Utterly Alone
Haibun Suite for the Club (Warning: suicide topic)17 total reviews
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh, my dearest Gypsy, what you had to endure! I can't believe how much suffering and pain, both physical and emotional, you went through. But I am glad you didn't break you, it made you stronger, and now you are a wonderful poet, a teacher, an educator and much more.
A wonderful Haibun. I enjoyed both prose and poetry. Excellent imagery and visuals.
These stood out:
Grass Valley's sunrise
of violet, amber, and pink --
blue iris of hope
A stunning work.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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Oh, my dearest Gypsy, what you had to endure! I can't believe how much suffering and pain, both physical and emotional, you went through. But I am glad you didn't break you, it made you stronger, and now you are a wonderful poet, a teacher, an educator and much more.
A wonderful Haibun. I enjoyed both prose and poetry. Excellent imagery and visuals.
These stood out:
Grass Valley's sunrise
of violet, amber, and pink --
blue iris of hope
A stunning work.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2021
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My friend, thank you very much for your exceptional review, six stars, and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
Sobering and heart-wrenching haibun. This is a reality for some. I hope it's not your story. But there are times every every human soul when hopelessness leads to drastic actions. But with faith, one can keep pressing on "with destination unknown" but not "utterly alone" because God is near.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Sobering and heart-wrenching haibun. This is a reality for some. I hope it's not your story. But there are times every every human soul when hopelessness leads to drastic actions. But with faith, one can keep pressing on "with destination unknown" but not "utterly alone" because God is near.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Yes, it's based on my real life. Probably my lowest place in life. I experienced highs and lows of bipolar disease. But I'm good now. I'm more mature and understand the value of staying on my medication.
Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars!
Gypsy hugs
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Oh my goodness! That's scary. So thankful that you came out of it okay and that your meds are helping you! 💖
Comment from Mimi Linny
The format of this type of poem is very interesting and I thought that the way you worded each stanza flowed smoothly from one to the next. Though the topic was sad and left you with an open ending, it dealt with the realities that many face in life. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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The format of this type of poem is very interesting and I thought that the way you worded each stanza flowed smoothly from one to the next. Though the topic was sad and left you with an open ending, it dealt with the realities that many face in life. Nicely done.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This biographical poetry speaks how sadly you attempted to commit suicide by taking all pills at a café and survived after hospitalization; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This biographical poetry speaks how sadly you attempted to commit suicide by taking all pills at a café and survived after hospitalization; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this. ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's got some depth to it. I hope this was not you. This poem grabs you right by the throat. What can society do to prevent things this from happening?
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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That's got some depth to it. I hope this was not you. This poem grabs you right by the throat. What can society do to prevent things this from happening?
Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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It's based on my life experience. I am bipolar. It's a harsh illness but I'm doing better.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from mermaids
This is one of the best haibun I have read. The suicide theme is a result of the individual's depression at not being able to obtain a job. Excellent poetic form that adds to the theme of loneliness and feeling alone.
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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This is one of the best haibun I have read. The suicide theme is a result of the individual's depression at not being able to obtain a job. Excellent poetic form that adds to the theme of loneliness and feeling alone.
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Elaine, thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
I think when we survey our life or death choices, death is surrendering to hopelessness, emotional instability, but the say that we have hit bottom before we can go up, I'm glad I never quite made it to the bottom, a very dramatic haibun indeed, but you said it wasn't fiction. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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I think when we survey our life or death choices, death is surrendering to hopelessness, emotional instability, but the say that we have hit bottom before we can go up, I'm glad I never quite made it to the bottom, a very dramatic haibun indeed, but you said it wasn't fiction. Beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much for the detailed review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs
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Good job