Genius in Love
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Comment from RGstar
Only you could construct such in such an avant garde way, new and well thought through.
I remember my favorite Sci-Fi from you a few years ago.
You never fail to deliver.
Bravo.
Best wishes Jay.
RG
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Only you could construct such in such an avant garde way, new and well thought through.
I remember my favorite Sci-Fi from you a few years ago.
You never fail to deliver.
Bravo.
Best wishes Jay.
RG
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you, RG. Your words mean so much to me. Your six couldn't be lovelier, either. LOL.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Jay, this is a story and a half. They are playing with his mind, and he is struggling with coming out of childhood. It's all an insult on his sense of self.
What a clever piece of writing. I enjoyed. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Hi Jay, this is a story and a half. They are playing with his mind, and he is struggling with coming out of childhood. It's all an insult on his sense of self.
What a clever piece of writing. I enjoyed. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Bless you, Ulla. So good to have you on my team. Bless you, friend. The six stars is sterling!
Comment from tfawcus
This is a marvellous description of the tug between the safety of childhood and the adventure of growing up. Shades of Peter Pan!
I should mention that I have only just noticed the significance of Cillila Queez name! I must be rather dull-witted. Talking of soliloquies, Hamlet has your plot pretty well stitched up: "To be, or not to be?" That is the crux of the matter.
I'm rooting for Cornelius, the musical genius, and his budding romance with Jennie Jax.
I am in two minds about autism. Is it an affliction or a blessing? I couldn't help googling famous people on the autism spectrum. A galaxy of stars from every walk of life. Mind you, now I know why I had such a struggle reading Ulysses!
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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This is a marvellous description of the tug between the safety of childhood and the adventure of growing up. Shades of Peter Pan!
I should mention that I have only just noticed the significance of Cillila Queez name! I must be rather dull-witted. Talking of soliloquies, Hamlet has your plot pretty well stitched up: "To be, or not to be?" That is the crux of the matter.
I'm rooting for Cornelius, the musical genius, and his budding romance with Jennie Jax.
I am in two minds about autism. Is it an affliction or a blessing? I couldn't help googling famous people on the autism spectrum. A galaxy of stars from every walk of life. Mind you, now I know why I had such a struggle reading Ulysses!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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You are only the second to mention it. It almost has to be said aloud with both names for it to register. Romance a-comin', as much as you can expect from a couple of 12 year-olds ,one with autism. THanks, friend for the six stars.
Comment from amahra
This was a great chapter, Jay. It confused me at first because I began in late chapters. But after sticking with it, I started to take sides and pull for Cililla to kick Pidely Po out on his Pidely Poof. And she did. Talk about her wisdom. She knew exactly how to get Corny away from this immaturity that would steal forever his musical gift. She knew those male hormones were kicking his butt from that lingering Jennie Jax kiss. BRAVO! Cililla.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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This was a great chapter, Jay. It confused me at first because I began in late chapters. But after sticking with it, I started to take sides and pull for Cililla to kick Pidely Po out on his Pidely Poof. And she did. Talk about her wisdom. She knew exactly how to get Corny away from this immaturity that would steal forever his musical gift. She knew those male hormones were kicking his butt from that lingering Jennie Jax kiss. BRAVO! Cililla.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Amahra for your kind words. This was a crazy chapter, with a simple, corny, love will conquer answer.
Comment from royowen
Ther seems to be a transition going on with Cornelius, going through puberty with an attractive image in Cilila and a dirty minded development in Pidley Poo, so this is the how people with a rich internal life behave, beautifully written Jay, an excellent script, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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Ther seems to be a transition going on with Cornelius, going through puberty with an attractive image in Cilila and a dirty minded development in Pidley Poo, so this is the how people with a rich internal life behave, beautifully written Jay, an excellent script, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2021
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As always, Roy, glad you stuck with this scene, in fact, all the scenes and are finding the script worthwhile. Thank you so much.
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Good job Jay
Comment from lancellot
Your story in getting deeper and deeper.
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{but also}, look at how he's dressed
-Also, look at how he's dressed.
-Your main character (Cornelius) are you sure he's Autistic? Or does he have Schizophrenia. Everything he does, see and hears relates more to schizophrenia, than autism. His being a musical genius is a separate thing. (See: A Beautiful Mind)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Your story in getting deeper and deeper.
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{but also}, look at how he's dressed
-Also, look at how he's dressed.
-Your main character (Cornelius) are you sure he's Autistic? Or does he have Schizophrenia. Everything he does, see and hears relates more to schizophrenia, than autism. His being a musical genius is a separate thing. (See: A Beautiful Mind)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I'm not sure of anything about Cornelius, only that he's hurting and can't adequately communicate it with others. Also, he's a musical genius. I wish now I'd made him a poetic genius because, while I know precious little about poetry, I know far less about music. I will make a go of what I've done, however. Thanks for the heads up on that conjunction. It doesn't need to be there.
