Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Interesting entry.

notes:

It would be nice to retire, but it wasn't just himself he had to worry about[.]

The new buyer had great plans, he was going to knock some walls {done} and brighten the place with fire and brimstone.

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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice image for your story.
-You wrote a good story with a good topic.
-A good opening paragraph with the
key word being 'tempted.'
-The next paragraph follows it well
with effective imagery and "fire and brimstone!"
-A good question and an excellent twist at the end.
-Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 26-Apr-2022

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello mystery writer, a Good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 100 word story entry, you executed it well, very creative. Good job and good luck in the contest


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