The Boatman
How far can one get with cheek?35 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Congratulations on winning the contest. Nice blue ribbon you have... The script was well thought out. Clearly written. Good mix of narration with dialogues. Excellent work. Nice :)
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Congratulations on winning the contest. Nice blue ribbon you have... The script was well thought out. Clearly written. Good mix of narration with dialogues. Excellent work. Nice :)
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much - I'm really glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from jessizero
Writers, huh? I enjoyed your story. You surprised me with the end. I am glad you won; you definitely earned it. Thanks for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Writers, huh? I enjoyed your story. You surprised me with the end. I am glad you won; you definitely earned it. Thanks for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much :-). I had a lot of fun with this one.
Mike
Comment from damommy
When the Boatman comes for me, I will definitely not mention that I've tried my hand at writing. He would axe me at first sight. This cheeky man did nothing to help himself with his banter. Good story.
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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When the Boatman comes for me, I will definitely not mention that I've tried my hand at writing. He would axe me at first sight. This cheeky man did nothing to help himself with his banter. Good story.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2022
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Thank you :-). This was a lot of fun to write!
Mike
Comment from DragonSkulls
Hahaha. This is an awesome entry, Mike. I'm glad to see how much thought was put into it...unlike my own. Lol Great creative writing and accompanying pic. I'm reviewing for the originality, description and humor, not the cash. Just wanted to be sure you knew that. I'd say best of luck but clearly it's not needed. Haha. Great piece, M.
Ron
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Hahaha. This is an awesome entry, Mike. I'm glad to see how much thought was put into it...unlike my own. Lol Great creative writing and accompanying pic. I'm reviewing for the originality, description and humor, not the cash. Just wanted to be sure you knew that. I'd say best of luck but clearly it's not needed. Haha. Great piece, M.
Ron
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thanks so much :-). As soon as I read Tom's fun piece and saw he'd made a contest, I knew I had to enter. I wasn't planning on promoting it so high, but it's been a while since I last posted anything, so I had a stack of pumps built up, burning a hole in my Fanstory pocket!
Mike
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that was an unexpected ending. What does that axe-throwing do to a person who is already dead? I did like the allusion to Charon and the crossing of the River Styx. The lack of payment would mean that he would just wander? Enjoyed the read and hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Well, that was an unexpected ending. What does that axe-throwing do to a person who is already dead? I did like the allusion to Charon and the crossing of the River Styx. The lack of payment would mean that he would just wander? Enjoyed the read and hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you :-). Admittedly, I've taken some liberties and put my own spin on the idea, but this was more about fun than anything else/ I'm glad you liked it.
Mike
Comment from Wendy G
Dark humour and wit presented here - and your story is very imaginative. No, it doesn't pay to be a writer, does it? Well told, a good response to a fun prompt. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Dark humour and wit presented here - and your story is very imaginative. No, it doesn't pay to be a writer, does it? Well told, a good response to a fun prompt. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Wendy. I had lots of fun with this :-)
Mike
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Haha, so the writer met his match. I enjoyed your fun
contest entry, Mike. You did a great job with the characters
and the dialogue. Your words were descriptive--I could
see this as I read. The picture was a great choice.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Haha, so the writer met his match. I enjoyed your fun
contest entry, Mike. You did a great job with the characters
and the dialogue. Your words were descriptive--I could
see this as I read. The picture was a great choice.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Jan :-). I had a lot of fun writing this!
Mike
Comment from Regina Elliott
This write deserves 6 stars,
but ran out of them. Drats!
I love this afterlife humor,
very creatively weaved. I hope
you have success in the
contest. All the best. ~
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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This write deserves 6 stars,
but ran out of them. Drats!
I love this afterlife humor,
very creatively weaved. I hope
you have success in the
contest. All the best. ~
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Regina :-). This was fun to write, and lifted me from a bit of a dry spell.
Mike
Comment from royowen
I've just staggered from a story similar to a tale of the good Samaritan, only through the eyes of the victim, and came to this, two unfortunate protagonists. Both were great stories, and both very unfortunate heroes, great job good luck, Mike, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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I've just staggered from a story similar to a tale of the good Samaritan, only through the eyes of the victim, and came to this, two unfortunate protagonists. Both were great stories, and both very unfortunate heroes, great job good luck, Mike, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2022
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Thank you, Roy. I'm really glad you enjoyed it :-)
Mike
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Bless you
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I like "offering you a happy ending" Must be pretty tight in there.
Para 6, 1st sentence: SHOULD (span) be (spanned)?
Para 15, 1st sentence: (disembowelled) should be (disemboweled) one (l)
Para 16, 1st sentence: Add comma after (So) introductory word - comma
Para 23, 1st sentence: Add comma after (slumped) a comma between two clauses is best.
Well, this guy couldn't win. Already dead now an axe blade in his head? Oh well, so goes the life of a writer.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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I like "offering you a happy ending" Must be pretty tight in there.
Para 6, 1st sentence: SHOULD (span) be (spanned)?
Para 15, 1st sentence: (disembowelled) should be (disemboweled) one (l)
Para 16, 1st sentence: Add comma after (So) introductory word - comma
Para 23, 1st sentence: Add comma after (slumped) a comma between two clauses is best.
Well, this guy couldn't win. Already dead now an axe blade in his head? Oh well, so goes the life of a writer.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2022
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2022
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Thanks Gary - so glad you enjoyed this one :-). Appreciate the spag notes - I'll do a run through.
Mike