I appreciate your reading and your thoughts, Lance. Good to have you reading my post. I was afraid I'd offended you some how.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am guessing we just witnessed the loss of PIDELY-POO. Cornelius was in danger of losing himself deep within this horrible disability. You are doing a wonderful job describing it.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I am guessing we just witnessed the loss of PIDELY-POO. Cornelius was in danger of losing himself deep within this horrible disability. You are doing a wonderful job describing it.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Barbara. Interesting, Pidely's "demise". That last exit was only tacked on 15 minutes before posting. I felt he needed his proper exit. And by Cornelius's and Cililla's total immersion in the moment and not even aware of Pidely's exit, it seemed perfect to show that he would no longer be an anchor in Cornelius's life. Thanks for reading, Barbara. Your support is always honored.
Comment from Senyai
Hi Jay,
Omg! I didn't expect this, but it has ended well for Cornie! I should have trusted Cililla Queez, but I wasn't sure where she was going with her sweet talk at first. But in Scene 8 she delivered. Her tears for Cornie showed her true colors and Pidely-Poo showed his by creeping up Cililla's skirt and blaming it on Cornie, telling Cornie he was naughty. Pidely didn't have Cornie's best interest at heart like I earlier thought he did.
Cililla forecast his doom with a slip of her tongue - Pidely-Poof!
Brilliant, Jay ... this very different story of the mental fight of a young boy's psyche to grown into a man is just as important for an autistic child as well .... Which your highly original and creative script has shown. Pidely-Poof crumpling on the floor like a marionette without a master (because Cornie wasn't even looking at him any more) was priceless. No longer fed by Cornie's child-mind, Pidely poofed. Even with all the humor, you treated the subject of autism with such gentle honesty I found amazing.
"Good bidily-bye." Too perfect!
I really really loved this heart warming coming of age story.
Masterfully done. I would love to see the stage production come to a town near me (Texas). Let me know when it does :-)
Always,
Senyai
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Hi Jay,
Omg! I didn't expect this, but it has ended well for Cornie! I should have trusted Cililla Queez, but I wasn't sure where she was going with her sweet talk at first. But in Scene 8 she delivered. Her tears for Cornie showed her true colors and Pidely-Poo showed his by creeping up Cililla's skirt and blaming it on Cornie, telling Cornie he was naughty. Pidely didn't have Cornie's best interest at heart like I earlier thought he did.
Cililla forecast his doom with a slip of her tongue - Pidely-Poof!
Brilliant, Jay ... this very different story of the mental fight of a young boy's psyche to grown into a man is just as important for an autistic child as well .... Which your highly original and creative script has shown. Pidely-Poof crumpling on the floor like a marionette without a master (because Cornie wasn't even looking at him any more) was priceless. No longer fed by Cornie's child-mind, Pidely poofed. Even with all the humor, you treated the subject of autism with such gentle honesty I found amazing.
"Good bidily-bye." Too perfect!
I really really loved this heart warming coming of age story.
Masterfully done. I would love to see the stage production come to a town near me (Texas). Let me know when it does :-)
Always,
Senyai
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I must tell you, Senyai, that read your review with open mouth. When I went to the reviewer recommendation screen to reward you, I realized I would have to instead tell you you will be recommended next month. Then I went to my sheet for next month's recommendations and discovered you were already on it. The only one to date. That just shows the consistency of your powerful critiques. Bless you!
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Aww, thanks so much, Jay. I appreciate the good word.
But I?m still marveling over Cornie, Pidely and Cililla :-)
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I lived a spell in San Antonio and Austin. You're not likely to see this go to stage, though. That calls for a younger man's energies.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Your imagination and words have not failed you, Jay. This is splendid. You've found the way to get Cornelius moving into puberty without the draw of Pidely-poo from his childhood. Such fun to read.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Your imagination and words have not failed you, Jay. This is splendid. You've found the way to get Cornelius moving into puberty without the draw of Pidely-poo from his childhood. Such fun to read.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Judy, so much for your encouragement and loyalty and for finding the true purpose in each scene. And for the six! Wow! I only tagged on the last part with Pidely-Poo's exit fifteen minutes before posting. I had ended it with Cornelius's seeing Jennie Jax through the window. But I realized that Pidely Poo deserved a grand exit in keeping with his flamboyant nature. He is the id, you know. I decided that with his exit I wanted him to be the next thing to dissolved. Like the Wicked witch in "Wizzard of Oz" But the marionette idea was perfect for that. And the fact that Cornelius and Cililla were not even aware of it. Yes, Pidely's gone now.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Another interesting script from you which I read with great interest. I am touched by the character of Cornelius. Kids with autism are going to one day be adults with autism. Therefore, the role of parents is very important within the community. You've captured a moment in time when Cornelius could have been locked away in his mind forever. I am yet to come to terms with the script, stage management etc. So, sorry if I am unable to comment on them.Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Another interesting script from you which I read with great interest. I am touched by the character of Cornelius. Kids with autism are going to one day be adults with autism. Therefore, the role of parents is very important within the community. You've captured a moment in time when Cornelius could have been locked away in his mind forever. I am yet to come to terms with the script, stage management etc. So, sorry if I am unable to comment on them.Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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I appreciate your candor more than anything, Seshadri. I'm so out of my depth with this script. But that's how we grow. I'm trying to crack into Cornelius's mind, indirectly, through others. And it's not easy. Thank you for hanging in there and trying.