Secrets in the Wind
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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
They are almost there, but not quite. They will have to get to Sofia quickly, or else she'll be gone as per instructions from her son, Miguel. So
the next few hours are crucial in many ways.
Ralf
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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They are almost there, but not quite. They will have to get to Sofia quickly, or else she'll be gone as per instructions from her son, Miguel. So
the next few hours are crucial in many ways.
Ralf
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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Yes, they better hurry or she will be gone with all the information and the money for Mason. She has no idea what she is getting herself into that's for sure.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I have no sympathy for father Jon, but I hope his information we get them there in time to save Annie. But, I'm guessing that my softhearted writer friend would never let anything happen to her. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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I have no sympathy for father Jon, but I hope his information we get them there in time to save Annie. But, I'm guessing that my softhearted writer friend would never let anything happen to her. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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I couldn't do that...though Tito would most definitely like to get rid of Annie somehow. And Miguel is shot so who knows what will happen. I guess we wait and see where my fingers and mind take us. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Judy Lawless
I'm glad that with each chapter things are getting a little bit better, a little bit closer to finding Annie, at least. Then there is Mason and the people he has working for him. Good writing, Carol.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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I'm glad that with each chapter things are getting a little bit better, a little bit closer to finding Annie, at least. Then there is Mason and the people he has working for him. Good writing, Carol.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2021
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thank you, Judy...Yes we are getting closer to solving the cases and bringing the family back together. I am glad that you enjoyed it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I was hoping Jon wouldn't die, but maybe you know best. I guess he's got too much dirt on his hands. You know where you need to take this story and I know you end it right. I'm looking forward to more.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I was hoping Jon wouldn't die, but maybe you know best. I guess he's got too much dirt on his hands. You know where you need to take this story and I know you end it right. I'm looking forward to more.
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I couldn't decide either, but then I decided he would be in prison, and the women (Faith, Liz, Mary, and Cassidy needed a fresh start). It was difficult to decide, but then my research said it was difficult to survive a gunshot wound to the abdomen....I have a few who are real sticklers for reality ... so he was finished. LOL
Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Well, another great chapter, full of pain and family emotions. So many questions. Why is Miguel still holding the girl? He knows Mason has betrayed him. The slim hope of bargaining with her. Will Sofia linger a while to be taken into custody? Will she talk? If so, to save her son, rather than than Annie.
Great work.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Well, another great chapter, full of pain and family emotions. So many questions. Why is Miguel still holding the girl? He knows Mason has betrayed him. The slim hope of bargaining with her. Will Sofia linger a while to be taken into custody? Will she talk? If so, to save her son, rather than than Annie.
Great work.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Wow! I am thrilled how well this chapter has gone over with everyone so far...especially since I respect your writing so much. I don't think Miguel expected Mason to betray him and now he's trying to find ways to make a little leverage so he isn't blamed for everything. Guess we hope that the Sheriff and Tango get to Sofia before she leaves. Thanks so much for the awesome review and stars.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I read both chapters, one after the other, I'll go back and review part 51 after this. I couldn't wait to read on!! This was mind-blowing, I was holding my breath willing him to talk. Did he give enough? Will Miguels mother still be there? Or has she done as Miguel told her. OOOOOH I can't wait to find out!! Well done, Carol. Another fabulous chapter. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I read both chapters, one after the other, I'll go back and review part 51 after this. I couldn't wait to read on!! This was mind-blowing, I was holding my breath willing him to talk. Did he give enough? Will Miguels mother still be there? Or has she done as Miguel told her. OOOOOH I can't wait to find out!! Well done, Carol. Another fabulous chapter. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Oh I am so excited...I couldn't wait for your review...and you made me giggle when you didn't have time to review chapter 51 because you wanted to read what's next. Hurrah! I hoped the emotions played true as Jon was dying. I figured he wouldn't be able to talk much so I used the flickering of the eyes, praying it would seem realistic. I am happy!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
What an emotional chapter! Great writing! I'm glad Jon's last words were to Mary, asking her forgiveness. I'm surprised Mary was able to forgive him. It's good Annie is still fighting her captors. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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What an emotional chapter! Great writing! I'm glad Jon's last words were to Mary, asking her forgiveness. I'm surprised Mary was able to forgive him. It's good Annie is still fighting her captors. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you, Carol. I wanted to make sure that Jon had a chance to repent and ask forgiveness and that Mary (being the person she is) could at least say she forgave him.... even if she will harbor the pain. I thank you for the splendid review and the stars!
Amazing!!! Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome. I imagine Mary would harbor the pain for the rest of her life, wondering what might have been. Great chapter!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You did a great job with the emotion and the action here.
"Tito, there's rope in the closet. You can tie her up and lock her in the bedroom." Miguel took out (There's a formatting issue here and the rest of this sentence goes into the information about you under your picture. I'm sure there's anything you can do."
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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You did a great job with the emotion and the action here.
"Tito, there's rope in the closet. You can tie her up and lock her in the bedroom." Miguel took out (There's a formatting issue here and the rest of this sentence goes into the information about you under your picture. I'm sure there's anything you can do."
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Barbara. And thanks for pointing out the problem with the formatting. All I could do is split up the sentences and then it was readable.
Smiles, Carol