Hide the Salami
an 80-word story13 total reviews
Comment from Erika Seshadri
To be honest, I didn't care much for the story. BUT I giggled at the title because it reminded me of the time my husband took the kiddos out to see a movie. He called and said they were going to see "Sausage Party," and I freaked out and told him it was for adults. His reply? "But how? It's animated." Disaster narrowly avoided. Bahahaha.
Cheers.
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reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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To be honest, I didn't care much for the story. BUT I giggled at the title because it reminded me of the time my husband took the kiddos out to see a movie. He called and said they were going to see "Sausage Party," and I freaked out and told him it was for adults. His reply? "But how? It's animated." Disaster narrowly avoided. Bahahaha.
Cheers.
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Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thanks, Erika, for giving this a look.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, interesting. You did a good painting the scene. You got in all the needed elements. But, if you are using none sexual terms (hide the salami) , then you don't need the warnings.
The ending does leave a bit of mystery. But again, you displayed no actual violence. so, why the warning?
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reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Hmm, interesting. You did a good painting the scene. You got in all the needed elements. But, if you are using none sexual terms (hide the salami) , then you don't need the warnings.
The ending does leave a bit of mystery. But again, you displayed no actual violence. so, why the warning?
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Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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People know when their senses have been assaulted. Warnings that seem unwarranted may be symptoms of our desensitization.
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As you wish.
Comment from LisaMay
oooh... this is chillingly good. I guess Sheila isn't smiling anymore. Porn, betrayal, murder, all wrapped into a tight little story full of suspense and intrigue.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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oooh... this is chillingly good. I guess Sheila isn't smiling anymore. Porn, betrayal, murder, all wrapped into a tight little story full of suspense and intrigue.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I changed the last two words to "his wife" instead of "the police". What do you think? Or maybe "his brother"?
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Sorry for late reply, just got back to my computer. I think your story should remain with ''the police''... other options seem confusing.