Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 54 "Lover's Quarrel"Musings of an old man -2020
25 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Wonderful, Jim. I love this Minute form and think you did a superb job in the 8-4-4-4 requirement. Your meter flows very well and I know that it is true that the committee always chooses those who write Minutes in Iambic... its in the rules :). Great job with this.
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Wonderful, Jim. I love this Minute form and think you did a superb job in the 8-4-4-4 requirement. Your meter flows very well and I know that it is true that the committee always chooses those who write Minutes in Iambic... its in the rules :). Great job with this.
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Thanks to Jim and youI am slowly gaining ground on meter, thankfully. Have splendid weekend.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear JLR, you have picked a great theme and the perfect matching illustration for this minute poem contest submission. The meat in this poem lies I think, in the second stanza; for that is where they can change and direct the rest of the relationship.
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Dear JLR, you have picked a great theme and the perfect matching illustration for this minute poem contest submission. The meat in this poem lies I think, in the second stanza; for that is where they can change and direct the rest of the relationship.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Suzanna, thank you, I am very excited to have completed my first iambic metered poem.
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Yea for you! Doesn?t it feel great to have accomplished something that you have wanted to master for some time?
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Wow! You cracked the meter! I am so impressed and delighted with your minute poem! I loved the sentiments and your careful choice of words, it has to be a six from me, love Dolly x
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Wow! You cracked the meter! I am so impressed and delighted with your minute poem! I loved the sentiments and your careful choice of words, it has to be a six from me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Dolly, I am gushing with gratitude for your six-star review. Jim has been nothing but a huge asset and bringing me into the fold with his classes.
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I knew Jim would help you! You have so much to offer and I can see you soaring with the meter now, best of luck x x x
Comment from Cynthia Adams1
You did such an excellent job. You made your poem fit perfectly within the Minute poem format without restraining its beat or meaning.
I didn't love the artwork. It is fine for a carnival or frivolous entertainment but I don't think it is in keeping with the tone and language of the poem, which speaks to an historical time long-gone.
None-the-less, terrific job.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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You did such an excellent job. You made your poem fit perfectly within the Minute poem format without restraining its beat or meaning.
I didn't love the artwork. It is fine for a carnival or frivolous entertainment but I don't think it is in keeping with the tone and language of the poem, which speaks to an historical time long-gone.
None-the-less, terrific job.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Cynthia, I agree I did some digging and found a good one.
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Ah..much improved.
Comment from amada
Great take in the usual he said, she said. I am pondering in this great phrase " would they reflect upon the unsaid." This is a great mimutee poem. I was so enthralled in the poem content, I didn't notice it. Kudos to you!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Great take in the usual he said, she said. I am pondering in this great phrase " would they reflect upon the unsaid." This is a great mimutee poem. I was so enthralled in the poem content, I didn't notice it. Kudos to you!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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amada, that is very nice...thank you for your review and comments.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your Minute poem is precise. How realistic the imagery becomes with your well-chosen words. The circumstances vary, that's for sure, but there are always so many unintended words that roil the atmosphere and make it hard to renege.
Ralf
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Your Minute poem is precise. How realistic the imagery becomes with your well-chosen words. The circumstances vary, that's for sure, but there are always so many unintended words that roil the atmosphere and make it hard to renege.
Ralf
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Ralf, I do thank you for your review!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your minute poem very well describes the decision so many warring, unhappy couples must make: Can this relationship possible be salvaged?
Would it even be worth the effort?
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Your minute poem very well describes the decision so many warring, unhappy couples must make: Can this relationship possible be salvaged?
Would it even be worth the effort?
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Janice, only if they learn the Golden Rule of any relationship, honest and open dialogue.
Comment from Mastery
Good morning, Jim. I've not seen too many of these Minute poems before. I must say it truly has a different tone and structure. Your lines are very effective in this though:
"Wouldst they reflect upon unsaid
thoughts each misread,
while stings persist
amid clinched fists?"
Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Good morning, Jim. I've not seen too many of these Minute poems before. I must say it truly has a different tone and structure. Your lines are very effective in this though:
"Wouldst they reflect upon unsaid
thoughts each misread,
while stings persist
amid clinched fists?"
Good luck in the contest, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Thank you kind sir...now off we go into the chilly days of November.
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Ugh! Bob
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Ugh! Bob
Comment from Victoria...
Love the feel of this poem, a poem out of time. Although it is very short, the language makes me find it reminiscent of "To His Coy Mistress" by Andrew Marvel.
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Love the feel of this poem, a poem out of time. Although it is very short, the language makes me find it reminiscent of "To His Coy Mistress" by Andrew Marvel.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Victoria, you honor me by such a reflective comparison, Enjoy your weekend to its Highest and Best offerings.
Comment from Pantygynt
A neat little minute this one. It tells it like it is but, in the final twenty seconds it shows how disaster can be avoided but, just as it took two to quarrel it also takes two to tango.
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A neat little minute this one. It tells it like it is but, in the final twenty seconds it shows how disaster can be avoided but, just as it took two to quarrel it also takes two to tango.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2020
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Ah my good teacher, I am very grateful for your talented teaching abilities. I will be back in yet another class when offered.
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The next one will be in January on Sonnets. Soon to be open for bookings.