Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "A Childs imaginings"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
A well written, beautiful piece of artistry in your poem!
I adore this type of poetry, as some seems to be left to the reader's imagination. I love the poem & I love your writing! Thank you for this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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A well written, beautiful piece of artistry in your poem!
I adore this type of poetry, as some seems to be left to the reader's imagination. I love the poem & I love your writing! Thank you for this lovely poem.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Thank you Debi
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-I like the formatting of your poem.
-Excellent imagery and alliteration
as you describe the "young lad" and his adventures.
-I like how you include imagination while
reading this book with the fairies and dragons.
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-One thing you forgot was the rhyme.
-Otherwise, very good, but it reads
well the way it is if you don't want to change it.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Jim.
-I like the formatting of your poem.
-Excellent imagery and alliteration
as you describe the "young lad" and his adventures.
-I like how you include imagination while
reading this book with the fairies and dragons.
-A very good concluding verse, too.
-One thing you forgot was the rhyme.
-Otherwise, very good, but it reads
well the way it is if you don't want to change it.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Hi Pam While not perfect, did enjoy this first cube experience. I appreciate your every word.
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You are welcome, Jim. I think you have the right idea of enjoying the experience. I liked your poem the way it was.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi JLR,
This is the kind of story I would have like to hear as a child on a raining day before I went off to play in the puddles. Fanacy is my favorite genre to read and watch.
Well done cube poem for the potlach club.
Keep writng and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Hi JLR,
This is the kind of story I would have like to hear as a child on a raining day before I went off to play in the puddles. Fanacy is my favorite genre to read and watch.
Well done cube poem for the potlach club.
Keep writng and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Jan, thanks!
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No problem, JLR.
Joan
Comment from Ritasher
What a fun type of poem it is! Something in the way you write here feels like a tongue twister for me. With that, I get a sense of childhood memories flashing by, which is a good thing considering the title. Well done and keep writing!
Rita
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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What a fun type of poem it is! Something in the way you write here feels like a tongue twister for me. With that, I get a sense of childhood memories flashing by, which is a good thing considering the title. Well done and keep writing!
Rita
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Rita, thanks reading and commenting on this.
Comment from royowen
Some excellent alliteration and some great crafting and pcision in your crafting of this cube poetry form, I love the lighthearted way you went about this Jim, well done, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Some excellent alliteration and some great crafting and pcision in your crafting of this cube poetry form, I love the lighthearted way you went about this Jim, well done, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Smiling back with a grateful heart, thanks much Jim
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Bless you
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there
Whilst I like this piece, I think as a cube 16 poem it's a little off the mark. the rhyming scheme hasn't been employed at all which I think is one of its defining characteristics.
I love the onomatopoeic aspects in the verse, they add a nice feel.
All the best
GMG
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reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Hi there
Whilst I like this piece, I think as a cube 16 poem it's a little off the mark. the rhyming scheme hasn't been employed at all which I think is one of its defining characteristics.
I love the onomatopoeic aspects in the verse, they add a nice feel.
All the best
GMG
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Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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GMG. , While not perfect, I did enjoy this first cube experience. I appreciate your every word.