excellent entry into a Halloween contest. The subject is arresting, and haunting too, because it sounds as if her visits, happened every year which makes it all the more scary.
I am glad the watchman, who has met her before, knows just what to say.
A wonderful free verse poem, executed with great craftsmanship.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Dear JLR, this is indeed an excellent entry into a Halloween contest. The subject is arresting, and haunting too, because it sounds as if her visits, happened every year which makes it all the more scary.
I am glad the watchman, who has met her before, knows just what to say.
A wonderful free verse poem, executed with great craftsmanship.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
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Suzanna, thank you now on to more or less haunting work.
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
I'm not a fan of Halloween Stories but took a chance with yours
You captured my attention from the art work you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
I hope I'm able to sleep at night
cookie
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I'm not a fan of Halloween Stories but took a chance with yours
You captured my attention from the art work you choose to go with your poem, they are a perfect match.
I hope I'm able to sleep at night
cookie
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Miss Cookie, agreed and happily noted, so we move on... perhaps a well appointed Thanksgiving table?
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Okay there will be no Thanksgiving gathering at my home do to the virus but we will give God and the family gave by home and say a special prayer for Ernestine who died from the virus
Cookie
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
The night watchman's annual visitor
Graveyard by the sea
by JLR
Hello, JLR,
I love Halloween. Excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry contest. Nice alliteration with the 'whisper of wind weaving'
love these stanzas.....
"....soft light bleed into heavy dark shadows....love the imagery and poetic writing...."
creepy...
"...the sudden quake
felt in the time-worn hands
of this trusted sentinel
of the graveyard by the seashore..."
Well done, I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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The night watchman's annual visitor
Graveyard by the sea
by JLR
Hello, JLR,
I love Halloween. Excellent entry for the Halloween Poetry contest. Nice alliteration with the 'whisper of wind weaving'
love these stanzas.....
"....soft light bleed into heavy dark shadows....love the imagery and poetic writing...."
creepy...
"...the sudden quake
felt in the time-worn hands
of this trusted sentinel
of the graveyard by the seashore..."
Well done, I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Gypsy Blue, thank you for this validation and good wishes.
Comment from Taurus the Elder
Very Good. The story draws you in and has a solid ending. The art work is splendid and support the story. I enjoyed it, and it sent a shiver down my spine. Great job, good luck in the contest.
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Very Good. The story draws you in and has a solid ending. The art work is splendid and support the story. I enjoyed it, and it sent a shiver down my spine. Great job, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Taurus, thank you for the vote of success.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A scary sea faring story here and ghosts have long been the fear of sailors as the sea has taken so many lives. A fine presentation for Halloween, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
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A scary sea faring story here and ghosts have long been the fear of sailors as the sea has taken so many lives. A fine presentation for Halloween, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
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Dolly, I apprecaite the kind words.
Comment from Mastery
You should win the Halloween poetry contest for sure, Bill. Wanna bet? I think this poem is that good.
"She appeared,
as if floating just above the
pebble laden pathway
with her arms outstretched
fingers on both hands signaling
an invitation to
come - come here..."
Worthy of six stars, but I have no more.
Take care and good health, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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You should win the Halloween poetry contest for sure, Bill. Wanna bet? I think this poem is that good.
"She appeared,
as if floating just above the
pebble laden pathway
with her arms outstretched
fingers on both hands signaling
an invitation to
come - come here..."
Worthy of six stars, but I have no more.
Take care and good health, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Thanks much good and worthy friend.
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:) Bob
Comment from Ben B.
I believe eve is capital in "All Hallows Eve" and I'm not sure if "Allhalloween" is even a real word in that last sentence. That being said this is a great poem perfect for the Halloween season.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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I believe eve is capital in "All Hallows Eve" and I'm not sure if "Allhalloween" is even a real word in that last sentence. That being said this is a great poem perfect for the Halloween season.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2020
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Ben. yes the english form of the word was original as Allhalloween, I checked my word source.