Jump Ball
One of the best days of my life.15 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
This is inspirational! I love it when parents play with their kids, and the delight you feel - although rather concerned about measuring up - comes through with impact in the last sentence.
I hope you didn't have a heart attack and actually end up in Heaven!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
This is inspirational! I love it when parents play with their kids, and the delight you feel - although rather concerned about measuring up - comes through with impact in the last sentence.
I hope you didn't have a heart attack and actually end up in Heaven!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks, LisaMay. I played against my son and with my son in that league for many years.
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Good for you... keeping the fitness and skill level up.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I love this! Especially the last phrase, I am in heaven. What a wonderful way to end this short-to-point piece! A hundred-word flash story is hard to write and you have it down to a science!
I wasn't sure I would like this, being sports and all but I loved it, hands down!
Too bad I don't have any sixes to give you!
Thanks for sharing your talent!
Jesse
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
I love this! Especially the last phrase, I am in heaven. What a wonderful way to end this short-to-point piece! A hundred-word flash story is hard to write and you have it down to a science!
I wasn't sure I would like this, being sports and all but I loved it, hands down!
Too bad I don't have any sixes to give you!
Thanks for sharing your talent!
Jesse
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jesse. I have been fortunate to do many things with my son over the years.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and story to go with it.
-Thanks for the note; it makes
a difference for the ending.
-You describe the game well
as they set up and the referee
makes sure everyone is ready to play.
-You describe the players well.
-The ending is very good.
-Good luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
-Nice artwork and story to go with it.
-Thanks for the note; it makes
a difference for the ending.
-You describe the game well
as they set up and the referee
makes sure everyone is ready to play.
-You describe the players well.
-The ending is very good.
-Good luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Pam. It sounds like you know the game.
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You are welcome. A little bit but don't follow it anymore except the NCAA tournament!
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love that you use your hundred words to lead up to the pivotal moment, and then leave a couple of hints before letting us continue the scene in our heads. Great building of tension and excitement.
Mike
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
I love that you use your hundred words to lead up to the pivotal moment, and then leave a couple of hints before letting us continue the scene in our heads. Great building of tension and excitement.
Mike
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Mike. I use to jump center when I was younger.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
True, just be careful. At this point, you are doing great. It makes you feel good. It sounds like fun. And you get to be with your son. Thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
True, just be careful. At this point, you are doing great. It makes you feel good. It sounds like fun. And you get to be with your son. Thank you for sharing. Have a great weekend.
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Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Carolyn. That was a few years ago. I think about doing it again, but my son is too old now.
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You are welcome.