Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from eliz100
You have hit the ball out of the park, as usual. You have moved the story along nicely. You have done a great job in describing the early relationship between Ali and Cord. I do not see any room for improvement.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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You have hit the ball out of the park, as usual. You have moved the story along nicely. You have done a great job in describing the early relationship between Ali and Cord. I do not see any room for improvement.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
What are you going to do with those two? Both Ali and Cord are so supersensitive. Ali's giving Joyce too much credit. If Cord says they're done, believe it. I'm glad Ali is going to meet with the women that Pat assaulted. Maybe that'll remind her she is a lawyer. Rosa helps things along by asking Cord to take her to the meeting. Great characterizations. Hope the meeting will yield some results. Pat needs to be prosecuted, the way he's been preying on women. judi
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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What are you going to do with those two? Both Ali and Cord are so supersensitive. Ali's giving Joyce too much credit. If Cord says they're done, believe it. I'm glad Ali is going to meet with the women that Pat assaulted. Maybe that'll remind her she is a lawyer. Rosa helps things along by asking Cord to take her to the meeting. Great characterizations. Hope the meeting will yield some results. Pat needs to be prosecuted, the way he's been preying on women. judi
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good work. The dialogue seems natural.
I can't see Ali crying about a past girlfriend, though. I thought she was a bit tougher than that.
Best wishes and good luck with the book.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Good work. The dialogue seems natural.
I can't see Ali crying about a past girlfriend, though. I thought she was a bit tougher than that.
Best wishes and good luck with the book.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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The was hurt really bad by her fiance and is trying to overcome.
Comment from estory
You're keeping up this great style, very unique in many ways, of this down to earth storytelling mostly through dialogue. Sorry I can't keep up as much as I'd like. We have alot to deal with between dad and the house right now. estory
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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You're keeping up this great style, very unique in many ways, of this down to earth storytelling mostly through dialogue. Sorry I can't keep up as much as I'd like. We have alot to deal with between dad and the house right now. estory
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I understand. Thank you for dropping by.
Comment from Annmuma
And the story continues to be well written and well told! the characters are outlined and identified so well that the reader has no problem deciding where they stand in every situation. good job. ann
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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And the story continues to be well written and well told! the characters are outlined and identified so well that the reader has no problem deciding where they stand in every situation. good job. ann
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoyed this post as I do all of them. Alexandra seem unsure of their relationship in spite of what Cord has told her. I guess Joyce seen to beautiful and sure of herself. It didn't should as though she had changed he mind about living in this place so I don't think she and Cord would make it even if Ali wasn't around.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I enjoyed this post as I do all of them. Alexandra seem unsure of their relationship in spite of what Cord has told her. I guess Joyce seen to beautiful and sure of herself. It didn't should as though she had changed he mind about living in this place so I don't think she and Cord would make it even if Ali wasn't around.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. Lots of emotions and stuff. Unfortunately, the SIXES are all gone seeing this is a bit late. Keep it all coming, still great reading as always.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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This was a great chapter. Lots of emotions and stuff. Unfortunately, the SIXES are all gone seeing this is a bit late. Keep it all coming, still great reading as always.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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No problem. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
I had missed the previous chapter,so I read that first .I liked the way the association of Cordero and Ali progressing -this is the right way. Joyce ,the bad penny has come back but I am sure she can't upset the strong foundation of their feelings.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I had missed the previous chapter,so I read that first .I liked the way the association of Cordero and Ali progressing -this is the right way. Joyce ,the bad penny has come back but I am sure she can't upset the strong foundation of their feelings.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Fine chapter and as always, Barbara, your fine dialogue really intensifies the story. Just a few things below:
"Wiping her hands on a [dishtowel] is one word.
"She tears...[Her] tears crept down her cheek."
"Neither of you [are] sure where it's going. As in ...neither 'one' [is] sure [I added the word 'one' for your understanding.]
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Fine chapter and as always, Barbara, your fine dialogue really intensifies the story. Just a few things below:
"Wiping her hands on a [dishtowel] is one word.
"She tears...[Her] tears crept down her cheek."
"Neither of you [are] sure where it's going. As in ...neither 'one' [is] sure [I added the word 'one' for your understanding.]
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the help. I made the corrections.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm confident we haven't seen the last of Joyce, even though she won't be having dinner with Cord.
Alexandra glanced outside at where Codero always parked [... where CORDERO always parked...]
He jogged to Alexandra's room and knocked. [Would he jog?]
Cordero exhaled and then his eyes met his dads. [... his eyes med his DAD'S]
Happily, I saved a six for you. A rarity past the weekend.
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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I'm confident we haven't seen the last of Joyce, even though she won't be having dinner with Cord.
Alexandra glanced outside at where Codero always parked [... where CORDERO always parked...]
He jogged to Alexandra's room and knocked. [Would he jog?]
Cordero exhaled and then his eyes met his dads. [... his eyes med his DAD'S]
Happily, I saved a six for you. A rarity past the weekend.
Comment Written 25-May-2022
reply by the author on 25-May-2022
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Thank you for the help. I appreciate it and made the corrections.